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Baby Boy Bradley

Mama Mable made music mellow with mood
But baby boy Bradley bellowed and booed
So sensitively she started singing sweetly
Yet the youngster yowled yearningly

Poor perplexed papa peered and pleaded
“No nocturnal nuisances are needed,”
He hurried through the house, his hefty frame hobbled
Baby boy Bradley basked blissfully with his bedtime bottle


*For Constance’s Forms of Poetry 101 contest.  Never tried alliteration before.
 by Carolyn Devonshire

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Cecil Hickman Date: 8/29/2010 10:21:00 PM truly an amazing write in this form,mine was my first as well,,all the best in the contest my friend and as well in all that you do,,Blessings..Cecil Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/25/2010 9:19:00 PM I enjoyed your experimenting with alliteration, Carolyn. I always have felt it's just a natural poetic device, and as a "from" it is exaggerated. but i had find with my exaggeration I did tonight for Linda's contest! Luv, Andrea Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 8/25/2010 12:51:00 PM Golly, it's like a tongue twister Carolyn. Many congrats on your win >> James Login to Reply

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 8/20/2010 11:19:00 PM Neat alliteration you have here, Carolyn :)! Congrats on your win with this one--nikko :) Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/19/2010 10:31:00 PM Carolyn, I bet you use alliteration all the time without even realizing it. That's just what poets do!! but this was a really cute application of just really focusing only on alliteration. Congrats on your baby boy!! LUv, Andrea Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 8/19/2010 10:18:00 AM I enjoyed your Baby Boy bradley, Alliteration. I am trying to get caught up on som commenting today. School started today, and my new job driving the special ED bus went smoothly. Thanks for your comments, they are important to me. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

Tahera Mannan Date: 8/18/2010 9:18:00 PM What lovely alliterative music your poem contains. This write really makes the mood lift. Thanks for the comments. Login to Reply

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet Date: 8/18/2010 1:05:00 PM Now this is terrific a great read.Thanks for your very sweet comment.Teresa Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 8/17/2010 9:02:00 AM Congratulations on your win Carolyn in Constance~A Rambling Poet's~ contest " Forms of Poetry 101". Love, Carol Login to Reply

Francine Roberts Date: 8/17/2010 7:53:00 AM congrats on your HM with this adorable piece Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 8/17/2010 5:22:00 AM Hi Carolyn! So well written and lovely story in your alliteration, well done!!! Enjoyed reading it this early afternoon. Although heavy rains were anticipated for last weekend, but it wasn't so bad and ...now flooding!!! Yes I really did a long trek but by that I learned more about the area where I had never been before!...Thank you for your kind comments and congrats to your win!...Love, Gert Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 8/16/2010 9:20:00 PM Congrats on the win, Carolyn Login to Reply

Barbara Gorelick Date: 8/16/2010 9:10:00 PM Wonderful write with winning words.. lol congrats. BG Login to Reply

Barbara Gorelick Date: 8/16/2010 11:47:00 AM Golly gee LNC...you made this difficult form seem easy. You dont need luck..but you got it. BG Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 8/16/2010 7:18:00 AM After all the drama he finally settled down.. Enjoyed this a lot Carolyn.. love Wilma Ps: you got mail btw :) Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 8/15/2010 10:19:00 PM This is a good one to try and I think you did a fantastic job. I've had such a long day I can't think so I won't try this one tonight. Thank you for your nice words about my limerick. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Charles Henderson Date: 8/15/2010 8:23:00 PM boy Carolyn, I think you nailed it with this one. Don't even know what I'm going to write. Was going to use a clarihew, but put it in the clarihew contest. Login to Reply