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How splendid to be fancy-free, A perfect morn upon the sea, Just the surf, my board and me, And yet, a murky form ... Obscures the water, warm. Angled shapes there, dark and grave, Hidden, deep inside the wave, As I use my board to shave Sea foam off the wake ... A perfect turquoise break. Sinister, and time to bide ... Shaped for speed, with silky hide, Churning shadows in the tide, Patient for a chance ... To end my wavy dance. No way in hell that I'll bequeath A piece of me to ragged teeth, Of somber bulk that looms beneath, This day is much too bright ... To end ... in bloody fright.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 3/15/2018 1:17:00 PM
Loved this one Greg, yeah I don't know what's up lately with the comments, I pulled a song I posted a few days ago same thing few comments and I know it was good. Take care!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2018 7:18:00 PM
Thanks, my friend - I so appreciate it! I just haven't had time, things are so incredibly crazy right now ... hoping to get caught up soon. I know a couple of others in the same boat, (Andrea, for one) ... must be this time of year. ;-)
Date: 2/18/2018 1:40:00 PM
Another great write Greg no pun intended.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/18/2018 11:05:00 PM
LOL - I love that, Edward ... I'm a sucker for a good pun, (and the bad ones are even better, ha!). Thanks and blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 2/16/2018 9:03:00 PM
Imaginative! I have never surfed and don't believe I ever ever will!! Another great ending on this one too, Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/17/2018 1:09:00 AM
Thank you very much, Andrea, I so appreciate the kind words - this was fun! :-)
Date: 2/16/2018 7:35:00 AM
This is a spine tingler reminding me of "Jaws" a bit; I think this is every swimmers/surfers worst nightmare and you made it very real in this compelling write Gregory…glad to read you would put up a fight…hit the shark right in the nose or poke its eyes out!~Che :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/16/2018 9:16:00 AM
Never go down, (or under), without a fight, Che! Thanks so much for the kind comments, I'm pleased you found this worthy, my friend ... life is worth at LEAST a poke in the eye, right? ;-) Blessings!
Date: 2/15/2018 11:05:00 PM
Wow! Spine tingling then firm in statement that this beast will not get you! Enjoyed...very much! I’ve been fascinated with them since seeing jaws.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/16/2018 2:19:00 AM
Me, too, Kim - I've seen a Hammerhead while snorkeling, (far away), and a VERY large Barracuda swam right in front of my nose, (that was scary), but never one of these monsters, (or a Tiger Shark) ... I'd probably never get back in the water, lol! Glad you enjoyed this one! :-) <3
Date: 2/15/2018 3:08:00 PM
I was swept away by your amazing imagery greg and the pic is perfect to accompany the poem :-) hugs Jan xx
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/16/2018 2:16:00 AM
Thank you so much, Jan - I had fun with this one, (though it's not getting a lot of comments) ... I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, my friend! :-) <3

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