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Two seemingly unrelated Triolets brought together by three flanking haiku.  I am calling this combined form an Enclosed Triolet; the haiku serve to give commentary to the Triolet.

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As afternoon fades and the shadows grow longer daylight turns to dusk As daytime slowly comes to end, and twilight spreads across the sky; the stars in heavens thus ascend. As daytime slowly comes to end, the birds in trees the night to spend, for in the darkness do not fly; as daytime slowly comes to end, and twilight spreads across the sky. After the sun sets and darkness blankets the land lovers start to play Please kiss me when the sun has set, and darkness overtakes the land, and daily chores have all been met. Please kiss me when the sun has set; make this a night to ne’er forget; all night fulfill our love’s demand. Please kiss me when the sun has set, and darkness overtakes the land. As darkness arrives lovers cling to each other love the night away
February 22, 2018 Poem of the Day - February 24, 2018

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Date: 2/16/2021 7:53:00 AM
John, I love your poetry! Some made me tear--a good thing :) You are so accomplished, your words so filled with passion. Happy thoughts sent your way. Ann Peck
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/16/2021 9:19:00 AM
Thank you so much, Ann, I’m glad you enjoy my poetry. I always find it special when people read and comment on my older poems, thank you for taking the time to read them. Hugs, John
Date: 12/7/2020 2:00:00 PM
John, your words are as delicate and colorful as twilight and a sunset all set in your very romantic picture. So very creative! Congratulations on your win!
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 12/7/2020 8:31:00 PM
Lucky us! Hope you were able to go back to sleep!
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John Gondolf
Date: 12/7/2020 2:57:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sam, I'm glad you enjoyed it. These thoughts came to me about 3 AM one morning so I got up and wrote them down.
Date: 1/2/2019 8:17:00 PM
Wow what a lovely form and what a beautiful creation. Congrats on your top win. This is a FAVE for me, John.
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John Gondolf
Date: 1/2/2019 8:42:00 PM
Thank you so much, Line, for your kind words, and thanks for the fav. John
Date: 4/10/2018 3:16:00 PM
Your poem shows that you have a very romantic heart. Lovely to read. Congratulations on your trophy win.
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Date: 3/20/2018 2:23:00 PM
You speak of love very well John, love the imagery and suggestion here;-)
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John Gondolf
Date: 3/20/2018 3:33:00 PM
Thanks so much, Keith, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Date: 3/18/2018 8:46:00 AM
I truly stand in awe of this very creative , original and beautifully romantic piece my friend!!!! This to me is the high mark of a truly great poem... Fully deserving of any honors bestowed it! A fav....
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John Gondolf
Date: 3/18/2018 10:00:00 AM
Robert, thanks so much for your wonderful comment. I appreciate your thoughts and your support very much, and thanks for the FAV. John
Date: 3/9/2018 3:07:00 PM
Oh, John - I don't know how I missed this, but what a worthy find regardless of when. Enchanting, lovely and timeless with a flavor that favors the heart. Love it. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 3/9/2018 6:12:00 PM
Thank you so much, CayCay, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Date: 3/5/2018 5:51:00 AM
Congratulations. Let the lovers play...
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John Gondolf
Date: 3/6/2018 1:00:00 PM
Kai, thanks so much for your comments and visit. John
Date: 3/2/2018 10:42:00 PM
Hi John, it seems congratulations are in order for your trophy win. Congratulations my friend. This reads a winner all the way. Excellent work the way you fitted both of these forms together. Also, a belated congratulations for your POTD. This excellent write deserves all the accolades it receives. This one has to go into my faves John. Have a wonderful weekend. Your Friend....Mike.
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John Gondolf
Date: 3/3/2018 8:53:00 AM
Mike, thank you so much for your comments and for taking time to read my poetry. Thanks for the fave as well my friend. John
Date: 2/27/2018 7:58:00 PM
Just breathtaking John. Such stunning elegance graces your poetic lines of beautiful imagery, rhythm and rhymes. A fervently romantic write in an innovative form. Love it! Congratulations on your great trophy win, my friend, and a belated congrats for recent POTD honors as well! ~Susan
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/28/2018 7:17:00 AM
Thank you so much, Susan, I appreciate your comments. Your support means a great deal to me. John
Date: 2/27/2018 6:06:00 PM
wow, a trophy win. Awesome, John. Congratulations! And you do not even have a name for your unique form used here!
