An Autumn Aloha

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Poetic Form: Quatern

Inspired: 2023 October 13

*Googled: Hawaiian Autumn, though it looks like Summer, or the other two ...?
Image: Kauai's West End by onlyinyourstate.com via Getty Images

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Ever-changing Autumn, its shapes and shades. Fanning breath stirs the heavily laden; transforms and redraws like playful charades, prepping, and grooming, all the misshapen. A pastor's mural paints pure from trespass, ever-changing Autumn, its shapes and shades. Prismatic design grounds tell-tale stained glass and forest steeples are Redwood's crusades. Kids taking the plunge, multihued cascades, succumb to trampling and crushing horseplay. Ever-changing Autumn, its shapes and shades, the bejeweled waits: Sunday's white bouquet. Awe striking vista blessing amble eyes, bounteous nostalgia praising persuades. Peace thine harmonious artwork baptize, ever-changing Autumn, its shapes and shades.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2023 12:42:00 PM

so cool that you did this one as a quatern. You are in top form here.

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/19/2023 8:47:00 PM

A task to challenge poetic forms, once again--for that alone, I'm thankful, my friend. Aloha, William

Christina Bowring

Date: 10/16/2023 9:29:00 AM

What a gorgeous autumn poem that is so descriptive. I love the refrain line that flows so well within the stanza’s. Great imagery as well. ‘ the bejeweled waits:Sunday’s white bouquet’ ‘ awe striking vista blessing amble eyes’. Lovely! Really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/17/2023 6:07:00 AM

Aloha, Christina! Righteous line choices you've highlighted. The heartwarming considerations that you've shared and for your visit, my friend--Cheers! Aloha, William

Karen Jones

Date: 10/13/2023 8:42:00 PM

Lovely twist on Autumn. Beautiful picture and poem!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/13/2023 10:05:00 PM

Aloha, Karen! Aloha is an equivocal word with two different meanings, so Hi to you, and soon, Bye to our Autumn. Appreciate your visit, my friend. Mahalo, William

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/13/2023 7:40:00 PM

An unmistakable Autumn Day described by your perception, and in such a time in need, and much deserving to those who recently have suffered. Your poetry is inspirational. Wishing only good luck today, Hilo Poet! xo

I Am Anaya
Date: 10/14/2023 6:55:00 PM

Surfs Up! All is well here. Mahalo!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/13/2023 9:46:00 PM

Aloha, Anaya! Honolulu and many smaller towns, like Lahaina, dot the leeward (warmer) side of our island chain. Hilo town sits on the windward (wetter) side. My notation above the image epitomizes our seasons as being inconsequentially noticeable. The phrase, "Surfs Up!" seems to be the norm, my friend. Mahalo, William