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Inspired by the painting “Midnight”

by Marko Mavrovich

lift moon high, swaddled in clouds between two slender limbs — soothing wailele.* pontoon boat far low, quietly nesting. Hawaiian aloha breaching the tall mast. mahina orchestrates the cool sapphire cascade. 9/4/2019 Emile Pinet’s Yalto poems only Poetry Contest Yalto listed as verse. Invented by Edward Ibeh: line 1 to 15: 3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,6,1,5 syllables *howmanysyllables.com correct except for the Hawaiian word wailele. Can verify on https://www.to-hawaii.com/hawaiian-dictionary.php wailele - waterfall (pronounced why-leh-leh) aloha - hello (pronounced ah-loh-hah) mahina - moon (pronounced mah-hee-nah)

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 9/10/2019 10:58:00 PM

Excellent Yalto, Kim:-) You knocked it out of the park! Good luck in the contest!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/11/2019 5:55:00 AM

Thank you, Edward! I enjoy using this form! :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/5/2019 10:54:00 PM

Good luck in the contest, Kim. This is not an easy form. It is HARD to DO! I did not do mine right, and had to re-do about six times. Great job my friend! Wonderful imagery also.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/6/2019 6:29:00 AM

Thank you, Caren!

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 9/5/2019 3:38:00 AM

Very impressive Kim. Like David I'm going to look up the painting.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/5/2019 5:36:00 AM

Thank you, Elizabeth!

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/5/2019 1:06:00 AM

Wow this was very visual and beautiful!;)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/5/2019 5:34:00 AM

Thank you, Brenda! :)

Jan Allison

Date: 9/4/2019 7:12:00 PM

sch breath taking imagery Kim, a joy to read:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/4/2019 10:46:00 PM

Thanks so much, Jan! Hugs...Kim

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/4/2019 7:06:00 PM

Wow, I am happy I was led to this. It is beautiful Kim :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/4/2019 7:10:00 PM

Thank you so much!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2019 5:36:00 PM

very beautifully inspired, I would say! And hawaiian words make things all the prettier.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/4/2019 6:53:00 PM

I felt it was needed. I met this artist. He was inspired by the true place and he indeed slept in a boat near the waterfall. Loved his style of painting. Whereas one artist had delicate brush strokes, Marko’s were bold, as was his demeanor ;)

David Mohn

Date: 9/4/2019 4:12:00 PM

I thought this was wonderful before I looked up the painting...this is exceptionally wonderful Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/4/2019 4:27:00 PM

Oh, thank you so very much! Hugs...Kim

Chris Green

Date: 9/4/2019 2:42:00 PM

This was breathtaking Kim. Beautifully done.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/4/2019 2:44:00 PM

Thank you so much! I propped myself in front of the painting and played mightily with words. <3 Kim