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Ancient Fruit

And there you are my tasty fruit Emerald life stretches from the root Lush grape vines growing upward to reach the sun Sun blessed one by one Dripping wet morning dew Sugared sweet tasty too Late August harvest time shall be near A fresh bowl on my lap glazed where I peer Summer kisses gardens flourish In my mouth and body it did nourish

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Jai Garg

Date: 11/7/2008 8:16:00 PM

Lovely, I was looking for an apple in eve's hands and wow! Quite a fascinating write. Congrats.

Mary Duhart

Date: 8/4/2008 5:41:00 AM

very descriptive I can see and taste the fruit as I read. There's a fruit tree in the yard across from my yard and no one lives there so the fruit is ripe for picking.

Heidie Buys

Date: 8/3/2008 11:25:00 AM

Very vivid and tantalizing. Well done. Regards Heidie

Elaine George

Date: 8/2/2008 9:28:00 PM

Beautiful descriptive, dear laura. Lainie

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 8/1/2008 6:14:00 PM

Time to hit the fridge after reading this tasty poem. Vince

Adell Foster

Date: 8/1/2008 7:59:00 AM

Laura, you have painted quite a vivid picture of the mouth-watering fruit of the vine my friend. I've noticed a minute typo in line 2 the word "streches" I believe should be "stretchs" However, it is still a very beautifully writen piece and truly a pleasure to read and review :-)Thank you for sharing, God's Love and Many Blessings, Always, Adell

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 7/31/2008 12:05:00 PM

Laura, the rhyme scheme in this is perfect as it makes the read so smooth. Your imagery of the fruit and the lusciousness of it is wonderfully vivid. Michael

Sharon Winter

Date: 7/30/2008 4:52:00 PM

Oh this is just too tempting. My mouth waters for such luscious fruit off the vine. Such imagery. There is no doubt of your delight in partaking of this enjoyment. Well written! Love, Shar

Date: 7/29/2008 7:45:00 PM

Nice use of imagery in this poem. Yes, nature is a blessing in many ways. You may want to change streches to stretches in line 2. Much to think about here. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Karen

James Foulk

Date: 7/29/2008 6:58:00 PM

so sweet they taste. a very nice pome enjoyed reading it and makes me want to go eat some grapes right off the vine. thank you for your comments on my poetry.