AN AWFUL TASTE

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Earlier this week I went to the beach at night, the stars
were bright, the moon was light, and so was my mood.
I folded my clothes next to my shoes and stepped slow
and tentatively into the water. Immediately a huge wave
appeared out of nowhere, swallowed me and spit me out,
me snorting sea water from every hole in my head, rolling
over the flood line like a cucumber. I was determined
to try again... this time a vortex opened a black hole right
in front of my feet, and sucked me in without any mercy.
I was swirled round and round, together with a dozen
bewildered little fish and a crab that held on to my left
foot for dear life. After a journey that lasted a few minutes
and left me dizzy and nauseous, the vortex spit me out
and again l landed on the floodline. I yelled at the sea:
"Why are you doing this to me?" To which the sea replied:
"I'm hungry, but you taste really awful".  Offended I turned
around, dressed myself and left. I couldn't help but
wondering if the fact that I didn't have a girlfriend, had
anything to do with how I tasted?

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February 5, 2017

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Date: 2/8/2017 12:55:00 PM
Some shades of James Tate coming out here. That little crab...I wonder if she has a boyfriend? I enjoyed this. --Wesley C.
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Darren White
Date: 2/10/2017 1:07:00 AM
I hoped you would comment to this one and mention James Tate, and you did, thank you :)
Date: 2/6/2017 5:36:00 AM
The sea can be a treacherous place. I know; I once almost drowned in Acapulco. JH
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Darren White
Date: 2/6/2017 6:23:00 AM
That is scary! The beach, the sea, my favourite place to be, even though I don't swim. But yes, I know...
Date: 2/5/2017 6:51:00 PM
- Almost an insult :)))
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Darren White
Date: 2/5/2017 11:02:00 PM
Adding insult to injury ;)
Date: 2/5/2017 4:00:00 PM
Did the crab get spit back to or was he a keeper? I worry about the fate of all due to my gigantic heart and what not :) - a great write. Well worth multiple reads
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Darren White
Date: 2/5/2017 10:57:00 PM
I will write a new episode about the little fish, the crab and the foot ;)
Date: 2/5/2017 12:00:00 PM
Oh no....lol
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Darren White
Date: 2/5/2017 12:48:00 PM
Hahaha, I just felt like writing silly stories today :)
Date: 2/5/2017 10:56:00 AM
ha ha ha almost a bad taste poem there lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Darren White
Date: 2/5/2017 11:01:00 AM
very, very bad taste :)
Date: 2/5/2017 9:55:00 AM
Hi Darren, LOL....very amusing, lots of fun....great imagery.
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Darren White
Date: 2/5/2017 9:57:00 AM
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)