Phil Capitano Poet Rhyme

Autumn Breeze

AUTUMN BREEZE

When the magic is gone
	and all the stars have fallen,
do I just sit and wait for my final calling?

Is there still something
	to do, out there, for me?
If not before, then when comes destiny?

Ashes tossed, will I be known
	as husband, father, son?
Can I leave this plane with things undone?

Fair poetry I weave
	but words are falling leaves
and my soul detects an autumn breeze.

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Line Gauthier October 9, 2017 at 10:44 PM Beautiful introspection. I can relate.

Rev. Gerald Dillenbeck January 11, 2017 at 7:20 PM This piece feels familiar, at age 64. Thx. And thx for visiting my ego-centering way. Gerald Oliver

Katherine Braithwaite November 8, 2016 at 7:49 AM I like this one.When we are young we see some choices but we don't know which route we will go.I am sure this speaks to many peoplle, Phil Capitano November 8, 2016 at 7:59 AM TY, I'm glad you felt it. Namaste.

Robert Lindley October 24, 2016 at 7:32 PM Exceptional piece my friend.. So much stated, in sch few words..

Keith Logan September 14, 2016 at 2:48 AM Good poem but I'd be tempted to put a comma after "before." Not that it needs it but as an aid to clarity. Phil Capitano September 14, 2016 at 8:44 AM Thanks for liking; you are the second, though, for mentioning my punctuation and, as such, I have edited it to create better understanding. I take criticism of all kinds gracefully. Thanks again for reading, I hope you will continue to read me.

Joseph May September 9, 2016 at 9:21 AM What a great last stanza Phil...well penned

Sunita U.D Palawon September 6, 2016 at 1:24 PM Beautiful lines composed for Autumn. Well done. I can see this being POTD. Keep it up. :) Sunita Phil Capitano September 6, 2016 at 3:27 PM Thanks for the encouragement. PC

Tanis Troutman September 3, 2016 at 6:52 PM Really nice write !

Ralph Sergi September 3, 2016 at 6:13 PM Beautiful lead in to Autumn, Phil. Congrats on your POTD!

Winged Warrior September 3, 2016 at 5:55 PM Congrats!!! my friend...very well done...god bless...^WW^ Phil Capitano September 6, 2016 at 3:30 PM Thanks; you never know when something you write will catch a nerve or be received. Peace ~ PC

Marilyn Williams September 3, 2016 at 1:04 PM Nice words for the heart. Congrats on your POTD!

Keely K-R September 3, 2016 at 11:19 AM congratulations human soul, for you have now had the honour of receiving poem of the day, for this I envy you. Phil Capitano September 6, 2016 at 3:40 PM Keep writing is the best advice I can give you Keely, everyday if you can but don't feel guilty if you can't. Welcome to the soup and thanks for reading and liking.

Robert Warlov September 3, 2016 at 10:27 AM It's sappy but also good. Although Your use of commas (not to mention the absense of, but necessary semi-colons and colons) is wrong, I like it! 'course you can opt for 'sans' punctuation since poetry is art; Therefore, Skwoo da wulz™! Phil Capitano September 6, 2016 at 3:35 PM Most times I'm a fiend for punctuation but other times you just gotta let it fly. It's all cool, bro, glad you liked it.

Supraja Kannan September 3, 2016 at 9:58 AM Congratulations on your well deserved POTD....

Alexis Y. September 3, 2016 at 9:36 AM Hi Phil, This is beautiful. Congratulations on getting the of the day:-) Alexis

Eve Roper September 3, 2016 at 9:26 AM Congratulations on Poem of the Day nice poem enjoyed reading a 7 Phil Capitano September 6, 2016 at 3:42 PM Thanks so much for encouragement.

Charlie Smith September 3, 2016 at 8:54 AM Congratulations for POTD honors Phil...

Jan Allison September 3, 2016 at 8:05 AM Lovely poem Phil ..I too especially love the final lines:-) congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe September 3, 2016 at 7:29 AM Congrats on your POTD, Phil. Lovely, especially the last line. Agnes

Daniel Turner September 3, 2016 at 7:15 AM Phil, this is really nice. That last verse is a tearjerker. Congratulations on POTD. Well deserved. An excellent write.

John Fleming September 3, 2016 at 7:07 AM A very lovely little poem, Phil, both elegant and charming - Nicely penned! My best regards. :) john

Winged Warrior September 2, 2016 at 11:49 AM Elegantly done my friend......god bless...^WW^

John Hamilton September 1, 2016 at 3:16 PM This is a great one, nice flow!