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December. 21.2023

I May or Maynot be Opposed Poetry Contest

Sponsor - Dilly Dally

The first stanza is from my poem- Almost Xanadu I see everything clothed in glistening sheen. Around me, all I see is beauty and grandeur. Heaven seems to have come down to earth. The sky and the Earth, draped in great splendor. Anyone who lands in this ‘Elysian Field' will loudly exclaim, ‘If there is a Paradise on Earth. it’s here, it’s here’! I hear the howl of death and the smell of blood in the air Monstrous shadows lurk and it's too dark to see. No beam of light falls, this land is parched and arid. The only sound is the cry of men who from the face of death flee. Anyone who steps into this war-torn site will loudly declare “If there is a hell on Earth, it is here, it is here”

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/8/2024 1:43:00 PM

Dearest Valsa, perfect opposition from heavenly splendor to the worst of human decisions. I really like your use of the senses - see vs. hear. Wonderfully crafted opposing images. Chaos on steroids! Heaven on wings! Congratulations on your win, dear friend. I am so happy for your win and happy to see you back here in the soup! Congratulations on the birth of your first grandchild! A glorious event, indeed!!! Health and happiness to you for 2024.

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/8/2024 11:50:00 AM

I loved how this was a dual view on reality even though it was opposites - scary really! Well deserved placement :)

Valsa George
Date: 1/9/2024 2:28:00 AM

Thank you so much DD for the great placement given. I consider your judgement as a real recognition.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/25/2023 10:19:00 AM

Wow. I bet you get a win for this stunning poem

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/22/2023 3:36:00 PM

What an interesting use of contrasts.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/22/2023 1:46:00 PM

WOW!!! A creative write. Many feel it is now hell on earth. Good Luck... Merry Christmas.....................

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/21/2023 9:57:00 PM

My gosh, you've done an extraordinary job at choosing the poem and then crafting an opposite reply to your own words! I found this contest a bit tricky, but seeing your poem.. Ahh, this has made me awestruck. I'm flabbergasted by how so effortless your old and new poems feels, as their striking contrast presents itself so marvelously. The first one is the most beautiful example of heavenly ambience almost describing the wishful essence.. But the opposing take expresses the realities and grief..

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/21/2023 9:59:00 PM

I absolutely love this and I think it should be amongst top winners.. Fabulously done, dear poetess.. Wow

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/21/2023 3:23:00 PM

both versions of your poem are exquisite, dearest Valsa. The contrasts you've created are vivid and succinct. I think this poem is a true masterpiece. I am so in awe of you and your poetic talents, true gifts to the world. Merry Christmas to you and yours, hugs, Sara PS best wishes with the contest!

Silent One

Date: 12/21/2023 12:26:00 PM

You chose an excellent poem to compare and oppose my dear poetic friend.. I can see the contrast in each line how you write a mirror reflection of words through your own personal style.. the first poem was profound in nature and that has not been lost in the second one.. Good luck in the contest, I hope this is a top winners..

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/21/2023 12:22:00 PM

Dear Valsa, your entry for the contest was a remarkable masterpiece. Your poetic genius shines through in your skillful manipulation of words and your ability to express profound thoughts in a beautifully effortless manner. Furthermore, your contrasting interpretation of the original poem showcases your remarkable talent, rendering both versions exceptional works of art. Best wishes for the holiday season and the new year for you and your family, and good luck with the contest

Jay Narain

Date: 12/21/2023 11:17:00 AM

Nice opposite poems. Creative,

Ink Empress

Date: 12/20/2023 10:59:00 PM

Wow thats amazing how youv written complete Opposite of the original poem and both your versions are brilliant. And i love the darkness in your hellish take. How creative is your wordplay and your way with phrasing thoughts in such a seamless manner. This should be a winner definitely. I especially love “ Monstrous shadows lurk and it's too dark to see.“ soul hitting line! Love that! “ The only sound, is the cry of men who from the face of death flee.“ spine tingling! You can write on any theme!