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An Eternity I

Stood upright, between two roads, On a thin metal rail, A solitary, brown coloured bottle Of beer, Sporting a red and whitle label, Emptied and callously abandoned... Just like the tin can of cider Plonked down beside you on your Little polished mahogony table. An unremarkable glass bottle, As if a piece of submitted Street avant-garde left on display, Purposely discarded by some Unknown person or persons here; Whilst, with the whole passing World Seated in driving ignorance before It, All existence dashing endlessly Away When frantically tumbling and Twirling Inside the madly spinning, Half-rounded Hemisphere. Somewhere, after enduring a short Commercial break... Every advert dryly commented upon - Each being accorded an equally Dismissive and condescending stare, One in particular informing it's Disinterested audience Of the frightful perils On developing pancreatic cancer, A warm couch, motionless, Suddenly stirs and starts upwards Like a cornered panther Snarling before the hunters gun! Your sullen visage momentarily Betrayed When briefly enraptured by dazzling Images Of the shimmering Aegean:- And you, swimming alone, in your Perfectly constructed little rocky Idyll Where brightly coloured shoals of Exotic fishes teem; Then that reinstated glare, Fiercely conveyed with all the ferocity Of a blazing Grecian sun, That perpetually resides In all its burning arrogance there! For I envision a single angry tear, Pertaining to a faint hint of dark Mascara, Hesitating against a brushed Indentation As if a last remaining, Desperately-clinging, raindrop Being pushed acrosss the oily Curvature Of my panoramic windscreen... A tear that contains, perhaps, The whole of the worlds filtered Oceans; The pitiless look in those wild, Turbulent eyes Awash with the currents surging ebb; Low utterances of broken trusts, Unrequited love and misplaced Devotions... All precursors to oft repeated vocal Denunciations Spawned from some unjustified, Obscure, nagging doubt; Recalling my own dismal resignation's When knowing better Than to try and hopelessly intervene! Same old recriminations and wearisome Accusations Now being muttered, I should'nt wonder, Barely audibly throughout... Will herald the onset of newly Assembled confusion... As you struggle wretchedly In preparation for another troubling Dream! Overhead, lunar dignitaries, arisen From behind confinement of their cells Celestial bars... But irrevocably anchored to the Impossible deeps; Here, patiently awaiting, in all their Accursed immortality, The defeated Titans and great usurped Cronus soundly sleep; And a gathering together when offering Obedient prayers:- Cloistered abominations of awakened Stars - Whose exultation's shine brightly in Dutiful obeyance - In worshipful praise of his most Hallowed regime! They whomst unashamedly dare to Brazenly gaze Upon portrayal of flushed irreverence; Now attempting, albeit she greivously Offended Like a cast-out Angel, To stagger up the step's defiant Incline; Which, in supportive awkwardness, Stoically resists the steadying Advantages Proffered from thickly carpeted Stairs. But I have long since fled. For soon I will join the thining lines Of departing cars That invade upon the unearthly realm Of flittering Bat and barred Nightjars. Please read part two.

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Date: 11/5/2017 9:22:00 AM
Hello John, Now this one is one that rates in my highest poetic category of "True Magnificence!! (This is more like the traditional poetry that I'm used to and certainly more home at in the world of the Poetic Arts.) A definite joy to read and imbibe John!! A FAVE!! (And I'm going to Part Two now . . . . Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 11/9/2017 7:29:00 AM
Hello, Gary. It is always my great pleasure to know you have returned once more to my little corner of the "Soup" -- hope you are healthy and happy! I really do enjoy receiving and reading your comments, Gary...they really do encourage and motivate me -- thank you so very much! Your friend. :) john
Date: 11/4/2017 10:04:00 AM
A stunning poem effusing symbiotic needs not dispensed, John. I agree w/the other talented poetesses/poet ... you are a master storyteller. Absolutely brilliant prose poetry, my friend. Such a joy to read. Supernova bright write. Love and more love to you and yours always.
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Date: 11/4/2017 11:03:00 PM
Hello, Freddie. Nice to become acquainted! Thank you so very much for your encouraging and kindly remarks...it is extremely decent of you. I will call in on your little corner of the "Soup" very soon and repay your visit...till then - cheers! My very best regards. :) john
Date: 10/2/2017 2:29:00 PM
This is amazing John! I am always impressed by your vocabulary and attention to detail...on to read the next. : )
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Date: 10/3/2017 8:21:00 AM
Thank you, Connie -- I really do appreciate your kind and generous comments! So very pleasing for me when I find you have made a visit...you will always be most welcome here! :) john
Date: 9/24/2017 9:21:00 PM
After your email I kind of agree with the assessment, after thinking and rereading it does kind of seem like 4 separate poems, so cohesion may be relevant, but you know what...it's still brilliant!
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Date: 9/25/2017 1:01:00 AM
Many thanks, John. I truly do appreciate your honest feedback. My kindest regards! :) john
Date: 9/22/2017 9:13:00 PM
I agree with Maurice, John, this is what all poets strive to be like, your imagery is incomparable, your storytelling and vocabulary is stellar, there's nothing better than to read poetry as it should be done, and you are the master class instructor!!!
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Date: 9/24/2017 3:46:00 AM
Thank you, John -- I am truly humbled by your high praise! And thank you for your kind email...I have now sent you a reply. Please feel free to visit and comment at anytime...you will always receive a warm welcome here. My very best regards, John. :) john
Date: 9/22/2017 1:26:00 PM
The imagery in this write is exactly what the best of poetry strives to achieve. They say a picture is worth a thousand words. You paint those pictures here. I could quote so many lines from your poem that are besides definitive are also absolutely original and unique. Your write sings with every word. Let me fav this section and move on to the rest of the poem.
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Date: 9/24/2017 3:40:00 AM
Thank you, Armand, for your high praise...I am, indeed, very much indebted to you! As is usually the case, for me anyway, the poem has been written from a personal experience; I need two prerequisites to write -- an emotive stirring prompted by personal interaction on some level or other...I suppose we cannot, as poets, always choose what we write about - ah well! My very warmest regards, Armand. :) john
Date: 9/19/2017 8:30:00 AM
Good heavens, this is enrapturing, on to part two!
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Date: 9/20/2017 8:44:00 AM
Hi, Thvia. Thanks for taking the time to read through the poem...most people do not have your obvious patience. There is a definite rhyming pattern within the poem (again most people do not take enough time, when reading through, to notice it) : A, B, B, C, A, C, A. Many thanks, Thvia - much obliged! :) john
Date: 9/18/2017 4:03:00 PM
You know I can not help but read part two but give me a chance to digest this piece first. Tomorrow, a hot cup of tea beside me I will curl up in my flying chair and ease my way into another enjoyable read. It has been raining out all of the day so I have a flowered quilt to keep me warm.
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Date: 9/20/2017 8:18:00 AM
We too have been getting a lot of rain of late...it is helping to keep the leaves from falling; even though it is still warm in the day...in the morning and evening there is that Autumnal feel to it all. I am not very keen on this time of the year -- far too melancholy and fading. I much prefer the newness and vibrance of spring...sigh! Ah well -- every season has its benefits -- soon the blaze of the magnificent fall!! Thanks, Patricia! Keep snug and warm. :) john
Date: 9/17/2017 10:03:00 AM
Hi John , I have to admit I tried to fast read but you have so much going on in this wonderful write , I will come back to this one and your second part soon ::)))
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Date: 9/20/2017 7:53:00 AM
Thanks, Niall. I can just imagine anyone trying to fast read it...not an easy thing to do I would think. :) Catch up with you soon - Cheers! :) john