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Call and Response Poetry Spares

I quite enjoyed writing these two line poems for the Bantu contest - the idea of the call and response with two different statements but the same sensory response to each line. A bit like a game of Mallets Mallet (for those that remember the 1980s/1990s word association game for children :) So here are the spare ones I didn't enter Sparkling spider web on the branches The sun in my eyes The howl of the wolf The descent into dreams Ladybird on the stem Polka dot dress Star strewn night sky Visits from dearly departed Wind whips and wails Busy head can't keep up Newly planted trees My children's children's shade Pain from a sprained ankle Stretched elastic Tired eyes closing Graceful birds fly overhead Splay fingers of hand Tree root steps on hillside Plates stacked for washing Clock has stopped Chairs in disarray Fence fallen down Empty boxes of cereal Echoes in the arches Swing as high as the sky Daisy chain falls to the ground Swim to the shore Reach for your hand Drink from the bottle Tilt head back and laugh Chandelier above me The tears of the stoic A warm breeze A faded memory Distant thunder rumbles Cooking pot needs turning down Coat hanger absent of clothes Collar bone awaiting necklace Mirror faces the wall, no reflection Cry out in empty house Long grass on third dry day Feathers float to earth Fractals on puddles Child's drawings Old newspapers folded and stacked First pancake on Shrove Tuesday Handlebars of bicycle Jolt in dreams first moment Wallpaper repeating pattern Scanning the crowd for familiar face Boot stuck in the mud Indecision Wind whistling in trees Chatter before the show starts Spotting a door ajar Your name heard on the breeze Diving into a pool The last moments of a nightmare Broken piece of tree bark Hair tangled from the pool Wearing new shoes Being amongst back stabbers A pot of cold custard Remembering a mistake Washing your hands Stones at the base of a waterfall Opening a tin A lurch in your stomach from a bad memory Walking on new carpet with bare feet Hesitation choosing a cake Smoke from a chimney November 6th Tweeting birds in the morning Finishing a payphone conversation before the beep Creating a hashtag Writing a Bantu Viewing a sunset Hearing you got the grades Viewing a sculpture Hands placed on shoulders Viewing a new painting you like Magic carpet ride Chopping onions Dashing for the train Opening a pistachio nut Putting on the snitch (door lock)

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Date: 3/24/2023 9:35:00 PM
Wonderful imagination at play here DD All of them so good.
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/24/2023 10:51:00 PM
Thank you, I liked thinking of these:)
Date: 3/23/2023 4:47:00 AM
Wow! So many! And here I am, struggling for that one perfect bantu, way to go, DD:)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/23/2023 12:20:00 PM
I think doing one sparks several!
Date: 3/23/2023 4:02:00 AM
Great string of bantu poems Dilly, I remember that game too, my daughters used to play it. Now it's computer's, x box and social media. Tom
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/23/2023 4:17:00 AM
Being hit over the head with a foam mallet - good times! Hehe!
Date: 3/23/2023 2:04:00 AM
Amazing how you’ve rattled off so many in a single breath!
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/23/2023 2:15:00 AM
Thank you! I did two stints of writing them, one last night and one this morning. They are like little joyful puzzles. Like when you meet someone you don't know but feel like you do and try to figure out what it is haha!
Date: 3/22/2023 11:31:00 PM
I love these:)) but I love the ladybird one best for its symplectic style. Thank you for sharing.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/23/2023 12:44:00 AM
It is like playing Marco Polo ... Call & respond. I like the additional ones :))
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/22/2023 11:37:00 PM
Thanks Suzette, I think I might try and introduce the game to my children - it's like yoga for the mind! I just added more then had to delete a few because I was over the character count!

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