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Away At a Strip Club

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Away at a strip club No clothes are on me I misread the club rules Now I feel silly I’d removed my jacket White shirt and black pants Then off came my boxers I wanted to dance Two big burly bouncers Dragged me off the floor Though I’m still butt naked They show me the door I flag down a taxi Although I’ve no cash I’m dropped at my girlfriend’s To her door I dash She pays the cab driver And gives him a tip One look at her stern face I’m on a guilt trip She throws me a bath robe And I put it on Then I realise that My work clothes are gone Although it’s past midnight She drives me straight back And gets my belongings Then gives me some flack I say that I’m sorry Won’t do it again And if I go clubbing From drink I’ll abstain! 08/08/23

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Simon Hamill

Date: 8/16/2023 3:00:00 AM

hi Jan. where did you say that club was? it could be worth a visit. lol. loved it. take care, simon :-)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/10/2023 10:34:00 PM

Great story, Jan, told in your incomparable style:)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/11/2023 1:42:00 AM

Thanks Jo! Yeah my style is definitely a one off lol:-) I just try and make people smile if I can:-) hugs jan xx

John Read

Date: 8/10/2023 5:39:00 AM

He sure had one to many,drink can effect people in all sorts of ways.xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:33:00 PM

most definitely John - makes me glad i usually drink water when we go out lol:-) hugs Janx

Mike Gentile

Date: 8/10/2023 4:38:00 AM

Yes Jan, watch those cocktails!!! So fun to imagine, this one is, as usual, packed with indelible humor and a rollicking good time!! Love it! Happy Thursday xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:32:00 PM

thanks Mike I like the term rollicking lol - a mixture of rolling an frolicking i guess lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/9/2023 6:53:00 PM

Hilarious Jan - The girlfriend was hiding - Secrets of her own - She’s a pole dancer - Dancing stripped to the bone…. Belle :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:31:00 PM

i love the way the story developed Belle it was such fun to write and went on longer than I anticipated lol:-) hugs Jan xx

The Situation

Date: 8/9/2023 6:17:00 PM

The way a story should be told if it's on the Soup.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:30:00 PM

thanks so much TS not everyone is a Jan fan, I just write whatever comes into my head lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 8/9/2023 1:04:00 PM

hilarious, jan, with such a fun, smooth flow!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:27:00 PM

thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 8/9/2023 11:57:00 AM

Clubbing! That guy was lucky his girlfriend didn’t do some clubbing of her own. Good away story lines, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:27:00 PM

yeah he sure deserves a dressing down not a dressing gown to cover his embarrassment lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 8/9/2023 9:45:00 AM

I say, his girlfriend is a very understanding person. Thanks for the giggle.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:26:00 PM

thanks Jerry, I never know what my muse will come up with next lol:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Lawrence

Date: 8/9/2023 6:04:00 AM

I always laugh and smile broadly while reading your poems dear Jan ! I raced through this … eagerly awaiting the ending ! Will read it again now so I can savor it . Loved it ! Love your humor :) Big hugs, Susan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:07:00 PM

what a super comment thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/9/2023 3:38:00 AM

- Hope the apology was accepted ... :))) - hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:07:00 PM

who knows Anne- Lise lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/9/2023 3:15:00 AM

lol I like this its so cute Jan, it could be fun dancing naked at a strip club, but tell me this, where would they tuck those lovely dollar bills lol, (food for thought) you get pretty cheeky with your humor girl !

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:06:00 PM

lol Vie I just had fun writing this - have never been in a strip club in my life lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Bell

Date: 8/9/2023 2:43:00 AM

Love an understanding girlfriend. Now, is he grounded.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/10/2023 3:06:00 PM

thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/8/2023 7:46:00 PM

Lol. Oh, Jan, how good to see you’re still at it, making everyone smile in here. I’ve missed reading you for sure. Hope you’re doing great dear Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2023 12:11:00 AM

I try to make folk smile Akkina, thanks for dropping by to comment. hugs Jan xx

David Fisher

Date: 8/8/2023 5:02:00 PM

This is too funny! Sorry you missed out on a sure side hustle.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2023 12:10:00 AM

was fun to write and only too a few minutes. I find once I start I cant stop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2023 4:22:00 PM

VERY good one, Jan. Are you setting us up for part two contest?

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2023 12:10:00 AM

I will do at some point Andrea! hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/8/2023 4:04:00 PM

LOL…my friend and his wife are in Ireland and accidentally walked into a strip bar…saw a food sign. They were escorted out. They are on an anniversary trip. Embarrassing but funny story.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/9/2023 12:10:00 AM

lol thanks for sharing Kim:-) hugs Jan xx