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Ah, Drifting Leisurely - Repost

Ah, drifting leisurely inside the cloud, Watching hot sun’s rays glance across the nose of the winged drone, stealthily slipping proud, I drifted so peacefully through the floes. Updrafts from silent streams beneath arose lifting craft’s nose, unexpectedly plowed through looming cumulus's potential foes, Ah, drifting leisurely inside the cloud. My teeth clinching, I bared tense lips so proud; Sensed gusts of air across the broadened floes, Kissed cerulean sky above allowed Watching hot sun’s rays glance across the nose. Fecklessly, thoughts wondered how high she goes before narrow cockpit collapsed to shroud, and leaps of joy turned into flailing woes of the winged drone, stealthily slipping proud. For a moment, my breathing burst aloud, A sudden chill, fear inside my chest froze leaps of joy turned to sad, flailing allowed, I drifted so peacefully through the floes. I shall land on the grassy field unbowed Receive the welcomed accolades from those who soloed the winds, powerless, uncowed by dangers the upper sky chose to pose, Ah, drifting leisurely. SECOND PLACE WINNER Written/Edited March 1, 2021, slightly modified May 21, 2022 for Rondeau Redouble - Life's Struggles contest Sponsored by Constance La France

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/9/2022 1:14:00 PM

Outstanding example, Milt!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/9/2022 1:45:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea. I always rather liked this poem myself. I always wanted to be a glider pilot. When I was a kid, I dreamed about it a lot. Love flying!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/23/2022 1:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win my friend! Well deserved!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/23/2022 4:23:00 PM

Oh, that was some time ago. This is a repost. I loved this poem.

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 5/22/2022 8:10:00 AM

Wow Milton, this is breathtaking~you have taken your readers into flight! Congratulations on your 2nd Place win in the contest. :)Paulette

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/22/2022 9:44:00 AM

Thanks, Paulette. This is why I reposted it. I felt it deserved another go-around because I do believe it brought special feelings to those who read it. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Bill Baker

Date: 5/21/2022 11:28:00 PM

Congrats on the high finish in the contest, Milt. Well written poem, in form. I enjoyed the imagery and the feel of being in the clouds. Bill

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/22/2022 9:45:00 AM

Thanks, Bill. I really appreciate your read and your comments.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 5/21/2022 7:51:00 PM

I greatly enjoyed this beautiful poem, Milton. Your fine imagery really took me there, drifting leisurely inside the cloud. This is a fave, my friend.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/21/2022 9:02:00 PM

Thanks so much, Evelyn. It is also one of my favorites. I thought it should be posted again so that it might achieve wider readership. I believe some of our newbies will enjoy it, too.