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(Nb- I'd just washed the stone before putting flowers in)

 

Thanks for seeing me, if you please can I now get up off my knees? Where do I start? I've made a list forgive me for the one's I've missed. Can we go back to '77 when you were in your cosy heaven whilst down below I watched my Dad struggle for breath, his lungs gone bad? Ok, my life then I'll admit held little faith for quite a bit I fought daily battles alone relied not on the great unknown. When finally he left us all my heart gave out a silent call that in some bright celestial light he finally was now alright. Is he? Unaided, can he get along clear lungs to breathe, give praise in song? Dull eyes that sometimes shone in mirth as clear as his first hour since birth? Eighteen years fast forward now my link with you rebuilt somehow as by your rules I tried to live the bond between us tentative From ten commandments, maybe six I got to obey- 'pick 'n mix' The good stuff I could not resist was sadly never on your list. Was that why when I called you Lord you never offered a reward? When Mother's health went in decline you punished all those sins of mine? And still that faith, though tattered strands made me kneel down and clasp my hands and thank you for final release and pray that she now rests in peace. Does she? With father's hand does she now go like that old black and white photo, with wedding veil and beaming smile down some cherub-lined wedding aisle? And then my brother, six years on happened so quickly, and was gone we soldier on and do our best while he sleeps in eternal rest. Or does he? Have you for him set by a place where he plays his Fender Jazz Bass? Making up a group of four with Lennon, Hendrix, Gary Moore? Jamming sessions, laying down tracks free from Cancer and heart attacks playing to approving nods from some of music history's Gods. Sorry, Lord, I know there's only you, really. Anyway that's enough from me you've sat and listened quietly not judged me which I did expect and one last thing, Lord- am I next? For contest 'Are you there God', sponsored by Silent One 13th October 2015

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Date: 10/18/2015 4:39:00 PM
Viv, this is a nice win. SKAT
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:37:00 PM
Thanks, Skat, I'm switching back to 'humour mode now, methinks. Darker days at this time of year are enough for me, Viv x
Date: 10/18/2015 1:45:00 PM
Very strong meaningful write. Questions with no real answers in our life time. Something we all deal with in our own way.
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:38:00 PM
That's the nice thing about Poetry, don't you think, James? Very Cathartic. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/17/2015 10:32:00 AM
Your fondness for your family cannot be denied. You have a wonderful heart. All the experiences you have had have brought you to the place where you now are, so there is nothing wrong/bad you could have ever done to cause any grief. Such is life--a total mystery. We all just do the best we can. Your poetry is a wonderful gift to me and I thank you kindly, sir.
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Date: 10/16/2015 6:54:00 PM
Absolutely great Viv... you ask the questions we all ask with great rhyme - Lindsay
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Date: 10/16/2015 10:44:00 PM
Thanks, Lindsay, hope you're well. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/16/2015 7:15:00 AM
Viv, this is a well written piece. You have asked that we all have thought about. Congratulations on your winning write it was well deserved :') Alexis 7
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Date: 10/16/2015 1:41:00 AM
Indded a superb write n win Viv! Big congrats on ur awesome win!
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:41:00 PM
Cheers, Dr Upma, thanks for stopping by. Viv x
Date: 10/15/2015 11:12:00 PM
That Vig, is a masterpiece from top to bottom, I just loved how you summed up how we all think and struggle over the years, and said so in such an eloquent way! A7 all the way!
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Date: 10/16/2015 1:03:00 AM
Thanks Arthur, yes I must have a go at the childlike unquestioning acceptance tactic. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/15/2015 10:56:00 PM
Viv nice win my friend.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 10/16/2015 1:04:00 AM
Thanks Michael, one of the Silent One's thoughtful subjects for a contest, guaranteed to produce a rich harvest. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/15/2015 4:12:00 PM
reality tinged with humour - so many questions and few answers - congrats on your win Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/16/2015 1:05:00 AM
Thanks Jan, and well done you, too. Hope you're ticketty-boo. Viv x
Date: 10/13/2015 12:58:00 AM
This is a jolly good poem a bit of serious and a bit of fun mixed into a really neat blend. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 10/13/2015 7:14:00 AM
Thanks Mark, to be honest, on meeting my maker I think I'd be a little star struck to say the least. Many thanks for dropping by. regards, Viv

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