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My baby turned twenty one today...

In the morning, as I was going to drive her to work.. I reminded her,

'its going to rain, you need a jacket'

I asked why are you going to work, and do your colleagues know it is your birthday?

nonchantly, she replied, she was not really bothered, but then tears rolled down her cheek...

I asked, 'whats wrong, you are an adult today, why the tears?'

as always, not wanting her dad to worry.. she said 'nothing, just a bit sensitive'

I tried to make her laugh and managed a smile from her..

But, remained sad, that my baby cried on her special day..


   A gardener was gifted a seedling. 
Before planting its teeny weeny stem, 
he gently prepared the earth, 
carefully, vigilantly,   so it was soft, 
  but tough enough to hold its roots.

Everyday, affectionately 
  he would provide it with water,
especially when the sunlight was too strong.
        At times he would place an umbrella
over the top,    so the stalk would not become dry.

When the winds would blow with force  and 
            the sapling would shiver and shake,
the gardener would place a solid support against 
its trunk,  so it could lean on it   during the storms 
    and when the puddles were too deep, 
the gardener would wipe them away 
    and make sure it wasn't affected   by the moisture.

Slowly, as the gardener nourished
the young tree,      its roots spread
deeper into the ground       and gradually
   it began to reach out  its elegant branches.
Before long,    verdant leaves spread,   all glossy 
          with their satin sheen sparkling in the sun.

When callous,    colder days arrived 
   and leaves began to wither,  like sorrows 
the gardener would treat the bark and
   cleanse away the moss,
so no beetles would ruin its skin.
When snow angels fell from the sky,
    he would remove all the snow
and build snowmen around its base,
   so the tree would be jolly on bitter nights.

As it grew all high and mighty,
    its curly brown branches     became home 
to baby birds  and hibernating squirrels  hiding their nuts.  
    With sincere vigour the tree would protect them
from predators...           Now the tree was big and strong,
so the gardener would sit underneath   resting
from tiring days    sheltering from the rain.

After a while the gardener never returned,
     but the tree kept flourishing,
because       it had unyielding foundations
                             to battle the elements.

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Bill Baker

Date: 10/4/2024 8:56:00 PM

Lovely tribute poem to your daughter Sara, Silent One ... It's always hard to see our child crying, even when it's happy tears. The metaphor of a tree was well chosen. We can only do our best to prepare them for their life and purpose. I just returned today when Poetry Soup unlocked my account. Hope to post, read and comment in the coming weeks. Congratulations on your POTD, my friend. Have a great day! (a month late, but the first chance I've had to comment on it) A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 9/16/2024 4:03:00 PM

Very nice dear lovely friend!!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/15/2024 2:56:00 AM

What a beautiful poem you wrote to and for your daughter Silent One - i so enjoyed it ! I hope you are doing well and I did promise to read your poems a couple of days ago but our son is here from Australia. They immigrated there two years ago and don't like it at all and are now immigrating to Ireland, so stopped by South Africa To visit us. Ireland is so much nearer for us to visit one day also I am going to try to definitely be more communicative on soup. Blessings Jennifer.

Jay Narain

Date: 9/9/2024 10:54:00 AM

A nice tribute to your daughter.

Mike Gentile

Date: 9/9/2024 4:22:00 AM

Silent One, you have created such special thoughts on the cycle of life, its beauty and sometimes melancholy stages. It was such a pleasure to read and contemplate and I see why it's a POTD! Belated congratulations! I hope you've been well!

Alesia Leach

Date: 9/7/2024 2:53:00 PM

A beautiful tribute to your daughter. I hope her birthday improved.

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:59:00 PM

Thank you

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 9/7/2024 2:18:00 PM

Dear Silent One, Wow, such a touching birthday tribute to your little girl. Belated congratulations on this POTD and a Happy Birthday to your sweet Sara. I have a Sarah 2 and mine is shy and sensitive. Blessings to you both. I'm sorry I wasn't on the computer yesterday at all and missed this one.

