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This is a picture of Jupiter (Jove) and two of its moons, Callisto and Io.

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I knelt amidst the mountain's rise beneath the weeping opal skies there to measure Io's swoon the envy of each lesser moon trembling like a gold doubloon (heaven's tinged and gilded prize) great Jupiter, the Lord of All filled the sky with amber pall one reddened eye to consecrate the anguish of dear Io's fate years too soon, but eons late shaking with a haggard wrawl Io, once resigned its doom yet, an orb of ravished bloom (spurned as Zeus' paramour) shuddered to its carnal core wept, to mark Europa's door the threshold to its fiery tomb I, stood lone on Ganymede minding Io's breaching bleed as fissures split its relic face a mocking veil of Guipure lace ceding ripe, its fall from grace author of such caustic screed Europa, in her jealous bend paid scant mind to Io's rend jaundiced of Callisto's bough negligent, would disavow keen to hide her withered brow skirting Jove to thus attend in their haste to swift, depart sundered Io's weary heart forces much too fierce to shun imploring mercy, gaining none confident her time was done rattled death, then broke apart as mine, the only sentient eyes attesting Io's bright demise not in want of tears to shed spirit harrowed deep with dread felt some tribute should be said but managed only muted cries it wrought such horrid irony that Io's witness fell to me a spurious and tragic fate for I, at best, was second-rate at physics AND as potentate and seemed such grand calamity and yet ... blessed was I by honor, deep that my eyes were there to weep thus, I vowed in prayer to write the awful beauty of that sight Io's death throes, bursting bright! Lord Zeus' lover ... laid to sleep. (the promise that ... I hereby keep). ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Completely Your Choice (44) Any Form Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ Honorable Mention ~ in the "Your Choice (8), Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 22" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 4th Place ~ in the "Fiction - October 2018 Writing Challenge" Poetry Contest, Dear Heart aka Broken Wings, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 1/14/2020 11:28:00 PM
Wow. I certainly see why people liked this! Works on many levels and I really enjoyed. FYI: on a related note, be sure to look at the conjunction of Jupiter and Saturn in Dec 2020 (just before Xmas). They will be close enough to see together in a small backyard telescope, or just enjoy with your eye near the milky way core. Weather permitting I'll take a pic.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/16/2020 5:02:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, Eric, I greatly appreciate this thoughtful comment, and I'm pleased you enjoyed this one ... I will certainly be watching the conjunction in December, hopefully with a telescope. Are you into Astrophysics? I almost went in that direction and was detoured to medicine, though I am still so pulled toward the stars. Blessings!
Date: 6/15/2019 6:15:00 PM
Back with more well deserved congrats, Gregory.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/16/2020 5:03:00 PM
Thank you very much, Line!
Date: 6/14/2019 9:00:00 AM
Beautiful writing, Greg. I see it won a contest back in March, so I am sure it got its fair due back then! Which contest had it won?
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/16/2020 5:04:00 PM
Many kind thanks, Andrea, that is so appreciated! It has won three awards, listed above ... blessings, Buddy! :o) <3
Date: 3/12/2019 6:58:00 PM
Congrats on your podium finish, Gregory. Superbly penned.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 5:27:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Line! :-) <3
Date: 3/10/2019 3:01:00 PM
All I can say, Greg...this poem is amazing! As one who is enthralled with the Universe...this poem captured me profoundly, and of course, a fave for me. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win. Sandra <3 ;)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 5:27:00 PM
This is such a kind and heartfelt comment, Sandra, and I am honored to come in second place to you ANY day - Thank you so much for the sweet comments, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/8/2019 9:27:00 PM
WOW! CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Greg! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/8/2019 11:35:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Janice, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! :-) <3
Date: 3/8/2019 8:58:00 PM
Congratulations on your well written win, Greg. Have a nice weekend. hugs Eve ~,*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/8/2019 11:34:00 PM
Oh, thank you so much, Eve, I greatly appreciate it, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 3/8/2019 5:51:00 PM
Greg, it took me several reads to get my brain around it. I don't know what else to say except "EPIC!" and I like it :) A Fav for me. Congratulations on your second-place win on Mile 22 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final, which is just 5 contests away! ~Mark
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/8/2019 11:33:00 PM
(2) Many thanks and blessings to you, my friend! :-)
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Date: 3/8/2019 11:32:00 PM
I am truly honored, Mark, and I so appreciate the kind placement with such other amazing poets ... to be among these names is so humbling. I am so pleased you liked this one, as it is one of my personal favs, though I wasn't sure how a sci-fi/fantasy piece would fare with you, I felt the content and impact was worthwhile, and I wove some mythology through it as well ...
Date: 10/26/2018 10:31:00 AM
Greg, great writing and a wonderful story. Congratulations on your win in my contest.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/30/2018 1:51:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Constance, and thank you for my placement! :-) <3
Date: 10/25/2018 4:21:00 PM
Excellent rhymes with big and expensive words. Awesome
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/30/2018 1:51:00 AM
Thank you so much, Jay, I'm pleased you enjoyed it!
Date: 10/25/2018 10:06:00 AM
A literary-mythological-planetary masterpiece, my friend. So well conceived and executed. Best always, Gershon (soupmail)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/30/2018 1:50:00 AM
Thank you so very kindly, Gershon, I'm glad you enjoyed this one, Brother! :-)
Date: 10/15/2018 10:14:00 AM
Fantastic. <3 <3 <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/19/2018 2:22:00 PM
Thank you, Mo! :-) <3

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