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Abandoned- Jq

Can someone turn on the light? My long days are always night. I'm lost, abandoned and scared, And no one has ever cared. Light is something that I crave. Night, so cruel, can't be brave. Scared and left all by myself. And I feel like trash on a shelf. 3-8-19 Contest: Jueju-Qijue With A Twist Poetry Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Charles Messina

Date: 4/17/2019 5:56:00 AM

Alexis, this is a very touching poem. I had to place it at the bottom because of the last line in the second stanza. It should have started with "Cared instead of "And" so sorry. A wonderful poem...Charlie

Alexis Y.
Date: 4/17/2019 9:28:00 AM

Hi Charlie, You held a good contest. I didn't notice the mistake. Thanks for placement in your contest:-)Alexis

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 3/11/2019 12:41:00 PM

My instant favourite.. a touching write :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/11/2019 2:12:00 AM

Your twist is remarkable, my friend. Well done Alexis!

Silent One

Date: 3/10/2019 11:36:00 AM

This is sad.. who would want to feel like trash on a shelf..

Joseph May

Date: 3/9/2019 5:35:00 PM

Very nicely done Alexis..Best wishes...

Judy Ball

Date: 3/9/2019 3:31:00 PM

What a touching piece this is,. I get the feeling of some poor little caged animal being kept all alone in a cage and just given food and water and then ignored.\ How sad. Good job here. God Bless, JB

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/9/2019 3:02:00 PM

Great use of 'light/night' contrasting ideas, good luck in the contest!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/9/2019 11:22:00 AM

Wow Alexis, you are so adventurous and with your imaginative poetic flair, you are definitely a winner in this and many contests to come! Good luck - poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 3/8/2019 8:16:00 PM

Beautiful... I really like the imagery and allusion.

Constance La France

Date: 3/8/2019 8:05:00 PM

Alexis, very emotional and beautifully penned ~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/8/2019 7:55:00 PM

Great job, Alexis. I really like it. I keep forgetting how he wants us to do the one twist thing. Hope you got that part right. (using words from one line on the last line) thanks for what you said on my love sonnet. I never wrote one so fast before. It's like it wrote itself!!

Jan Allison

Date: 3/8/2019 3:07:00 PM

oh wow Alexis there certainly is a twist to this in so many ways, you have penned and excellent poem!:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.
Date: 3/8/2019 4:05:00 PM

Hi Jan, Thank you so much. I hope the Sponsor feels the same way. I appreciate you continued support:-) Alexis