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An Awful Taste

Earlier this week I went to the beach at night, the stars
were bright, the moon was light, and so was my mood.
I folded my clothes next to my shoes and stepped slow
and tentatively into the water. Immediately a huge wave
appeared out of nowhere, swallowed me and spit me out,
me snorting sea water from every hole in my head, rolling
over the flood line like a cucumber. I was determined
to try again... this time a vortex opened a black hole right
in front of my feet, and sucked me in without any mercy.
I was swirled round and round, together with a dozen
bewildered little fish and a crab that held on to my left
foot for dear life. After a journey that lasted a few minutes
and left me dizzy and nauseous, the vortex spit me out
and again l landed on the floodline. I yelled at the sea:
"Why are you doing this to me?" To which the sea replied:
"I'm hungry, but you taste really awful".  Offended I turned
around, dressed myself and left. I couldn't help but
wondering if the fact that I didn't have a girlfriend, had
anything to do with how I tasted?

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February 5, 2017

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Space Cadet February 8, 2017 at 12:55 PM Some shades of James Tate coming out here. That little crab...I wonder if she has a boyfriend? I enjoyed this. --Wesley C. Darren White February 10, 2017 at 1:07 AM I hoped you would comment to this one and mention James Tate, and you did, thank you :)

John Herlihy February 6, 2017 at 5:36 AM The sea can be a treacherous place. I know; I once almost drowned in Acapulco. JH Darren White February 6, 2017 at 6:23 AM That is scary! The beach, the sea, my favourite place to be, even though I don't swim. But yes, I know...

Anne-Lise Andresen February 5, 2017 at 6:51 PM - Almost an insult :))) Darren White February 5, 2017 at 11:02 PM Adding insult to injury ;)

Phillip Garcia February 5, 2017 at 4:00 PM Did the crab get spit back to or was he a keeper? I worry about the fate of all due to my gigantic heart and what not :) - a great write. Well worth multiple reads Darren White February 5, 2017 at 10:57 PM I will write a new episode about the little fish, the crab and the foot ;)

Tim Smith February 5, 2017 at 12:00 PM Oh no....lol Darren White February 5, 2017 at 12:48 PM Hahaha, I just felt like writing silly stories today :)

Jan Allison February 5, 2017 at 10:56 AM ha ha ha almost a bad taste poem there lol:-) hugs jan xx Darren White February 5, 2017 at 11:01 AM very, very bad taste :)

Paulette Calasibetta February 5, 2017 at 9:55 AM Hi Darren, LOL....very amusing, lots of fun....great imagery. Darren White February 5, 2017 at 9:57 AM Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)