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Away In An Asylum

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Robert Lindley

Date: 6/30/2023 5:55:00 PM

haha, Fred needs help! Brilliant poetry my good friend. I guess the French Foreign Legion turned Fred down so the hospital was the next choice. God bless..

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2023 5:56:00 AM

thanks Robert xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 6/30/2023 1:20:00 PM

Jan, a great poem for the contest, very entertaining! Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2023 10:29:00 AM

well i never she has pulled her contest - how inconsiderate to those who have entered!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2023 5:56:00 AM

Hey at least we tried girls! hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/30/2023 6:48:00 PM

I'm thinking a circus is a place to buy retail things, too, and they serve to make people smile. Do I expect to place in that contest? ha ha ha

Tania Kitchin
Date: 6/30/2023 3:57:00 PM

Jan, true as well as a park is a service as a place for people to gather and have picnics.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/30/2023 3:14:00 PM

Thanks Tania, it may not be about retail but in my mind I see a hospital/Asylum as providing a service:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 6/30/2023 11:41:00 AM

Look at you supporting the contest sponsors, Jan! From what I know about Fred he should've been locked away a long time ago.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/30/2023 3:13:00 PM

lol:-) thanks Mark xxx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/30/2023 5:19:00 AM

So sad--the poor man must seek drastic measures to get away from his wife. Life can unbearable with a wrong partner--as you so ably convey, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/30/2023 6:00:00 AM

Yes I am very lucky my hubby still tolerates me after all these years lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/30/2023 4:50:00 AM

OMG Jan, I do so hope he can remain there without the missus in his hair! Love your mind jan!!! Happy Funny Friday xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/30/2023 5:59:00 AM

Lol Mike, i never know what my muse will come up with next but i am proud the way this poem turned out:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh

Date: 6/29/2023 12:26:00 PM

Ha! I can just imagine Fred on his happy pills, and no fruitcake missus to kill his buzz, you do realise you’re not doing the female of the species any favours here Jan lol! I like that in a woman not afraid to take the pee at her own expense, brilliant and funny, cheers David

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2023 6:00:00 PM

Gee David you know my style, poopy and silly and i dont take myself seriously with the poetry just have some fun. I've got a few poems like this to go in the book lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/29/2023 11:58:00 AM

What a cute/fun ~ write/picture. Poor Fed looks like he is done. He will do anything to lose the wife. Have a great/fun day writing away....................

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2023 12:05:00 PM

thanks Paula it was such fun to write:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/29/2023 11:52:00 AM

poor fred! your poem is great, jan, with just the perfect amount of humor! best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2023 12:05:00 PM

It was such fun to write lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/29/2023 11:03:00 AM

- Maybe his wife needs a pill or two ... it looks like Fred has been lying down far too long ... he is so pale ... he needs some fresh air, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/29/2023 11:30:00 AM

... a quick look ... had to see if he was still alive

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2023 11:15:00 AM

thanks Anne-Lise:-) yes he looks like he's in need of resuscitation but escaping his wife is a breath of fresh air lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2023 11:11:00 AM

and maybe some mouth-to-mouth. I have a few suggestions as to who can administer it to poor Fred.

Lin Lane

Date: 6/29/2023 10:45:00 AM

I'm thinking there definitely IS something mentally wrong with Fred. Your verses are fantastically written, Jan. btw... Fred looks dead ~ again.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2023 10:49:00 AM

aww thanks Lin,I've got to say I had such fun writing this one and kept editing it right up until I posted it. The final verse was written on the way to school - I hasten to add that my hubby was driving lol. hugs jan xx