Poet Tacito Poet Free verse

At Least

Our hearts were a veritable slow dance

And I didn’t have to put my baby
In the corner

Our retinas
became diamond forged binds
In serenity’s lock

Dipping
Your tear ducts within our wishing wells

Never
Running
Dry

Our flesh
Bringing lukewarm elasticity
To gentle boil

Every graceful thrust
Mimicking fireplace embers
Under cabin’s winter moon

Until my deep sigh
Embedded paragraphs
Within “Dear John” parchment

…

At least

Trinity’s hourglass
Permitted me to sing I love you choruses

Before your hearts’ phone line
Disconnected

…

©Drake J. Eszes

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Sarai Virden November 5, 2013 at 12:09 PM "Until... " "At least... " Depicts some haunted gratitude though the end is clearly in sight. Emotionally charging, a heartfelt piece. As usual with you... A phenomenal talent! Hugs Poet Tacito November 5, 2013 at 12:21 PM =D Thank you so much, Sarai. I'm glad you were able to understand where my head was at here.

Lisa Mccall October 11, 2013 at 11:22 AM Well written I love this one Poet Tacito October 11, 2013 at 12:35 PM Hi & thank you very much, Lisa!

Shadow Hamilton September 24, 2013 at 4:31 AM This is sensual and beautiful Drake love it Shadow x smile Poet Tacito September 24, 2013 at 7:56 AM Many, many thanks, Shadow. :)

Cindy Lu September 14, 2013 at 8:37 PM You brought me to highs and a saddening in such a short format. You are an amazing writer. I'm glad I have the opportunity to read some of your heart's passions and heart wrenching poetry. I really dig your work... Cindy Poet Tacito September 14, 2013 at 8:41 PM I'm very happy you have the opportunity too. It means a lot to me. Thank you so much, Cindy. =)

Mario De Paz September 13, 2013 at 11:22 AM Again, I like your impassioned poetry too often full of dreariness, but very effective Poet Tacito September 13, 2013 at 11:39 AM Hey Mario!! It's great to see you again. I just make sure the poem matches the tone. :) It's great to see you again!!!

Jennifer Perry September 11, 2013 at 6:47 PM Hi there!! Nice! Poet Tacito September 11, 2013 at 6:50 PM Hey stranger! =D It's been awhile! Thank you, Jennifer!

Christopher Michaels September 10, 2013 at 12:33 AM enjoy reading your poem "jcmt"d6 Poet Tacito September 10, 2013 at 6:24 AM Thanks, Chris!

Lucilla Carrillo September 9, 2013 at 8:29 PM This is good Drake. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla Poet Tacito September 9, 2013 at 11:01 PM And thank you for stopping by here, Lucilla. :)

Madelin Barton September 9, 2013 at 8:54 AM Raw emotion here so clever a write and seems so heartfelt thank you for sharing such honest and beautiful poem Poet Tacito September 9, 2013 at 9:13 AM Hi & thank you so much, Madelin. I did what I could here. :)

Laura Breidenthal September 7, 2013 at 11:45 PM Oooh... cool one! Love the metaphorical ending there! It's all just a bunch of awesome metaphorical genius, but yeah. :) Really good verse. A very fun read. Always, Laura Poet Tacito September 8, 2013 at 12:07 AM Hi, Laura! =D I'm very glad you enjoyed this. I don't think this is even close to genius. But, I know this didn't suck either. lol You're very kind in your comments. Thank you so much!

Charlotte Puddifoot September 6, 2013 at 4:03 PM an intriguing piece, as your poems so often are; sensuality mixed with sadness, good use of metaphor, this is what free verse is all about...thanks for stopping by with your uplifting comment :) Poet Tacito September 6, 2013 at 10:24 PM You're very welcome! That was the plan. :) Thank you so much, Charlotte!

Cecilia Macfarlane September 5, 2013 at 8:45 PM A romantic night of passion, each knowing it would be their last time in each others arms, they cry tears of joy and sadness. Your writes are like doing puzzles and I love putting the pieces together. Excellent write Drake! Hugs Poet Tacito September 6, 2013 at 7:43 AM You got a great grasp of this writing. Thank you very much for your kind words, Cecilia. :)

Ken Carroll September 5, 2013 at 8:34 PM Well penned heartfelt write..Thanks for sharing. Ken Poet Tacito September 6, 2013 at 7:38 AM Hey Ken, good to meet you. Thanks very much for that & stopping by! Cheers!

