Autumnal

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September.28.2023

Autumnal Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Sotto Poet

Autumn draws closer day by day
From far is heard 
The screeching of a lone bird
Voicing its dismay aloud
Over the impending fall
Here the moss scrawls 
Ugly pictures on the bark of trees 
Where black spiders weave their gossamer
Moving, sig sag across the trees’ leprous trunks

I see the yellowing leaves
Torn down from their sturdy limbs
Sliding down noiselessly one by one
And landing on the ground
With a mournful sound
Acorns from the pine trees drop
And swell the ground and fall to sleep

Life too takes a downward spiral
I feel the autumn seeping into me
And my heart feels a languid grief
The days of my youth
Seem to fly away in a flurry
Like autumn leaves whirling in the gale
Reminding us, that we are not here to stay

The withered leaves
Which shriek and screech under my feet,
Recall to me the cry of martyred youth
With all tenacity overthrown. 
Like them, we will fall and be dead to the world
Wrapped in frozen silence, forgotten by all
And sucked back into primal void!

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2023 10:57:00 AM

- A deep and sensitive autumn poem, Valsa ... congratulations on your win ) - hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/5/2023 10:14:00 AM

Dear Valsa, congratulations on your win in my contest. This exquisite piece of poetry is a true feast for the senses, overflowing with an abundance of vivid and captivating imagery. Your mastery of language is evident in the flawless composition of this well-crafted poem. Within its verses, you skillfully portray the transitions with such intricate precision, I also like the picture

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/5/2023 8:30:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Summer is now over. Autumn is coming fast with many pretty leaves. Love to see them but hate to pick them up. I enjoyed this wonderful write/picture. Have a blessed day writing away....................

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/29/2023 10:53:00 AM

"The days of my youth Seem to fly away in a flurry Like autumn leaves whirling in the gale Reminding us, that we are not here to stay" -- Ain't that the truth! Oh how I can relate! Well said. Best of luck in contests.

Silent One

Date: 9/29/2023 2:52:00 AM

For me Autumn is the season of death and I see you share my sentiments, although there is so much change around us, in reality everything is dying, even the sun is becoming shy... days are darker and nights are colder.. I could feel the angst in your words.. a wonderful entry for this contest... I was thinking about doing some personification for this one... Always mesmerised by your words.. a talented poetess you are ..

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/29/2023 1:02:00 AM

Dear friend, I dread posting my poem on the Fall. Your Autumnal is eloquent and glittering. So much imagery that deserves a high place in the contest. Blessings.