Rhona Mcferran Poet Shadorma

An Unlikely Romance

Unlikely
this romance between
Miss Cricket
and stodgy
Buddy Biddle, so stagnant
set in his ways, stuck

While Cricket
eighty-nine years young
dances rings
around him
full of impish energy
mischievous antics

He proposed
but Miss Cricket won't
marry him
knows better
she's outlived countless lovers
and won't be tied down

She's having
way too much fun- so
fancy-free
no one to
boss her, tell her what to do
woman on the loose

Anyway
he's too old for her
'though only
eighty-four
he can't keep up or begin
to understand her

And he has
hang-ups about sex
proper, prim
prudish ways
appalled at her passionate
kisses, advances

Waggish grin
wild, irreverent
she enjoys
shocking him
with outlandish behavior
incorrigible

Some days he
says he can't take it
she's too much
gone too far
with her pranks- but he gets so
lonely without her

And 'though he
hates to admit it
life is dull
without her
she makes things interesting
by being herself


(NOTE: Although I listed this as a Free Verse, it is actually in Shadorma form...)

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Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2018 at 3:54 PM I think I am out of the loop here since you must be alluding to fictional characters I never heard of. Anyway, it was a delightful write! Rhona Mcferran October 15, 2018 at 3:59 PM Yes, "Miss Cricket" (and Buddy Biddle) are fictional... although I have known several couples like them over the years! I'm so glad that you liked it! ;)

Susan Ashley October 15, 2018 at 1:53 PM Oh, I love the spirit of Miss Cricket and I am enthralled with this amazing poem of this romantic 'odd couple', Rhona. Beautifully and intimately expressed with charm and humor of the attraction of opposites.. A wonderful poetry form as well.. Superb poetry! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Rhona Mcferran October 15, 2018 at 3:56 PM Thank you so much!! I had so much fun writing this- and am thrilled that you enjoyed it, too! ;)

Caren Krutsinger October 15, 2018 at 4:21 AM Weirdly enough, I do not feel like I can comment on this enough. I LOVE THIS ONE!!!!!!! Rhona Mcferran October 15, 2018 at 3:54 PM Thank you!!! You have made my day with all your enthusiastic comments! ;) ...and I'm glad you love Miss Cricket so much, because I'm planning to feature her in quite a few pieces to come!

Caren Krutsinger October 15, 2018 at 4:20 AM Miss Cricket is my idol; she needs to whirl and twirl her energetic, fun-loving, loose woman self out of his life. He is WAY too old for her. This went to my FAVs list, of course, my friend. I am going to re-read this whenever I want, and I want to re-read it now, and maybe in ten minutes and again in 20. Have a great day!

Caren Krutsinger October 15, 2018 at 4:19 AM I love Miss Cricket; I can see her, and she can do much better! Fancy-free, woman on the loose, impish energy, dances rings around him....dance away Miss Cricket. Whirl and twirl yourself away from him. He is WAY too set-in-his-ways and way too old for you my lady! ESCAPE while you can! Loved the entire poem, my friend. Whimsically fun!