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/28/2018 7:06:00 AM
Thank you so much, Andrea, perhaps if I use this form again I should give it a name. John
Date: 2/27/2018 4:57:00 PM
Hi John, You truly do deserve all of the accolades you are getting for this write. Congratulations on your trophie/ top win in the contest:-) Alexis
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 5:03:00 PM
Hi Alexis, once again, thank you so much, you are so kind. I appreciate your friendship so much. John
Date: 2/27/2018 3:48:00 PM
John, back again to congratulate you on another honor - your well-deserved First Place Trophy win for your beautiful poem! Awesome! Sandra
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 4:56:00 PM
Thank you once again, Sandra, your support means a great deal to me. John
Date: 2/27/2018 11:44:00 AM
So innovative and ingenious. Your poetic genie has granted us our wish: To read and re-read this marvelous poem. A no-doubt-about-it first place trophy winner, well-deserved! Best of everything, Gershon
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 11:57:00 AM
Thanks, Gershon, I appreciate your comment, and feel free to re-read it as many times as you like. John
Date: 2/27/2018 10:32:00 AM
This is poetic deliverance. Well done, John.
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 10:38:00 AM
Thank you so much, Lin, your comments mean a great deal to me. John
Date: 2/27/2018 9:31:00 AM
Congratulations for your win John :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 9:45:00 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I appreciate it. John
Date: 2/27/2018 8:22:00 AM
Poem of the day first and now a trophy gracing your portfolio for first place in a premiere contest! I'm so happy for you, John. This is a fantastic poem! Congratulations again, my friend.
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 8:48:00 AM
Thank you, Rhoda, your comments and support and friendship mean much to me. John
Date: 2/27/2018 8:17:00 AM
Belated congrats on POTD John, this is a special write, sometimes when it flows at 2 am it is the best, I've had many a night where I too have to get up and write, I obey the muse because if I wait till morning I'll forget for sure. Congrats on the contest win also, 2 for 2.
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 8:33:00 AM
Thanks so much, John, I appreciate your comments and support. John
Date: 2/27/2018 7:50:00 AM
What an amazing format. Very effective. Congrats on your most deserving win, John.
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 7:52:00 AM
Thanks so much , Line, I appreciate it. John
Date: 2/27/2018 5:42:00 AM
John, I have no words. The rhythm is just stunning and rhyming is amazing. I loved everything about this poem the first time I read it. The haikus are great and the fact you did 8 syllables in each line really made it perfection. Great job! congrats and thank you :)-luloo
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/27/2018 6:21:00 AM
Thank you so much for the wonderful comment, Luloo, I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. This was one of those thoughts that came to me at 2 AM, I'm so glad I got up to write it down. Thanks for hosting the contest. John
Date: 2/26/2018 1:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your lovely poem being honored with POTD John! : ) Soupmail
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Date: 2/26/2018 12:59:00 AM
- Congratulations on your excellent p.o.t.d. , John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/26/2018 4:02:00 AM
Thank you so much, Anne-Lise.
Date: 2/24/2018 9:55:00 PM
So romantic and so beautifully written, John. Congratulations on your wonderful poem being honored Poem Of The Day! Sandra :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/25/2018 6:51:00 AM
Thank you so much, Sandra, I appreciate it. John
Date: 2/24/2018 7:20:00 PM
Such a romantic offering encased by your skillful poem within a poem and then the final verse is the crowning glory. Congrats John- for your POTD- well done - Maria
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/25/2018 6:45:00 AM
Thank you so much, Maria, I appreciate it. John
Date: 2/24/2018 7:18:00 PM
Congratulations on Poem of the Day! Well deserved. This is a fabulous write, John.
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John Gondolf
Date: 2/25/2018 6:44:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend. John
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