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Baby Boy Bradley

Mama Mable made music mellow with mood But baby boy Bradley bellowed and booed So sensitively she started singing sweetly Yet the youngster yowled yearningly Poor perplexed papa peered and pleaded “No nocturnal nuisances are needed,” He hurried through the house, his hefty frame hobbled Baby boy Bradley basked blissfully with his bedtime bottle *For Constance’s Forms of Poetry 101 contest. Never tried alliteration before. by Carolyn Devonshire

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Cecil Hickman

Date: 8/29/2010 10:21:00 PM

truly an amazing write in this form,mine was my first as well,,all the best in the contest my friend and as well in all that you do,,Blessings..Cecil

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/25/2010 9:19:00 PM

I enjoyed your experimenting with alliteration, Carolyn. I always have felt it's just a natural poetic device, and as a "from" it is exaggerated. but i had find with my exaggeration I did tonight for Linda's contest! Luv, Andrea

James Fraser

Date: 8/25/2010 12:51:00 PM

Golly, it's like a tongue twister Carolyn. Many congrats on your win >> James

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 8/20/2010 11:19:00 PM

Neat alliteration you have here, Carolyn :)! Congrats on your win with this one--nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2010 10:31:00 PM

Carolyn, I bet you use alliteration all the time without even realizing it. That's just what poets do!! but this was a really cute application of just really focusing only on alliteration. Congrats on your baby boy!! LUv, Andrea

John Freeman

Date: 8/19/2010 10:18:00 AM

I enjoyed your Baby Boy bradley, Alliteration. I am trying to get caught up on som commenting today. School started today, and my new job driving the special ED bus went smoothly. Thanks for your comments, they are important to me. Agape, Moses

Tahera Mannan

Date: 8/18/2010 9:18:00 PM

What lovely alliterative music your poem contains. This write really makes the mood lift. Thanks for the comments.

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 8/18/2010 1:05:00 PM

Now this is terrific a great read.Thanks for your very sweet comment.Teresa

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/17/2010 9:02:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Carolyn in Constance~A Rambling Poet's~ contest " Forms of Poetry 101". Love, Carol

Francine Roberts

Date: 8/17/2010 7:53:00 AM

congrats on your HM with this adorable piece

Gert W. Knop

Date: 8/17/2010 5:22:00 AM

Hi Carolyn! So well written and lovely story in your alliteration, well done!!! Enjoyed reading it this early afternoon. Although heavy rains were anticipated for last weekend, but it wasn't so bad and ...now flooding!!! Yes I really did a long trek but by that I learned more about the area where I had never been before!...Thank you for your kind comments and congrats to your win!...Love, Gert

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/16/2010 9:20:00 PM

Congrats on the win, Carolyn

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/16/2010 9:10:00 PM

Wonderful write with winning words.. lol congrats. BG

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/16/2010 11:47:00 AM

Golly gee LNC...you made this difficult form seem easy. You dont need luck..but you got it. BG

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/16/2010 7:18:00 AM

After all the drama he finally settled down.. Enjoyed this a lot Carolyn.. love Wilma Ps: you got mail btw :)

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/15/2010 10:19:00 PM

This is a good one to try and I think you did a fantastic job. I've had such a long day I can't think so I won't try this one tonight. Thank you for your nice words about my limerick. Love, Joyce

Charles Henderson

Date: 8/15/2010 8:23:00 PM

boy Carolyn, I think you nailed it with this one. Don't even know what I'm going to write. Was going to use a clarihew, but put it in the clarihew contest.