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After Forever

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We toil incessant Our dreams to mold Yet we'll consign no trace ... When the sun grows cold. Each wonder created All words once scrolled To the realm, obliviate ... (The sun grows cold). Man well concedes To loose his hold Then naught but dust ... (The sun grows cold). Shall be no parry Ne'er sought nor sold Just ravaged orbs ... (The sun grows cold). Sheer fabric, time, The ceaseless fold Brought to its fate ... (The sun grows cold). A scattered system Once planets, bold E'er rendered ashes ... (The sun grows cold). A swollen star With flares of gold Soon bursting nova ... (The sun grows cold). 'Tis sad no eyes Will e'er behold That beauty born ... (The sun grows cold). What happens then? What story's told With paradise lost ... And the sun grown cold? Well, perhaps it's best With our end cajoled There will be no HATE ... When the sun ... Grows ... Cold. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "GIF With Your Best Anything" Poetry Contest, William Kekaula, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "After Forever" Poetry Contest, John Lawless, Judge & Sponsor.

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Eve Roper

Date: 3/15/2020 11:14:00 PM

Amazing, Greg, congratulations on your win. Hugs eve

Eric Cohen

Date: 3/15/2020 2:50:00 PM

I thought you might bite on this one. with a very long-term dark perspective. "A swollen star With flares of gold Soon bursting nova … " Nicely done. (By the way, the latest thinking is that Betelgeuse is not about to go supernova any minute. Turns out the rapid dimming was just dust. That would have been cool to watch, though.)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2020 5:11:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend, I was hoping you might "stop by" this one - really quite pleased that you enjoyed it! I had not heard that about Betelgeuse, though I must say I'm disappointed - what a rare treat it would have been! Blessings! :o)

Hilo Poet

Date: 3/14/2020 3:52:00 PM

An amazing write throughout, Greg, with its well-versed refrain, and love the layout, well-worth being in 1st place, my thanks for your participation, Aloha, William

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2020 5:08:00 PM

Thank you so much, William, this was a fun dalliance into "the ultimate fate", which fascinates me. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it and found it worthy of high placement. Blessings! :o)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/25/2017 9:13:00 PM

Gregory, I really enjoyed your poem. I found it thought provoking as a metaphor, and interesting when taken literally. Congrats on your win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2017 8:37:00 PM

That's very kind of you, Agnes, I'm so pleased you liked it! Blessings! :-)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/24/2017 6:43:00 AM

Great opener! Great refrain! Sad in tone! Congrats, Poet Greg!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2017 8:36:00 PM

Thank you very much, Kim, I so appreciate that! Blessings! :-) <3

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/22/2017 10:05:00 PM

Beautiful flow. Well done, Gregory. Congrats on your win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/23/2017 12:15:00 PM

Very kind of you, Line, thanks so much my friend ... and have a great holiday! :-) <3

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 12/22/2017 9:51:00 PM

I knew you would place well with this piece :) Congratulations my friend! Muchos hugs a la mo

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/23/2017 12:15:00 PM

Awww ... you are too sweet, and I'm glad you were right, (my lucky charm, ha!) ... many thanks and hugs to you, pal!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/22/2017 9:34:00 PM

Thought-provoking, unique piece, Greg! Congrats on your win. Janice

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/23/2017 12:12:00 PM

Thank you so much, Janice ... I read a science fiction short story many years ago about a person going back in time, so far as to actually see the sun grow cold and then super nova, (Ray Bradbury wrote it, perhaps?), and it had a profound affect on me. This was inspired by it ... I hope to track it down again, (it was a classic, from the 50's I think), and give it another read. Blessings, Friend! :-)

John Lawless

Date: 12/22/2017 5:37:00 PM

Well, Gregory, the repetition of that "gotcha" line....."when the sun grows cold" slowed the pace of the read and increased the impact of each tercet. Thanks for participating in the contest.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/23/2017 12:03:00 PM

Thank you so much, John, I'm so pleased you liked this one ... this poem really screamed for a repeated line, and I usually don't do that, or even hear it in my head, but the flow was wrong without it, and I wanted to imprint the consciousness of the reader with the considerations of our star's mortality. I'm so honored and humbled to be on a list with such great writers - thank you again! :-)

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 12/17/2017 11:20:00 AM

A fascinating thoughtful poem with a haunting refrain.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:58:00 PM

I'm very appreciative of your kind comments, Geoffrey - thanks so much! Pleased you liked it, my friend! :-)

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 12/16/2017 6:26:00 PM

Very unique, Gregory - started my mind to wondering.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:57:00 PM

That's so kind of you, SW - thank you very much, friend! :-) <3

Paul Callus

Date: 12/16/2017 3:34:00 PM

Was drawn in by the title....Lovely and creative poem, Gregory! Regards // paul

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:57:00 PM

Thanks so very much, Paul, I appreciate the kind comment, and value your opinion highly - blessings to you, friend! :-)

Frederic Parker

Date: 12/16/2017 10:32:00 AM

this had a religious chant to it, all ends but time, with nothing there to keep its measure...good luck my poetic friend

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:54:00 PM

Very kind of you, my friend, and thanks so much ... appreciate the comments! :-)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/16/2017 8:50:00 AM

I think I remember reading this one, Greg, and I still like it:)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:54:00 PM

Thanks so much, Jo ... it just didn't have the right perspective before, I think it finally works. Blessings, friend! :-)

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 12/16/2017 8:06:00 AM

Indeed! What a unique yet somehow absolutely obvious take on "After Forever", well done! I like the style of this piece and your final message. Good luck to you my friend xomo!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/17/2017 9:53:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dear Mo - so glad you liked it - it's a bit "different" ... blessings, friend! :-) <3