And When You Look At Me

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And when you look at me once more
a little smile, a passing glance,
I look at you and cross the floor,
to beg if I might have this dance.

You shyly dance, and look aside,
and when you look at me once more,
with fairy face and eyes so wide,
I want to dance forevermore.

A tender kiss our lips explore,
with pounding heart and soul in flight,
and when you look at me once more,
I pray I've found my love tonight.

A passion that I can't disguise,
this kiss that touched my very core,
and then I see it in your eyes,
and when you look at me once more.

January 24, 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 2/19/2016 5:54:00 AM
Nice story about having this framed as a gift for your wife, Roy. Flowers fade and die, chocolates get eaten. But this gift will last the rest of your lives.
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Date: 2/18/2016 7:53:00 PM
Congrats at your win, Roy! I seem to remember you being quite the hilarious poet, but now I see you can write tender-hearted as well. I love your refrain line! It's the star of the show...
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Date: 2/18/2016 12:39:00 PM
Congratulations. Now, I'm not the one to surger coat anything, ask the members who spend there life on this site. With that said, this should not have won "1st" ...sorry. But hey, I didn't judge sooo nice work though... Smh
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Jimmy Anderson
Date: 2/19/2016 8:45:00 AM
Roy, your piece is good work. And although I consider myself A Godly man to a certain extent, we are all poets, I myself a published poet, been on this site since 2010 round about. I hate alot of fake azz poets comments on here. Tell it like it is. Jeez... We need the positive and negative criticism on our work!
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/18/2016 1:15:00 PM
At last an unvarnished comment! I wish we could see more of them. I see you have no skin in this game, so I'll take it as honest, but not helpful, as it lacks detail. I would agree with you, except that all the others I read, save one, were worse. So first place, but in a slow horse race is how I would see it.
Date: 2/18/2016 11:12:00 AM
Great poem, congratulations!!
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Date: 2/18/2016 7:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved top spot!
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Date: 2/18/2016 2:42:00 AM
Congrats Roy, for your amazing poem's first placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 2/17/2016 10:58:00 PM
Absolutely romantic Roy.. congrats on top place win..
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Date: 2/17/2016 7:06:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! Very romantic, written well, read well.
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Date: 2/17/2016 3:16:00 PM
This really is beautiful
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Date: 2/17/2016 2:28:00 PM
This poem is beautifully romantic Roy. Congratulations on your first place win. Very deserved my friend! #7
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Date: 2/17/2016 10:17:00 AM
Roy, congrats on your wonderful love poem. Thanks for Supporting a Skat Contest, while she is away. Love LINDA
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/17/2016 5:08:00 PM
Thanks, Linda! First time I've ever placed so well in a contest judged by you.
Date: 2/17/2016 10:03:00 AM
Ahh.....so lovely to see that romance is in the air, to never fade away! Congrats to you, Roy !!
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Date: 2/17/2016 8:38:00 AM
Roy, thank you for the support. :) SK
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Date: 2/7/2016 10:15:00 AM
Wonderfully romantic, and so nicely done, Roy. Congratulations on your fine win in Andrea's contest. Sandra
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Date: 2/7/2016 6:10:00 AM
This is quite lovely, Roy. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/7/2016 5:20:00 AM
A beautiful Quatern, Roy. Many congrats on your win. Elaine
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Date: 2/7/2016 4:18:00 AM
ROY, Congrats in Andrea's contest. LINDA
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Date: 2/6/2016 8:08:00 PM
What a beautiful poem--a 7+! Janice
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Date: 2/6/2016 6:38:00 PM
This is super sweet and well written for its meter and many of the other things I am looking for when I judge a contest. Congrats for your great win.
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/6/2016 7:07:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea. I wrote this one for my wife who always wanted a poem about when we first met, in February. This was her birthday gift, which I had framed. She was ecstatic.
Date: 1/25/2016 6:44:00 AM
Eyes say a lot, most men don't take the time to listen. Like the poem.
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