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:59:00 PM

That is a very sweet to say.. Thank you Nancy

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/7/2024 3:31:00 AM

A wonderful analogy for your daughter So, an enjoyable read. Congratulations on your POTD. Tom

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:58:00 PM

Thank you

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/6/2024 11:24:00 PM

Lovely write. Enjoyed reading it, Congrats on POTD and God bless you Love, Gina

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:58:00 PM

Thank you

Constance La France

Date: 9/6/2024 6:33:00 PM

Silent, so beautifully penned, l love it and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, Constance

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:58:00 PM

Thank you

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/6/2024 6:30:00 PM

Dear Silent One, you are such a wonderful father. This is beautiful, tender and inspiring, all at the same time. On 9/5 you posted this saying happy birthday to your daughter. My daughter's birthday is today. 9/6. Her name is Destiny and she is 21 yrs old as well. I feel so blessed, indeed. Your thoughts caress gently around me and my heart. Congratulations my dear friend, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

Brandy Nicole
Date: 9/8/2024 6:21:00 PM

You're very welcome. I think it's kinda neat. Thank you, Silent One. She had the best day ever. :) My heart is smiling.

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:57:00 PM

Thank you for your sweet words and what a coincidence we have a daughter only a day apart... I hope Destiny had a lovely birthday..

Juliet Ligon

Date: 9/6/2024 5:57:00 PM

Being a sensitive soul can be difficult, but it sounds like you raised her well with a strong foundation. Nice analogy. Thanks for your visit to my page. (I've been in survival mode lately.)

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:56:00 PM

Thank you

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/6/2024 5:34:00 PM

Love the conclusion! Yes, if we give our children the guidance and protection they need, even the humor and entertainment to get through bitter days, they will be strong as their support disappears!

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:56:00 PM

I agree.. thank you for your lovely comment

Regina Elliott

Date: 9/6/2024 4:50:00 PM

Congratulations on a most beauteous POTD, Silent One. Bravissimo!

Silent One
Date: 9/8/2024 12:56:00 PM

Thank you

Paige Hind

Date: 9/6/2024 12:21:00 PM

Aw, this is a kind poem- I loved the metaphor of the gardener tending to his tree...

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 1:36:00 PM

Thank you

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 9/6/2024 11:52:00 AM

I am back with congratulations on your POTD, Silent One. Enjoy your special day. :)

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 1:36:00 PM

Thank yoi

Arlo Parker

Date: 9/6/2024 9:45:00 AM

Creation of the Tree of Life. Well crafted POTD, S1 (as always). :o))

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:27:00 AM

Thank you

Tania Kitchin

Date: 9/6/2024 8:00:00 AM

SO, wonderfully penned, a great ending. Congratulations on POTD.

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:27:00 AM

Thanks

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/6/2024 7:38:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/story again. Have a wonderful/blessed day with your win as you go writing away................

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:33:00 AM

Thank you

Maria Williams

Date: 9/6/2024 6:58:00 AM

Back with a huge congratulations on your POTD S1...Hugs and a big hug for Sara .

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:33:00 AM

Thank you

Tom Woody

Date: 9/6/2024 6:31:00 AM

Tender and touching. Enjoy your special day

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:49:00 AM

Thanx

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/6/2024 4:27:00 AM

Dear Silent One, First, a huge congratulations on your POTD, which is so well deserved. I loved how your poem illustrates how consistent love, care, and support during formative years enable a child to develop. Parenting is so important in order to become resilient, self-sufficient individual capable of withstanding life's challenges. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:49:00 AM

Thank you.. I believe it is an analogy used before, but was a quick scribble for me..

Karen Jones

Date: 9/6/2024 4:19:00 AM

Congratulations on your potd honor! You always think outside of the box!

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:54:00 AM

I'm not sure if it is that out of the box, but thank you..

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/6/2024 3:43:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD. This is truly a unique poem.

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 12:22:00 PM

I agree with your sentiments... Thank you

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 11:54:00 AM

Thank you.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 9/6/2024 1:05:00 AM

parent’s unflinching courage and steadfast resolve, propelled on wings of unconditional love, nurture infants to be as they one day. a deep, sensitive and soulful write, Silent One, so artistically crafted from your eloquent pen. warmest congratulations on POTD.

Silent One
Date: 9/6/2024 12:23:00 PM

I agree with your sentiments.. Thank you

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