Asthma

Count 1, 2 or 3 failed breaths Insatiable hunger in my chest Breathe, struggle, gasp and yawn My body drowns in the air I always pull through, a fleeting ecstasy of relief Feeling exhausted, I wish I could quit The next battle begins -Note- Hopefully some of the awesome people I met on PoetrySoup 3 years ago are still here. It's admittedly been a long time since I dipped my toes back into the world of creative writing. This is a simple one to start. If anyone relates to this one, my thoughts are with you.

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Paul Callus

Date: 6/12/2022 1:40:00 AM

I know of several people who suffer from asthma, Michael (both relatives and past students of mine). My thoughts are with you.. Regards // paul

Michael Whatley
Date: 6/14/2022 6:49:00 PM

Thanks for writing Paul! At its peak, the poem sums it up quite well, but for the most part my experience is not too severe fortunately

J.W. Earnings

Date: 11/24/2019 1:35:00 AM

I can definitely relate to this fantastic poem..it describes asthma very well. Thanks for sharing! -JWE

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/6/2019 4:46:00 AM

I am glad you are here, my friend. As an asthmatic, I have to say you have let me re-live some of my most precarious moments.

Michael Whatley
Date: 9/7/2019 5:56:00 PM

Thank you, Caren! That precarious moment is exactly what I wanted to convey, because it feels like suddenly you don't have control over what should be a fully subconcious action - a concerning feeling indeed. Be well, and thank you for visiting!

Eve Roper

Date: 9/5/2019 11:21:00 AM

Nice to see you back, Michael. Mine is very miner, but my mother of 87 is in the hospital right now because of it, causing her blood pressure and sugars to go up high.

Michael Whatley
Date: 9/7/2019 5:52:00 PM

Sorry to hear that, Eve, best wishes to you and your family facing the condition! Thank you for the greeting :)

Paul Callus

Date: 9/5/2019 10:13:00 AM

I am in contact with people who suffer from asthma, Michael; some have it worse than others. Take care. Welcome back. Regards // paul

Michael Whatley
Date: 9/5/2019 10:39:00 AM

Very true, Paul. Thank you for visiting!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/28/2019 10:53:00 AM

- My father has lung cancer and COPD ... my husband has asthma ... yes, I know these symptoms - Besides, I have been a nurse for many years and seen most of it - Great written, Michael :) - Welcome back :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Michael Whatley
Date: 8/29/2019 3:15:00 AM

Sorry to hear that, Anne-Lise. It's cool that you are knowledgeable on lots of medical things though, thank you for visiting!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/28/2019 4:44:00 AM

I do relate, but I am doing well as long as I am not around chemicals or have to breathe smoke of any kind. I feel for anyone who has a hard time breathing. My husband has COPD. Nice to see you back Michael. Aloha, Connie

Michael Whatley
Date: 8/28/2019 5:21:00 AM

Glad to hear you are doing well, Connie. It's certainly near the top of the list of things we take for granted. Thank you for stopping by!