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Away Today - Collaboration With Chris Green

When people try to phone I click them all away today Prefer to be alone You see I’ve not a choice I can not take the call At all Because I have no voice This morning I awoke from dreams so filled with sound around But nothing when I spoke So I just stared ahead Amid the lonely hush No rush Where nothing more is said Sat down among the crowd And watched their hasty gait dictate the only sound aloud Waiting for their return Watching the swinging door Once more When will I ever learn *** Copyright © Chris Green and Darren White June 6, 2017

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Jean Murray

Date: 6/21/2017 10:17:00 AM

Lovey unusual way to have rhyme trip off the tongue you two.

Darren White
Date: 6/21/2017 1:28:00 PM

Yeah Jean, we love that a lot, unusual rhyme :)

Verlecia Fields

Date: 6/21/2017 7:49:00 AM

the poem made me think of taking a vacation how peaceful it would be to be on a beach just me and ice water to drink (didn't truly understand the poem - but try to leave a honest comment -i 'll try to do better- my disability)

Darren White
Date: 6/21/2017 7:52:00 AM

Verlecia, I have a bunch of disabilities myself, so don't worry. It's fine to say anything you like. If this is what the poem reminds you of? I think that's a pretty nice image. Beach, icewater, here I come.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/21/2017 6:00:00 AM

Hello Daren and Chris. How true that darn swinging door. When will we all learn. This is an expressive write by the both of you. Thank you for sharing the beautiful and so appropriate music that fits the mood. Congratulations on another wonderful entry together. Well done entirely. Have a wonderful afternoon.

Darren White
Date: 6/21/2017 7:53:00 AM

Heya my friend :) When will we ever learn, don't we? Yes, I LOVE that music, as if it were made especially for this poem.

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/20/2017 8:52:00 AM

Gets a little deep toward the end:) excellent collaboration Chris and Darren!

Darren White
Date: 6/21/2017 1:29:00 AM

I agree, Daniel, it got deep there :) Thank you.

Maria Williams

Date: 6/20/2017 7:49:00 AM

Love, Love your collaboration, you two guys were made to write together. The format was so interesting, the music just brought chills. Darren and Chris Bravo!! This is a fave.

Darren White
Date: 6/20/2017 7:55:00 AM

Wow Maria, thank you for the fav! If you read the poem aloud you can hear that great rhythm even better :)

Maria Williams
Date: 6/20/2017 7:51:00 AM

Forgot to mention the words- brought tears...Maria

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/20/2017 6:34:00 AM

This was a fun one to read! The format is great!

Darren White
Date: 6/20/2017 6:39:00 AM

Yeah :) I loved the format too, it has great cadence this way, dances.

Sara Ella

Date: 6/20/2017 1:48:00 AM

The sound-filled dreams and silent mornings with everyone off to work-this sounds sorta sad but when I read aloud, it has a wonderful rhythm - nicely written you two :)

Darren White
Date: 6/20/2017 5:05:00 AM

No, not sad, just fed up with the world sometimes, and yes, that rhythm is contagious. I agree :)