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An Incomplete Love Story

They met one summer’s end. He was in town for not too long and needed to get back to his own country. Meanwhile, he hung out with family. His sister lived in that small town, and he was staying at her house. He drove around a Riviera car, his in-law’s, who was an American. To fill his time, he’d cross the street to see the pretty girl who was its night cashier. He’d caught her eye and he could tell that she was into him like he was into her! They’d flirted for a week when finally, he asked her out. She happily said yes. Romance was blossoming at rapid speed. The girl was seventeen and still in school. She didn’t know his language, but he knew a bit of English though it mattered not; they spoke to one another with their eyes! A soul connection like no other that he’d felt before in all his nineteen years developed in that week when first they met. He knew she loved him though they never spoke those “three short words.” He read it in the way she touched his face and gazed into his soul. If only she were finished with her school, perhaps she’d leave with him, for he could not stay longer in America. The time for him to leave came quickly. Both agreed to write each other, and they spoke by phone. It wasn’t like today with instant texts. The girl would fairly dance with happiness to get his cards and letters in the mail. They dreamed apart the dream of being with their other half so many miles away. The girl took off for college in a year. The young man tried to make a better life in hopes that she might join him one sweet day. But other plans got in the way, and he quite foolishly lost contact with the girl. She wrote to him, but he’d left home to train for his new job. The girl felt he’d moved on. . . The next year passed. The girl found a new man. Her soul mate he was not, yet she was young and foolish like the boy who’d failed to write and answer her last letters that she’d sent. He had his job. He called her home phone, but she didn’t live there any more. He got the number she was using, which was new. With nervousness, he called this number which her mom had given him. He’d not been told the circumstances and how she’d moved on. She took his phone call, asking “Who is this?” And when he said his name, there was a pause. . . She told him she was married, and a child was on the way. They chatted for a while, but he could never realize the pain the girl was feeling, knowing she could not be with him ever! To this very day, he does not know he stays inside her mind; that when she writes romance, she writes of him and unrequited love, not knowing that he too still thinks of her and always will. Now lost to one another, each subsists on memories of sweet unblemished bliss. July 23, 2018 Written in blank verse, all iambic pentameter lines. For Faraz Ajmal's "An Incomplete Love Story" Poetry Contest

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Date: 7/28/2018 8:14:00 AM
Andrea, perhaps it is for the good that the memories are sweet. Perhaps the reality would have been far different. A rather heart breaking store.
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Date: 7/27/2018 8:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this well written poem. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/27/2018 4:27:00 PM
Oh Andrea! Congratulations on your #1 win. A heartbreaking story of incomplete love. Well written. We all want there to be a happiness ever after. There is no way of knowing though. Sometimes our choices keep us from a path too painful to comprehend. It's admirable the mother-to-be told the truth of her status. Well done! :)
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Date: 7/24/2018 10:59:00 PM
I know who Andrea. Your world might be so different had the circumstances been different. An aching love story. Congratulations on getting first place!
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Date: 7/24/2018 8:55:00 PM
So sad, but so beautifully expressed, Andrea. Being in love, separation and unanswered questions and not knowing what happened...yes, that would be very haunting for sure. Congrats on your win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 7/24/2018 3:47:00 PM
I have never had tears in my eyes before after reading a poem before. I did yours which often endures as in my mind I take tours.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/24/2018 5:06:00 PM
how nice of you to say, James. This is actually my story. I just took poetic license to guess why he did not call me for two years and putting it in his voice!! Always wish I knew what happened to him since that last phone call he made to me. I like to imagine he wonders about me too.
Date: 7/24/2018 12:57:00 PM
I wonder that if at that time they would have social media sites like facebook and other apps for chating, this one story could have been completed, it was a really sad and beautiful poem, full of emotions. Many congratulations on your 1st win in the contest, it sure was a masterpiece and a joy to read, good luck and have a really nice day
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/24/2018 5:07:00 PM
YOu made my day!
Date: 7/24/2018 12:13:00 PM
Too frequently repeated. Well done Andrea, best wishes...
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Date: 7/23/2018 9:26:00 PM
An all too common tale. Very poignant and well written - good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 7/23/2018 8:49:00 PM
You always rise to the occasion and surpass what is expected, Andrea.
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Date: 7/23/2018 7:14:00 PM
If only he had written, a sad verse of lost love, Good luck Andrea Tom
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Date: 7/23/2018 7:12:00 PM
sadness comes in many shapes and forms in a person's life and making the wrong decision is one of them...good luck
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Date: 7/23/2018 6:41:00 PM
Sad story but, well portrayed.
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Date: 7/23/2018 5:38:00 PM
so poignant, andrea! this made my heart ache! beautifully written - best of luck in the contest...
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Date: 7/23/2018 4:58:00 PM
I know many stories like this...it's real...thank God for poetry...Nice write Andrea
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Date: 7/23/2018 4:22:00 PM
You wrote a very long story Andrea! Their love remained incomplete for sure..I suppose many go through life living with a heartbreak. You put in quite an effort in this contest..hope you win BIG.
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