Lucilla Carrillo September 5, 2013 at 3:47 PM A great poem of free verse. It is very well written. I'm back, I don't have to move from here. I can stay in Texas. Thanks for sharing this poem.... Lucilla Poet Tacito September 5, 2013 at 7:54 PM Hi there, Lucilla! I'm glad to hear you're staying. I appreciate your thoughts on this. :)

Kim Van Breda September 5, 2013 at 8:52 AM Drake-- you did real good with your first poem of September !! Brilliant.. and this time with plenty of passion thrown in ;) xx Poet Tacito September 5, 2013 at 9:13 AM Thank you so much, Kim. I'm all for that passion. :)

Nette Onclaud September 5, 2013 at 8:32 AM buddd! (?), lol... it's okay if you have nothing new today; am enjoying ' Serenity's Valley' and ' With This Ring Title' tracks.. whoo!..:) yet tomorrow is another day!..:) huggs Nette Onclaud September 5, 2013 at 8:46 AM i don't know how it happened, buddd(?)... was just tinkering around and off these strains came now... a feel-good thing, really!.. thanks!..:) Poet Tacito September 5, 2013 at 8:36 AM OMG! Are you listening to my video game soundtrack I made?!?!? NETTE!!!!! Why are you so awesome?! A big thank you hug to you!! You just made my morning. I'll even forgive you for the "bud" comment. ;-) lol

Richard Lamoureux September 5, 2013 at 8:18 AM I came back to be further entertained by comments and your responses. I have not been dissapointed. Have a great day Drake. Poet Tacito September 5, 2013 at 8:24 AM Awesome. =) My readers' commentary never seem to let me down. lol I love it! Great to see you again, Richard!

Jack Ellison September 5, 2013 at 7:15 AM Hey Drake me mate! Agree with Jack Jordan, "lukewarm elasticity... brilliant! You is da man! Poet Tacito September 5, 2013 at 7:34 AM Ha. Awesome. Thanks so much, Jack!!! =D

Jack Jordan September 4, 2013 at 6:41 PM I really like how you put words together. They fit, but almost don't. Romantic & steamy and sad. My favorite lines are "Bringing lukewarm elasticity/To gentle boil" Good stuff... Jack Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 6:49 PM Nicely said, Jack! :) I seriously appreciate it! Thank you so much!

Andrea Dietrich September 4, 2013 at 2:51 PM Another sad one but sensitive and romantic, how I likes them!!! Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 2:54 PM Thanks so much, Andrea. I'm glad you likes! :)

Carrie Richards September 4, 2013 at 1:27 PM Many of your poems could be songs to be sung on a rainy night, soft guitar, weeping windows, a dark street light quivering in the wind. This is one.....giving the reader a sense of loneliness, heartbreak, and deep emotion of a love gone wrong. Do you play music, Drake.??....you should put this to chords of a mellow, somber melody...I would cry buckets!! Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 2:07 PM You have made me smile so wide. I dabble in piano here & there. I can rock a guitar like nobody's business...in Rock Band. lol I never thought to put this to a song. Maybe I could...??? Thank you so so so much, Carrie.

Nette Onclaud September 4, 2013 at 1:14 PM no, no, i'm not nagging.. " at least", a hi today is fine enough, lol..:) huggles! Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 2:04 PM LOL sure, Nette. ;-) Hugs & Hi to you too! =D

Dr.Ram Mehta September 4, 2013 at 9:41 AM enjoyed the lyrical qualities Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 9:50 AM I appreciate that. Thanks so much!

Sara Kendrick September 4, 2013 at 9:36 AM Great work about the topic of love loss..Enjoyed reading your story even though it had a sad ending..Sara Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 9:50 AM Thank you very much, Sara. I'm glad you enjoyed!

Eileen Manassian September 4, 2013 at 8:23 AM DRAKE!!! :) Read this one yesterday, but it was late and I knew my response would make no sense! ;) Lovely poem...again...sad. :( Drake...seriously...I wish I could crawl up there in your mind and get a line by line of all your write...the author himself unfolding meaning! ;) Hey...don't pull another disappearing act, ya hear? Missed ya! Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 9:51 AM LOL! YES! LASAGNA!! You get VIP priviledges! I got your Soupmail. :) Eileen Manassian September 4, 2013 at 9:18 AM BTW...I DO make lasagna...Italian cuisine??? MY FAV!!! Good at baking! So...skip the entrance fee...You're gonna ask me to stay! Eileen Manassian September 4, 2013 at 9:16 AM Hey....I soup mailed ya! At least...I think I did! You know sometimes when you don't get that silly captcha thingy...it doesn't go and if you've already gone on to something else....Anywayz! Let me know! Friggin awesome eh? Takes one to know one! HA HA! Gotcha! Poet Tacito September 4, 2013 at 8:30 AM Be warned: At the gates of my mind there's a $1 + Plate of Italian food entrance fee. The person at the entrance booth will either be Donatello of the Ninja Turtles or Marvin the Martian. ;-) Also, I didn't disappear anywhere. lol It was a Holiday weekend. I was away for just a few days. It's nice to have been missed though. You're friggin awesome, Eileen! Thank you for being you!

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