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Barbie

Barbie
from Loch
March 5, 1990

I fell in love in a biker bar
	with a girl in chocolate hair.
It swept around her like a smoky fire
	and woke up the beast in my lair.

Her bright eyes twinkled like brilliant stars
	at the end of the moonless road--
they called to me like a siren song
	to lay down my heavy load.

Tall she was like a square rigged ship
	like a mast shrouded in clouds; 
and she could dance like a foamy wave,
	making Neptune cry out loud.

But the path of a ship is a bubble
	and suddenly she was gone--
her chocolate hair and vanilla neck
	are moments in my sad song.

This siren's memory seizes me
	like cinnamon schnapps and a grin
which warm the body from the inside out
	and settle a smile on your chin.

Her dancing hair drove my clouds away
	and opened an azure sky;
and all I asked was a tall, thin ship
	and two stars to steer me by.

Among all the women I've danced with
	none are remembered so fair
as a girl who walked like a tall ship,
	and had waves of chocolate hair.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/19/2017 10:48:00 PM
This is fantastic! Your word choice and details combined with the theme of the sea makes reading this a really fun journey. Very skillfully crafted and and an absolute pleasure to read :-) blessings, lynn
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Date: 1/21/2017 3:03:00 PM
I had one like that and messed it up! Good write man!
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Date: 1/17/2017 6:22:00 AM
The poem is beautiful and has a nice flow.
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Date: 1/17/2017 6:21:00 AM
The poem is beautiful and has a nice flow.
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Date: 1/2/2017 1:52:00 AM
A wonderful romantic poem, skillfully delivered, i enjoyed the read.. ;-)
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Date: 12/23/2016 10:19:00 AM
Wonderful poem of a lovely chocolate girl with "bright eyes twinkled like brilliant stars"...Best regards and wishes and greetings of season!
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Date: 12/23/2016 9:31:00 AM
I joined PS after you quit writing poems. I love your writing. Are you going to resume?
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Date: 12/23/2016 5:09:00 AM
This is an easy 7 for me, Loch. Very romantic. Loved it!
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Date: 12/23/2016 2:36:00 AM
I love your poems as they build the picture of what it's about with a sense of rythm, I will definitely be reading more , lovely reads
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Date: 12/22/2016 10:00:00 PM
I agree I remember such girl... Wow!
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Date: 12/22/2016 6:01:00 PM
I'm just a silly old rhymer but enjoy good writing when I find it. I've read several of yours here on the soup and feel by the dates on some of them there may be many more waiting somewhere for Soup exposure. I hope you will bring us some more soon. oldbuck
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Loch David Crane
Date: 2/20/2017 4:50:00 PM
I have a book going up to 2005. Loch
Date: 12/22/2016 5:51:00 PM
This poem is so sweet and touching. Barbie seems like a mans fantasy come true. Awesome bright! Incredible!
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Date: 12/22/2016 5:38:00 PM
Barbie is amazing! I am blown away. I truly can't remember a poem that touched like this one. Truly an amazing read.
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Date: 12/22/2016 5:36:00 PM
Fine poem - with thanks to John Masefield. This was the first of yours I have read - and it makes me want to read more! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 12/22/2016 5:35:00 PM
Love it, awesome :)
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Date: 5/6/2016 11:42:00 AM
LOCH DAVID CRANE, this is an awesome poem, thank you for sharing. **skat**
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Date: 4/26/2016 6:27:00 PM
loch, Well done. Glad to read your poem today. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/18/2015 8:52:00 PM
The conscious mind extends itself beyond our norms and we enter a world composed of reality defused with imagination. Very imaginative and skillfully constructed. You use good imagery and maintain a poetic flow throughout the whole piece. Emile.
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Date: 4/20/2014 6:42:00 AM
You are fantastic, I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry. :)
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Date: 4/19/2014 10:28:00 PM
WOW, can you ever write!! This probably is the most creatively written love poem I have read all day, and I read LOTS of poems here daily. I'm gonna fave this one!! Hope you will pay me a visit. Maybe I will become a fan of yours!
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