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Arthur

He was a tall muscular man, dark- haired and in the prime of his life. In horror I watched him stumble and fall back, face up onto the green grass. Three knife wounds cut deep, thrown with great speed and precision by an assassin dressed in black in a matching sombrero with silver band. I rushed to his side placing both my trembling hands on his cheeks as I watched his face become pale. My tears fell on his face as I pleaded with him, don't die, please don't die. He couldn't speak to me, but his eyes said I love you before his spirit departed. I laid my head on his bleeding chest and sobbed uncontrollably in disbelief. It was then that I saw her standing there In the corner of the lawn with a slight smile on her face, her soft dress blowing in the breeze, and I knew it was she, his own wife, who had hired the assassin. I heard windchimes sadly sing his epitaph. 8/19/2018 Wind Chimes Poetry Contest~N/A~ Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 10/27/2018 8:40:00 AM
Hi Connie, this is an excellent write, the words are perfect, the images are strong. This is master story telling Connie. Your creativity is singing. This is so interesting, keeps the readers attention, and I am sorry, I have to say it. the last line, perfection. I could read this over and over. A Fave, most definitely. Have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/27/2018 1:10:00 PM
This poem was written from a past life dream that shook me to my core Mike. Thank you for faving it as I dreampt it over 40 years ago and it is still as clear to me as f it were last night! xxoo
Date: 8/31/2018 12:58:00 PM
WOW-captivating from beginning to end. The last line is a unique surprise. Connie.~ Warren :)
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/31/2018 1:26:00 PM
Thank you for the appreciation Warren. Unfortunately it got an N/A but I sure have gotten some nice comments. : )
Date: 8/25/2018 10:05:00 PM
Oh, my and ooh, goodness, this is gripping drama. I can't recall what you told me about this poem (darn it!), but it is a well-written, hair raising and chill inducing write. This should do quite well in any contest. Love ... CayCay
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/25/2018 11:22:00 PM
It was conceived from a realistic dream I had over forty years ago. Thank you CayCay! : )
Date: 8/25/2018 6:48:00 PM
Hello Connie … sends shivers up the spine with the thought of knowing this could or possibly happen - the hearing of a wind chime will always be related - very good poem as usual Connie - Lindsay
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Date: 8/24/2018 3:57:00 PM
Great storytelling, Connie. Lovely last line, too.
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Date: 8/23/2018 3:55:00 PM
Wonderful write Connie, last line was perfect, best wishes...
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/23/2018 4:47:00 PM
Thank you Charlie. I usually don't write dark poetry and hope this isn't too dark for the contest. : )
Date: 8/23/2018 7:38:00 AM
And with that, my blood runs cold...a great contest entry. Best of luck.
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Date: 8/21/2018 8:32:00 PM
Dark and touching poem. Things like that happen all time, unfortunately. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 8/21/2018 12:29:00 PM
Your free versed narrative attained the desired results, Connie...you captured my attention with the fast buildup and emotional approach; enjoyed the end twist and clever insertion of wind-chimes. Warm regards // paul
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Date: 8/20/2018 11:34:00 PM
Excellent poetry my friend...the chimes of death...great approach to the theme Connie...best for a fantastic win...love & chimes...^WW^
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Date: 8/20/2018 5:09:00 PM
Thanks for what you told me about this poem, Connie. It's very good work from you. don't overthink things. You used wind chimes in a unique way. If I were a judge, I'd appreciate that!
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Date: 8/20/2018 4:07:00 PM
wow Connie I wasn't expecting a tale like this on the wind chime theme. good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2018 5:06:00 PM
I keep second guessing my choice Jan, that maybe this poem is too morose for his contest. I love windchimes and could have written something much prettier but this came from a realistic dream. Thank you for the wish for luck, I am sure I will need it. : )
Date: 8/20/2018 12:27:00 PM
The wind chimes sang a truly chilling tune with this one Connie!! Took me by surprise and I loved it!! Well done xxoo
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2018 12:53:00 PM
This poem came from a very real dream I had about forty years ago. I remember every detail of it and I cried for Arthur all day. I believe it came from a past life experience. I never cry like that over a dream. Thank you my friend : )
Date: 8/20/2018 10:09:00 AM
The superb imagery brings the author's feelings and fears alive and in your face with their weight. This is sad and full of feelings that emphasizes the deep pain and hurt generated from grief. Emile.
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Date: 8/19/2018 11:43:00 PM
A beautiful but sad story...
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Date: 8/19/2018 9:29:00 PM
Wow! Connie, you captured me with your poetic intrigue and I was enthralled with every line.. A thrilling piece with a captivating twist for a great ending! Fantastic imagery and poignant, haunting use of the wind chimes. Excellent! Best wishes for a win my creative friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/19/2018 8:38:00 PM
Wow! Excellent, Connie--very creative. Janice
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Date: 8/19/2018 8:19:00 PM
Your imagination grabbed me by the dendrites and threw me on his chest too. Good luck in the contest, my friend!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/19/2018 11:14:00 PM
You sound like you may be a nurse Caren. I loved your comment. Thank you very much. : )
Date: 8/19/2018 7:50:00 PM
Wow, what a poem with a fantastic ending , Connie, good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/19/2018 3:25:00 PM
Wow, what a story! Good luck in the contest. Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 8/19/2018 1:36:00 PM
wow, I love how you incorporated wind chimes at the end. I had no idea how you were going to fit them in.This is so cleverly done, Connie. I hope I can come up with something as clever.
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Date: 8/19/2018 10:38:00 AM
A captivating dynamic but sad story dear, Conie! Certainly a winner candidate! Good luck!
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Date: 8/19/2018 7:13:00 AM
You capture intrigue and excitement here...and gave a chime to end...Nice...All the best Connie
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Date: 8/19/2018 6:50:00 AM
Quite a story Connie..you wrote it well..Best for a win.
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