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Autumn Breeze

AUTUMN BREEZE

When the magic is gone
	and all the stars have fallen,
do I just sit and wait for my final calling?

Is there still something
	to do, out there, for me?
If not before, then when comes destiny?

Ashes tossed, will I be known
	as husband, father, son?
Can I leave this plane with things undone?

Fair poetry I weave
	but words are falling leaves
and my soul detects an autumn breeze.

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Line Gauthier

Date: 10/9/2017 10:44:00 PM

Beautiful introspection. I can relate.

Gerald Dillenbeck

Date: 1/11/2017 7:20:00 PM

This piece feels familiar, at age 64. Thx. And thx for visiting my ego-centering way. Gerald Oliver

Katherine Braithwaite

Date: 11/8/2016 7:49:00 AM

I like this one.When we are young we see some choices but we don't know which route we will go.I am sure this speaks to many peoplle,

Phil Capitano
Date: 11/8/2016 7:59:00 AM

TY, I'm glad you felt it. Namaste.

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/24/2016 7:32:00 PM

Exceptional piece my friend.. So much stated, in sch few words..

Keith Logan

Date: 9/14/2016 2:48:00 AM

Good poem but I'd be tempted to put a comma after "before." Not that it needs it but as an aid to clarity.

Phil Capitano
Date: 9/14/2016 8:44:00 AM

Thanks for liking; you are the second, though, for mentioning my punctuation and, as such, I have edited it to create better understanding. I take criticism of all kinds gracefully. Thanks again for reading, I hope you will continue to read me.

Joseph May

Date: 9/9/2016 9:21:00 AM

What a great last stanza Phil...well penned

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 9/6/2016 1:24:00 PM

Beautiful lines composed for Autumn. Well done. I can see this being POTD. Keep it up. :) Sunita

Phil Capitano
Date: 9/6/2016 3:27:00 PM

Thanks for the encouragement. PC

Tanis Troutman

Date: 9/3/2016 6:52:00 PM

Really nice write !

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/3/2016 6:13:00 PM

Beautiful lead in to Autumn, Phil. Congrats on your POTD!

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/3/2016 5:55:00 PM

Congrats!!! my friend...very well done...god bless...^WW^

Phil Capitano
Date: 9/6/2016 3:30:00 PM

Thanks; you never know when something you write will catch a nerve or be received. Peace ~ PC

Marilyn Williams

Date: 9/3/2016 1:04:00 PM

Nice words for the heart. Congrats on your POTD!

Keely K-R

Date: 9/3/2016 11:19:00 AM

congratulations human soul, for you have now had the honour of receiving poem of the day, for this I envy you.

Phil Capitano
Date: 9/6/2016 3:40:00 PM

Keep writing is the best advice I can give you Keely, everyday if you can but don't feel guilty if you can't. Welcome to the soup and thanks for reading and liking.

Robert Warlov

Date: 9/3/2016 10:27:00 AM

It's sappy but also good. Although Your use of commas (not to mention the absense of, but necessary semi-colons and colons) is wrong, I like it! 'course you can opt for 'sans' punctuation since poetry is art; Therefore, Skwoo da wulz™!

Phil Capitano
Date: 9/6/2016 3:35:00 PM

Most times I'm a fiend for punctuation but other times you just gotta let it fly. It's all cool, bro, glad you liked it.