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Sept.24.2024

Onomatopoeia PoetryContest

Sponsor- Emile Pinet

~ Placed Nineth~

As dark clouds dashed and clashed in the sky Thunder began to boom and rumble Sensing an impending rain, frogs started croaking Cows stopped cuddling and began to moo Soon pitter- pat came down the raindrops. landed on roof tops with a heavy thud they broke and cracked into tiny droplets gurgled and gushed through canals and drains. And joined the brooks that babbled, merging with waterfalls that whooshed. Along with the rain, came the roaring wind as it passed, the bells clanged windchimes whispered, wires on poles whistled doors slammed shut and windows creaked grasses swished and leaves rustled. Birds fell silent and stopped tweeting When the pouring rain came to a sudden halt, The rattle was over with everything falling silent.

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Emile Pinet

Date: 10/1/2024 8:41:00 AM

Congratulations Valsa! Your Onomatopoeia poem "As the Rain Came" has earned you a distinguished placement in my poetry contest. I was strict, but your poem earned you a spot on the winner’s list. Very well done, my friend.

Valsa George
Date: 10/13/2024 8:39:00 PM

Hi Emile, thank you so much for choosing my poem for placement. I am grateful.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/30/2024 2:01:00 PM

enjoyed the sound of poetry which brought musicality and cadence throughout your piece, valsa!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/30/2024 8:27:00 AM

What a perfect picture you paint in your so superb write - your imagination is beyond compare and your story is awesome - I love it and will keep it in a special file and give it to my granddaughter, who is only 19 months old walks and talks and babbles sometimes and wanders in our garden and always spends time with our ornamental dwarf, when she is about 7 years old. Love and blessings, Jennifer

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/30/2024 7:36:00 AM

What a sonorous write with such an incredible use of words that create an impactful effect of audible imagery! I realise that this is for a contest and I'm sure that you've indeed done a phenomenal job, dear poetess.. Especially love the way you've ended it with a note of everything falling into silence ~ couldn't have been a more impeccable ending here. All the movements of nature you've so incredibly depicted and it feels like I'm witnessing the scene of ringing raindrops and much more, alive! So good to be reading your words after a very long time, coming back here slowly.. Sending my best wishes & light to you ~

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/27/2024 3:02:00 AM

"Along with the rain, came the roaring wind as it passed, the bells clanged" and a beautiful, exciting poem appeared from a splash of drenching inspiration. Refreshingly quenching. Love it! Thank you.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/26/2024 8:22:00 PM

I imagined this storm through your words. It was a realistic journey which gave a sense of relief at the end. Very well written, in my opinion.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/26/2024 9:25:00 AM

Dear Valsa, you wrote a wonderful poem, using so many words that contain sound. You deserve high placement. Best for a win. Blessings.

Yann Rolland

Date: 9/25/2024 6:21:00 AM

this is very well written, your words and image have great fidelity to the rainfall, so descriptive, enjoyed yann

Sally Eslinger

Date: 9/25/2024 5:30:00 AM

Valsa, hi! A wonderful poem! Your verb choices brought vivid impact to my reading this sensual poem! Good luck with contest!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/24/2024 8:41:00 PM

Your words brought life to a rainstorm.. Good job.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/24/2024 10:18:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your beautiful rain write. I love hearing the rain. We need rain. Can you send some over??? Hahaha!!! "Good Luck" Have a beautiful day writing away...............