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Among Butterflies Sought


Is This Nature's Glory As a quarry? Alone and at peace A life, a new lease I pull up a piece of land Take a little time to mend This rainforest trembles An open window in shambles Sitting on my own made porch I fire up a configured torch  Then Lay under, should I say What is like a porch light ray And I wait for that one moth Amongst butterflies sought An unwanted reject Like me ready to eject Take me now in this lush With the roar of death; a hush And I will go, amongst this gift Gods Eden unquestioned; my lift My life to stop the bleeding of the land So I protect this marvel, hold her hand Never can't So I chant Let me meld Forest held Me alone a window into the future slightly opened We are all just a moth drawn to a porch light penned  13~11~2014 Sponsor : craig cornish Contest Name : Chopped II ********************************************************* I believe this falls within the 10 to 20 line loose suggestion. This is usually done by the sponsor because it would be difficult to read 35 epic poems and rate them. Because I wanted to create a shape if you count lines as they line up I have more then 20. If I realigned them I would have much less than 20. I believe I stayed within the spirit of the rules. However that is and should be in the hands of the sponsor. I worked very hard towrite this piece for this contest. I loved the process. I have already accomplished everything I wanted to do with this write. I watch the show Chopped all the time.The idea is to be creative with the ingredients. If there is a steak in the basket you better not just cook a steak. The point of the show is using the ingredients creatively never do the obvious. I am happy to have written this piece inspired by the contest. So thank you Craig because I am proud of this write. However below is the ten to twenty line alternative in case you would rather judge it. ********************************************************** Chopped Too - A Rainforest This rainforest trembles An open window in shambles Sitting on my own made porch I fire up a configured torch  Then Lay under, should I say What is like a porch light ray And I wait for that one moth Amongst butterflies sought An unwanted reject Like me ready to eject Take me now in this lush With the roar of death; a hush And I will go, amongst this gift Gods Eden unquestioned; my lift My life to stop the bleeding of the land So I protect this marvel, hold her hand Me alone a window into the future slightly opened We are all just a moth drawn to a porch light penned  13~11~2014 Sponsor : craig cornish Contest Name : Chopped II

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Date: 11/18/2014 9:12:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Maurice, with this most creative, inspiring piece! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 11/18/2014 12:13:00 PM
simply stunning Maurice - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 11/18/2014 11:07:00 AM
Well, you left all the options open Maurice. I loved the shape, a lamp I thought, rather than a tree, but let the reader interpret.. Great combination of words and shape. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/18/2014 9:03:00 AM
Congrats on the merited win Maurice...huggs
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Date: 11/17/2014 10:52:00 PM
This poem is wonderfully creative both in content and in shape. Excellent, and I am so happy to see it on the winner's list Maurice. Big Congrats!
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Date: 11/17/2014 8:07:00 PM
interesting take with a shape poem. Very well crafted Maurice, congrats.
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Date: 11/15/2014 6:28:00 AM
Maurice,That I hope won't be chopped. We have no right to make this world unseemly with corpses of trees. The poem is visually attractive...seems well-guarded and confident. Love XXXXX rajat
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Date: 11/15/2014 4:21:00 AM
glorious Maurice gl in contest soup mail hugs
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Date: 11/14/2014 11:58:00 PM
I am speechless, wonderful, words, meanings, shape, the whole works...this has to be a first.....Seren
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Date: 11/14/2014 12:28:00 PM
A triple 7 for you Maurice....one for the topic, another for this winning poem and a third for the shape! A while ago I read: "We ruin man's work and we call it vandalism; we ruin nature and call it progress!" Like Demi...I too applaud you! // paul
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Date: 11/14/2014 7:01:00 AM
Each time someone stands up and talks about nature and its protection, I applaud because many poems have I written on the subject and people play deaf and blind! Congratulations dear , Maurice, for writing so beautifully about a subject we have turn it to be ugly!
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Date: 11/13/2014 9:29:00 PM
Wow! Not only a fantastic poem, I love the shape, too. I tried a shape poem once (only once). It didn't turn out so well. You've got a sure winner here! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 11/13/2014 8:43:00 PM
Maurice, what I like best here is how you shaped it. I am so bad at this kind of poetry. How do you do it? To make that wonderful image of the tree with your sweet words? those last two lines were simply outstanding, btw. a 7!
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Date: 11/13/2014 6:20:00 PM
I love this original beauty Maurice...nicely written...best of luck in the contest
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Date: 11/13/2014 4:38:00 PM
Superb my friend... Cheers
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Date: 11/13/2014 10:09:00 AM
You just keep achieving new heights in this land of poetry Maurice. Excellent job on this one. 7+Fav.
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Date: 11/13/2014 9:23:00 AM
Wow, sweetie that is awesome :) Great job with this contest prompt, you've created an artwork ;)
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Date: 11/13/2014 9:23:00 AM
Classic my friend -- I am a very visual person so when you can craft an image through words and with words . . . it is elegant. Your creativity is brilliant.
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Date: 11/13/2014 8:44:00 AM
Maurice what an amazing poem and the picture of the tree. how did you do that? wow I give you 7 for a great poem and another 7 if I could for the tree. simply amazing
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Date: 11/13/2014 7:37:00 AM
OH MY WORD Maurice - simply outstanding!!!! I better say congrats on your win - its a 7 - its a fave - its incredible! Hugs Jan x
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Date: 11/13/2014 7:36:00 AM
I love the shape that you created.A spectacular poem Maurice!Charma
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Date: 11/13/2014 7:31:00 AM
Good luck with the contest Maurice. I love what you've done with this piece. A job well done. Enjoyed this a lot. Regards "B"
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Date: 11/13/2014 7:12:00 AM
beautiful Maurice.. :)! simply beautiful..:)
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