Acme

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Written: July 5th 2024 For Edward Ibah contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ We didn't wish to climb afar and face rattlesnakes.  Sanguine torrents cling to an impact for life's sake. A ferrous soul gulps to be coveted as I decry. Pearl Rivulets will smile if my name arises after I die.  Horrific epiphany may I be an independent man? Having the charm of a heart to incite a warm span. How could I escape the cryptic cenotaph misery? And how my life can brim vermilion vesication jittery. Escorting as a scarlet orb underneath the surface? A rebellious breach of nectar threatens my life. That elevated me from Venus thrall to strife. Yet the battle was doomed to fail furnace. O bestow upon me a heart of gold. Through the tangled web of stings, withhold And relieve the pollen pain that keeps me down. Raising the radius of a field by slowing the iris crown. I have a jar of venom at Fastigium or Acme. Pulchritude lips fall on a mirror in front of her. Etching her jailed irade within a tenebrous lair. I can't bear her veil of solipsism to drag me. My feral nature shatters reality into a kaleidoscope. None will offer a free zenith or a thrilling scry scope. I will be driven into styx abyss if I sit and dream. Rage will ruin me as soft linen on the insane seam. Ferrous flavor fetches my soul into a frightful scoff. My zenith is over; I am ready for an elf metamorph. My lost spirit is drifting away in the maelstrom. After pure bliss, it's time to escape this chthonic dorm.

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Date: 8/5/2024 3:05:00 AM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing this, so wisdom-filled. God bless you.
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Date: 7/28/2024 3:04:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win! Well deserved
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Date: 7/28/2024 3:03:00 PM
Phenomenal, as usual, Lasaad! You never pen less than a great poem. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 7/28/2024 7:45:00 AM
WAY over my poor little head ... but I can tell this is a great write because of that lol! What I did understand was brilliant metaphor and some alliteration I think. The overall mood was sadness. Congratulations! Xo
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Date: 7/27/2024 8:53:00 PM
difficult to understand for me. honestly I could not even get beyond second para. I hope you are not an English language teacher. (the students would be roasted by now) congratulations dear poet. forgive my comments.
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Date: 7/15/2024 1:14:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your "Acme" write with a great ending. "Good Luck"  I hope you are OK... Have a blessed day writing away.....................
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Date: 7/8/2024 3:41:00 PM
a radiant study of conflict peppered with distinct wordplay and figurative language, Sotto...well done!
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Date: 7/6/2024 11:07:00 AM
What a profound and deeply emotive write this is dr sotto, your poem fits the theme of the prompt and flows in such eloquence! I love the way youv used metaphors and also alliterations to depict the darkness within, and i especially love the lines “ Ferrous flavor fetches my soul into a frightful scoff. My zenith is over; I am ready for an elf metamorph. My lost spirit is drifting away in the maelstrom.” I can feel the lost spirit through so many lines in this! As always you delivered something worthy of all the accolades! Pleasure reading your work. Hope your travels are going well. Sending you light
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Date: 7/6/2024 9:03:00 AM
A lot of emotions in this one and great use of light alliteration and word usage.. It masterfully combines vivid and intense imagery with profound emotional and existential themes. The opening lines, "We didn't wish to climb afar and face rattlesnakes. / Sanguine torrents cling to an impact for life's sake," immediately immerse the reader in a world of danger and desire, setting the tone for the rest of the poem.
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Date: 7/6/2024 12:46:00 AM
Your poem is like so many others brilliant. Great use of alliteration and metaphor. Also I admire the struggle of life.
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Date: 7/5/2024 11:51:00 PM
Beautiful Mr Sotto, I liked listening to this poem.
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Date: 7/5/2024 4:38:00 PM
As they say, tomorrow is another day. I like the story of struggle in this poem
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