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Written for Away in ... poetry contest

sponsored by Julia Ward

06/29/23

 

Away In An Asylum

Away in an asylum
No release from his bed
Poor Fred can't escape
The loud voice in his head
 
The medic’s crowd round
By the bed where Fred lay
They admit they can’t help
There's no treatment today
 
Doctors are convinced
He’s not mentally ill
So they cannot assist him
There’s no magic pill
 
The voice they discover
Belongs to Fred’s wife
She’s so overbearing
And causes great strife
 
Docs are in agreement
That they fear for Fred’s life
He’ll stay with them fee free
To escape from his wife!
	
Fred loves the asylum
He lives there to this day
If his wife comes to visit
Staff just turn her away!

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Robert Lindley June 30, 2023 at 5:55 PM haha, Fred needs help! Brilliant poetry my good friend. I guess the French Foreign Legion turned Fred down so the hospital was the next choice. God bless.. Jan Allison July 1, 2023 at 5:56 AM thanks Robert xx

Tania Kitchin June 30, 2023 at 1:20 PM Jan, a great poem for the contest, very entertaining! Hugs. Jan Allison July 1, 2023 at 10:29 AM well i never she has pulled her contest - how inconsiderate to those who have entered! Jan Allison July 1, 2023 at 5:56 AM Hey at least we tried girls! hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 30, 2023 at 6:48 PM I'm thinking a circus is a place to buy retail things, too, and they serve to make people smile. Do I expect to place in that contest? ha ha ha Tania Kitchin June 30, 2023 at 3:57 PM Jan, true as well as a park is a service as a place for people to gather and have picnics. Jan Allison June 30, 2023 at 3:14 PM Thanks Tania, it may not be about retail but in my mind I see a hospital/Asylum as providing a service:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin June 30, 2023 at 11:41 AM Look at you supporting the contest sponsors, Jan! From what I know about Fred he should've been locked away a long time ago. Jan Allison June 30, 2023 at 3:13 PM lol:-) thanks Mark xxx

Vijay Pandit June 30, 2023 at 5:19 AM So sad--the poor man must seek drastic measures to get away from his wife. Life can unbearable with a wrong partner--as you so ably convey, Jan. Jan Allison June 30, 2023 at 6:00 AM Yes I am very lucky my hubby still tolerates me after all these years lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile June 30, 2023 at 4:50 AM OMG Jan, I do so hope he can remain there without the missus in his hair! Love your mind jan!!! Happy Funny Friday xxoo Jan Allison June 30, 2023 at 5:59 AM Lol Mike, i never know what my muse will come up with next but i am proud the way this poem turned out:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh June 29, 2023 at 12:26 PM Ha! I can just imagine Fred on his happy pills, and no fruitcake missus to kill his buzz, you do realise you’re not doing the female of the species any favours here Jan lol! I like that in a woman not afraid to take the pee at her own expense, brilliant and funny, cheers David Jan Allison June 29, 2023 at 6:00 PM Gee David you know my style, poopy and silly and i dont take myself seriously with the poetry just have some fun. I've got a few poems like this to go in the book lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paula Goldsmith June 29, 2023 at 11:58 AM What a cute/fun ~ write/picture. Poor Fed looks like he is done. He will do anything to lose the wife. Have a great/fun day writing away.................... Jan Allison June 29, 2023 at 12:05 PM thanks Paula it was such fun to write:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer June 29, 2023 at 11:52 AM poor fred! your poem is great, jan, with just the perfect amount of humor! best of luck in the contest... Jan Allison June 29, 2023 at 12:05 PM It was such fun to write lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 29, 2023 at 11:03 AM - Maybe his wife needs a pill or two ... it looks like Fred has been lying down far too long ... he is so pale ... he needs some fresh air, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs Anne-Lise Andresen June 29, 2023 at 11:30 AM ... a quick look ... had to see if he was still alive Jan Allison June 29, 2023 at 11:15 AM thanks Anne-Lise:-) yes he looks like he's in need of resuscitation but escaping his wife is a breath of fresh air lol:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 29, 2023 at 11:11 AM and maybe some mouth-to-mouth. I have a few suggestions as to who can administer it to poor Fred.

Lin Lane June 29, 2023 at 10:45 AM I'm thinking there definitely IS something mentally wrong with Fred. Your verses are fantastically written, Jan. btw... Fred looks dead ~ again. Jan Allison June 29, 2023 at 10:49 AM aww thanks Lin,I've got to say I had such fun writing this one and kept editing it right up until I posted it. The final verse was written on the way to school - I hasten to add that my hubby was driving lol. hugs jan xx