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An Eagle For Last Time

My heart sailed so high in the sky And under me my soul passed by It was small like a single splinter Into heaven again it would enter. While on earth much sadness I had Even tough I never did anything bad What was it I might have done wrong Based on this I started writing this song. An eagle for last time he had screeched When heaven again finally would reach Wings spread outward into the spirited air Flapping sounds with us He now did share. Felt breeze gently blowing against my face Every feather was found in perfect place God said my soul had been set free And the eagle had actually been me. My sadness turned to happiness instead And after I finally found myself dead Even though for years I had grieved I was in heaven and now felt relieved. Comments would be appreciated.

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Date: 1/9/2014 7:08:00 PM
Hey Jim, I enjoyed this poem and loved the imagery of the feathers...I felt them on my skin. I especially was i nterested in the idea of our soul splintering. I wish you didn't have a typo of the word though in the 6th line as it took away the sincerity I was feeling.I am truly sorry for your grief and believe that the next chapter is truly where we live our best life
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Date: 1/4/2014 9:45:00 AM
James you asked for comments well here goes, It is a sentimental piece with too many clichés the 3rd and 4th lines in the first and second stanza are too short and visually looks wrong, but it is a heartfelt poem full of your emotion. None of what I said is a criticism it is just my opinion and a comment, keep writing….David
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Date: 1/4/2014 1:23:00 AM
James, I will comment your poem, I like how you allowed your wings to soar towards his light in this pretty poem. It was deep, and uplifting... LINDA
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Date: 1/4/2014 12:35:00 AM
Sure would like to receive some comments.
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