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Are You There God

The man lay painfully wedged between two large boulders, his position an anomaly only the cruelest of fates could bring to a man. In one moment he’d been sure-footed, gingerly climbing the cliff. In the next instant, he was tumbling into a cavity lying beneath a crevice in that side of ancient rock. As he fell, his cell phone clattered briefly and landed somewhere beneath him. Then to his utter horror, he realized that instead of landing, like his cell phone, at the very bottom of the small opening through which he’d slipped, his body was now lodged tightly between the two boulders. Desperately, the man tried to extricate himself from the rocks’ cruel grip, but he was now aware his right arm was dislocated, and the way he was pinned made his struggle to free himself futile. He had no place to put his feet for leverage to push himself either upward or downward. He was suspended mid-air between those two miserable blocks of stone. He imagined those boulders lying in wait for centuries to one day enslave him, an intruder in their realm of quietude. . . That solitude he so often craved was now as burdensome to him as the two huge stones which had become his personal millstones. Unable to even reach behind him for his meager supply of water, the man knew, unless rescued, his time was short. The magnitude of his misfortune washed over him. He was in a desert with no water. The place he had chosen for his weekend excursion was remote, and his chance of being discovered, even more remote. He could see daylight from above streaming down on him, but people, even if they happened to be in this area, would never see him. He thought about his parents, siblings and the girl he’d recently met and fancied spending a lifetime with. . . a lifetime! How tenuous life was! With these thoughts he closed his tired eyes. In the dead of night, chilled to the bone, the man jerked awake. Any tiny hope to which he’d clung seemed to dissolve in that moment. He began to sob. "Oh God," he cried, "Are you there, God? "Do you hear me? Do you see me? I hurt so bad, God! Please, if you are there, God, help me. Help me." Another day became two, three, and then four. Parched and crying dry tears, he repented of any bad he‘d done. He felt some small comfort in knowing he’d done mostly good. Yielding to fate, he looked upward to that small space of heaven he could see and closed his eyes for the final time. . Above him, gazing down from a thinly veiled partition in the sky, was his guardian, who also had wept with him, but she had wept not for a life being cut short. Her charge could not know the happiness in store for him. She had wept instead for the fear and the suffering that he’d had to endure for those four long days alone. As he closed his eyes, she shed her final tear and spread strong graceful wings for her descent.
10/14/2015: Inspired by a true story that I saw a movie about, but I made many changes to that story and have given it a very different outcome. For the Contest of the Silent One.

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Date: 10/22/2015 10:55:00 AM
Andrea. Congrats on your very deserved win. This is a most interesting story. I did not see the movie, but yours has to be the better one. GBU!
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Date: 10/19/2015 8:52:00 AM
A very touching narrative Andrea. Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 10/18/2015 4:38:00 PM
Hi Andrea, this is a sweet win... SKAT
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Date: 10/18/2015 8:26:00 AM
This is beautiful! I see this won..congratulations! I love the image of the angel crying with him.
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Date: 10/17/2015 12:33:00 PM
Very well penned; my friend..' have enjoyed stopping today.
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Date: 10/17/2015 7:20:00 AM
Congrats on your win! Your inspiration is based on a true story! A beautiful oetic expression! Balveen
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Date: 10/17/2015 6:13:00 AM
Awesome story and awesome win! Congrats, Andie! hugs!
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Date: 10/17/2015 5:41:00 AM
Reads like a winner..Enjoyed reading your story in poetic form..Sad that life was lost to one so young..Maybe in real life he was rescued and given a chance to do some more good with his life..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/17/2015 4:35:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea, not only on achieving this first place, but also for managing to keep me riveted to your narrative. Love the end part! // paul
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Date: 10/17/2015 12:27:00 AM
I wrote my message not realizing this had already won. Still, keep the luck for anything you want! I haven't read some of the other entries, but I don't need to in order to know this narrative is a winner ... CayCay
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Date: 10/17/2015 12:25:00 AM
That was very well-written. As I'm sure you know, it is easy to guess which movie all this emotion came from. I am so glad it encouraged this dramatic, entertaining and inspiring write. I love stories with guardian angels. Good luck .... CayCay
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Date: 10/16/2015 9:00:00 PM
The title an inspiring Question, the poem is the answer, and i see even beyond the words, a mind a concept of a remarkable woman! I checked out the contest winners list. am i surprised? no way!
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Date: 10/16/2015 11:47:00 AM
I remember that movie Andrea. I love what you did with this story. Congratulations on your number one win! Very well deserved!
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Date: 10/16/2015 9:20:00 AM
Hey Andrea, a warm and hearty congratulations on your win with this amazing work of art!! I love the way you reworked the storyline (is this the one where he had to cut off his wrist?) Absolute brilliant writing and well deserving of the win. Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 10/16/2015 9:19:00 AM
This is a masterpiece! Congratulations on your top of the list win! Pandita
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Date: 10/16/2015 8:16:00 AM
Beyond amazing! Congratulations Andrea!
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Date: 10/16/2015 7:37:00 AM
Andrea, this is magnificent! I have suspected we each have a guardian angel since the day I went to step off a curb in center city Philly to jaywalk without looking first and someone grabbed the bicep of my right arm. I turned sharply but no one was on the sidewalk, no one at all!
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Date: 10/16/2015 1:38:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome first place winning write Andrea!
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Date: 10/16/2015 12:44:00 AM
Wow. Viv x
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Date: 10/16/2015 12:08:00 AM
Greetings Andrea! Congratulations for your #1 placement! ;-) It is a deep poem indeed....
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Date: 10/15/2015 11:18:00 PM
Oh Andrea!!!! Stop it! I have no tissue close by! Such a radiant beautiful poem!
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Date: 10/15/2015 10:54:00 PM
Andrea beautiful win!!!!!!!!!!! A deserving win. Congratulations!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 10/15/2015 9:31:00 PM
Andria --I couldn't read the whole thing its too long I read the last paragraph and it seems he has a female angel coming to pluck life out of him. when my time comes I want one of those gentle ladies too not no ugly male angel looking like Godzilla. Very imaginative
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Date: 10/15/2015 9:01:00 PM
Wow! This is so descriptive and so beautifully told! I was enthralled from beginning to end. BRAVO Andrea! Best wishes, Keith a definite 7!
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Date: 10/15/2015 6:32:00 PM
Andrea, this piece was like watching a movie. It was really good.Congratulations on your top win it was well deserved:-) Alexis 7
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