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for Edward ibeh's  'This or That, Vol 33' Poetry Contest/ May 24, 2025

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He brings awful thunder. With all his disdain, he booms and he blusters with words most profane. Along with the thunder - like sparks on a plain - comes lightning that he simply cannot contain. Those blazes of hatred that she can’t constrain come suddenly! What made him so inhumane? Like crops set on fire - her heart is the grain reducing to ashes. His rage is her bane. A love once held dear she no more can feign. He feels this, and strikes her again and again. Along with the thunder come torrents of rain. She drowns in the hurt from which he won’t refrain. He’s vowed she will die if she severs the chain that binds her to him in unholy pain! She tried once to flee, but it was in vain. Control that is thunder’s he’ll always maintain. So pray for all women within thunder’s reign - that freedom from it once more they’ll regain.

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Date: 5/25/2025 8:58:00 AM
You captured clearly the distrust and disrespect of a violent relationship, thunder metaphors for abuser and hate for the enabler. What should be of love. Pray we shall in poetic rhyme :)
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Date: 5/25/2025 8:02:00 AM
Dear sweet andrea what a thoughtful and profound poem this is, i absolutely love the cadence of your word weaving and lyrical touch of your lines and the ending! Hits hard! Youv described a situation that is so toxic ina. Metaphorical and such a descriptive way to the readers! I love and felt what youv conveyed here and so this is a fave for me! Best wishes for the contest! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/25/2025 7:12:00 AM
Hate makes people inhumane. We have plenty around.
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Date: 5/25/2025 5:53:00 AM
Powerful and sad poem Andrea. Too much abuse happens. Best in the contest
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Date: 5/25/2025 4:29:00 AM
Very powerful, got that bam, bam feel and rhyme that I love so much. Feel of passion for the plight was distinct and emotive. This poem delivers. (been up all night, hopefully you're asleep right now. but in mere hrs we'll probably change places) Love ... CayCay
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Date: 5/24/2025 10:25:00 PM
What a powerful write you have here. "Good Luck" Have A Blessed Day Writing Away...........
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