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After the Storm

The water recedes, With muddy land all around; Humid is the air.

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Chris Goombi

Date: 2/18/2009 11:34:00 PM

Nice image in this one, I know what that feels like and I don't like the humid air. -Boo

Tyler Martin

Date: 2/18/2009 1:38:00 AM

Great imagery, the haiku reads nicely. Tyler

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/16/2009 9:21:00 AM

Raul, I live in a very humid area near the Gulf coast, so this really struck a chord for me! Very nice image! And I'm glad my work is growing on you. Sometimes, you have to read more than a couple works by a poet to understand their sentiments. Thanks for reading "Unicorn." It is among my favorites as I have suffered from nightmares all my life and have to take medication (that doesn't always work) to dispell them. Love, Carolyn

Elizabeth Neal

Date: 2/14/2009 7:38:00 PM

Another great haiku, I don't like humid air. Love E.

Daniel Neal

Date: 2/13/2009 7:01:00 PM

This reminds me of the flood we went through, great work Raul. DN

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/13/2009 5:48:00 AM

Your words offer a certain amount of eloquence while conforming well to the rigidity of the form. As well, they speak with a clarity that provides the exact image or intent. Very well written. Michael

Tyesha Ehigiator

Date: 2/12/2009 10:51:00 PM

I can see this so clearly, It rained for a few days and after it stopped, there were mud tracks all over the place..Very icky indeed..Nice creativity here..Great Haiku, God Bless and thank you for your kind words regarding my poetry*Tyesha

Laurie Ginn

Date: 2/12/2009 8:25:00 PM

Okay and it sounds like a mess. I live close to a river and it is the most fun to walk the bank after the water goes down and find treasures from days gone by. Mostly old bottles. Most of mine look perfect but when you pick them up the side in the dirt is broken. Wow that could be deep, lol. Things that look beautiful until you look into what is hidden. A lucid thought at 11:31 that's amazing. Night Raul. Laurie

Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/12/2009 4:46:00 PM

Very vivid images here, Raul. We had a flood here 3 yrs. ago and I can picture this so perfectly. Awesome Haiku! Love, Robin

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/12/2009 4:45:00 PM

Well Raul I reckon these are words of truth regardless of where a person may live - great job on this Haiku - God Bless, MJ

Jim Wilson

Date: 2/12/2009 4:32:00 PM

Hi Raul; years ago I went through a flood and this has the feeling for me of that event.

Date: 2/12/2009 4:21:00 PM

So much truth in your words. Humid can also refer to the somber mood often felt as people deal with the devastation. Interesting reflection. Karen