Abandoned

I still recall that dark September day When you told me that you would be leaving I’d fallen for you and you’d had your way My broken heart I was not concealing I started to cry and began pleading But your big blue eyes were as cold as steel This affair you did not try to conceal You packed your bags and just walked out on me Your lover’s name you would never reveal You used me but I was too blind to see Sad Dizain Contest sponsored by Laura loo 05~13~16

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Paul Schneiter

Date: 5/31/2016 12:31:00 AM

Jan, the empathy this poem creates is brilliant, just one of many of your premium-quality, distinguishing hallmarks. Bravo! hugs xxx

Funom Makama

Date: 5/26/2016 1:54:00 PM

Great lines, wonderful flows, indicative of a soul deep mind. An excellent seven well deserved.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2016 2:26:00 PM

Thanks Funom:-) hugs Jan xx

Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 5/23/2016 9:35:00 AM

Wow, I could feel the pain in this, you wonder how could someone be that cold, when your heart still has such warmth for them. Excellent write, congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/26/2016 2:25:00 PM

Thanks Dineen thankfully its a fiction write for me:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/21/2016 5:57:00 AM

Congrats Jan, you do sad really well.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Richard I do like to surprise with more serious writes from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/21/2016 2:41:00 AM

Congratulations Jan on a great write and your top spot win:)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thanks so much Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra

Date: 5/21/2016 12:33:00 AM

Congrats, Jan, on the fabulous poem and win. ~karam~

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thanks so much Karam:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2016 4:01:00 PM

Congratulations! Breaking hearts with this one!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/20/2016 3:17:00 PM

A heartbreak for sure, and a well-written Dizain. Congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:12:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra its my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 5/20/2016 3:11:00 PM

Congrats on your placement, JAN! Nicely done.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:12:00 PM

Thanks so much Lukas:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 5/20/2016 2:48:00 PM

Very heartbreaking and well very sad which worked wonderful for this contest Jan! Congrats on your win!!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:12:00 PM

Thanks so much Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/20/2016 2:40:00 PM

A beautiful poem on heartbreaking beautifully drawn. A great congratulation my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:12:00 PM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 5/20/2016 1:17:00 PM

Jan, a perfect entry for this contest, well done lady, thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your top placement! -luloo :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:13:00 PM

Thanks so much LuLoo I am delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 5/19/2016 10:23:00 AM

Written in sad ink, loved it Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:13:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/16/2016 12:37:00 PM

- Love "make blind" it is said ...... but, being "used" is heartbreaking, dear Jan - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/15/2016 2:58:00 AM

There is so much pain when this happens Jan. You did a great job conveying that. The broken heart sometimes can never be wholly healed. A wonderful entry for the contest Jan. GL It should do well! # 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:15:00 PM

Thanks Connie - you predicted well and I was delighted to place so highly:-) hugs Jan xx

Etienne Lariviere

Date: 5/14/2016 11:42:00 PM

La vie est dommage, I like this very much.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:16:00 PM

Merci beaucoup Etienne:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/14/2016 8:48:00 PM

Loved this one Jan, sad, but beautifully written poem! hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Arthur I do like to surprise with a serious write from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/14/2016 7:21:00 PM

CAn't wait to try one of these too, Jan. You got it up in a jiffy and it looks GREAT! I am so glad I got my contest judged. I have been ignoring poor Snickers, so I am going to take him out now for a walk. see ya!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:17:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 5/14/2016 4:04:00 PM

Excellent pen Jan painted beautifully almost takes me back into the garden of remembrance wishing you a blessing of a weekend pal

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:17:00 PM

Thanks so much Liam always a pleasure to hear from you:-) hugs Jan xx

Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/14/2016 2:07:00 PM

Nothing more empty or scoops out your tummy more than those that did not love us unconditionally. Excellent job at capturing the desertion in simple eloquent words. A7

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:18:00 PM

Thanks so much Edlynn:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/14/2016 11:52:00 AM

Rough and sadly true too many times. Great write and best of luck in the contest :) hugs xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/22/2016 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Cas:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/13/2016 4:57:00 PM

A sad day for him Jan. You were much better off without him.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/14/2016 5:45:00 AM

Pure fiction for contest Tim:-) hugs Jan xx