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for Edward ibeh's  'This or That, Vol 33' Poetry Contest/ May 24, 2025

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Along with the Thunder

He brings awful thunder.
With all his disdain,
he booms and he blusters
with words most profane.

Along with the thunder -
like sparks on a plain -
comes lightning that he
simply cannot contain.

Those blazes of hatred
that she can’t constrain
come suddenly! What
made him so inhumane?

Like crops set on fire -
her heart is the grain
reducing to ashes.
His rage is her bane.

A love once held dear
she no more can feign.
He feels this, and strikes her
again and again.

Along with the thunder
come torrents of rain.
She drowns in the hurt
from which he won’t refrain.

He’s vowed she will die
if she severs the chain
that binds her to him
in unholy pain!

She tried once to flee,
but it was in vain.
Control that is thunder’s
he’ll always maintain.

So pray for all women
within thunder’s reign -
that freedom from it
once more they’ll regain.
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Woods Avatar
June 6, 2025 at 5:46 AM
I think you are brave and full of love for your sisters to write a poem like this. I pray it's not first hand knowledge. So the empathetic message is heart felt... the poetry and form are striking...um no pun intended. Congratulations on placing in the top! Xo
Dietrich Avatar
June 6, 2025 at 7:41 AM
No, I get this stuff mostly from true crime on tv. I watch quite a bit of that!
Guptar Avatar
June 4, 2025 at 8:29 AM
Heartiest congratulations dear poetess on your win in Ibey`s contest with a pleasant poem equating domestic violence to thunder. Quite often a sad reality in our so-called advanced and civilised world. Appropriate to be show-cased on Woman`s day. Wish you a pleasant and peaceful day, away from thunderous blasts.
Dietrich Avatar
June 6, 2025 at 7:42 AM
Thanks, it's a very sad world where women's protectors end up being their killers. Happens way too often in this world.
Peck Avatar
June 2, 2025 at 6:28 PM
Your powerful poem is a synopsis of the Diddy(sp) trial, but there are those who, to feel strong and brave (I guess) find a submissive person to abuse. It's a sad world that this kind of need for power exists. Congratulations on your win!
Ibeh Avatar
June 2, 2025 at 8:15 AM
Andrea, heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing poem. I love the seamless flow and rhyming. Well-done!
Dietrich Avatar
June 6, 2025 at 7:42 AM
Thanks, Edward
Hind Avatar
May 27, 2025 at 2:39 PM
It's a sad story. Very kind of you to write about this.
George Avatar
May 26, 2025 at 6:23 AM
Some are so inhuman. They behave wildly and words come from them like thunder. They hit hard. to endure such people, one needs extra patience. Very powerfully presented.
Anaya Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 8:58 AM
You captured clearly the distrust and disrespect of a violent relationship, thunder metaphors for abuser and hate for the enabler. What should be of love. Pray we shall in poetic rhyme :)
Empress Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 8:02 AM
Dear sweet andrea what a thoughtful and profound poem this is, i absolutely love the cadence of your word weaving and lyrical touch of your lines and the ending! Hits hard! Youv described a situation that is so toxic ina. Metaphorical and such a descriptive way to the readers! I love and felt what youv conveyed here and so this is a fave for me! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always
Buhagiar Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 7:12 AM
Hate makes people inhumane. We have plenty around.
Mckeithan Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 5:53 AM
Powerful and sad poem Andrea. Too much abuse happens. Best in the contest
Godwin Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 4:29 AM
Very powerful, got that bam, bam feel and rhyme that I love so much. Feel of passion for the plight was distinct and emotive. This poem delivers. (been up all night, hopefully you're asleep right now. but in mere hrs we'll probably change places) Love ... CayCay
Goldsmith Avatar
May 24, 2025 at 10:25 PM
What a powerful write you have here. "Good Luck" Have A Blessed Day Writing Away...........
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