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Absence

Anguish when fragmented by helpless musings Bluntness staggers like punches Sluggish when cut by limitations Elixers downed promising possibilities Needing the energy bravery requires while Crevices threaten the sagacity of age Extinction in the rage of alzheimer's cage Acrostic written March 1, 2023 Contest: A Forms and Words Challenge Sponsor: Sotto Poet

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/26/2023 10:08:00 AM

Powerful imagery, especially 'bluntness staggers like punches' - and that final line so heartbreaking, very moving write-

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/26/2023 3:53:00 PM

Thanks very much Michelle. I appreciate your thoughtful appraisal of my Acrostic. Best wishes, Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/22/2023 4:39:00 PM

Whoa!! A terrible disease is Alzheimer's or any form of dementia. This is a good entry in the contest. Thanks for sharing and for stopping by my page. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/22/2023 8:09:00 PM

Greetings Sara, thank you for your stop by + supportive comment on my Acrostic entry. It did receive recognition in the placement list. Congratulations on your recent contest top placement. Be well. Brian

Gary Radice

Date: 3/19/2023 2:26:00 AM

An excellent work Brian. When I read your first line I thought it was going to be about an absence of poetic muse and then your words cut through. Cheers - Gary

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/19/2023 5:57:00 AM

Hello Gary, Thank you for your affirmative view of my acrostic. I hope all is well with you. My muse does need a re-charge, however, as there has been an absence of late. Cheers Brian

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 3/4/2023 6:58:00 AM

Sadly true Brian and very nicely written. Congratulations on your win!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/4/2023 7:26:00 AM

You are so right, Linda. Alzheimer's is a crippling tragedy for families. May you have good health + happy days. Brian

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/3/2023 8:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A sad yet true write. Have a wonderful day......................

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/3/2023 8:22:00 AM

Greetings Paula, my appreciation for your stop by + congratulatory wishes. My aunt had Alzheimer's + I've had friends with the affliction. Look after yourself dear lady. Cheers, Brian

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/2/2023 10:09:00 AM

Brian, outstanding work, and many compliments on your win in my Writing Challenge - A Words and Forms. Blessings.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/2/2023 2:12:00 PM

Thank you, Lasaad. Very thoughtful of you to see merit in my posting. Be well. Brian

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 3/1/2023 8:11:00 PM

Oh! What a poignant punch line ~ truly a dreadful malady

Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/1/2023 9:38:00 PM

Greetings, Thank you for your stop by + comment. Alzheimer's is indeed a scourge, as it takes from the mind + body the wholeness of soul. Take care + be well. Brian