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She walked in the church doors all alone, the heart in her chest was mere stone. Her life was hard and a big mistake, she longed to be pierced with a stake. Left at the hospital when she was born, If she took her life, who would mourn? She went to the church to find a reason- to live; deep pain was her constant season. She wondered if God was really real; If he was could he see her, or heal, her from feeling so tired and worthless. She didn't want to be seen as useless. Suddenly, she felt a gentle cool breeze, and she started to feel love and at ease. Then tears of joy streamed down her face, and years of heartache left without a trace. 12-19-2020 Contest: A Rhyme Story-Poem With Eyes On Poetry Sponsor: Mystic Rose

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Date: 12/21/2020 11:30:00 AM
Good luck i the contest Alexis, I loved it. Jennifer.
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Date: 12/21/2020 11:27:00 AM
What a beautiful poem Alexis dear friend. From deep despair to tears of joy - God can do wonders, he sees us, he knows us, feels for us, knows our pain, and wonderful you found your answer in His house. This poem I have saved as a fave Alexis. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer. Jennifer.
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Date: 12/19/2020 10:51:00 PM
The emotions in this poem are perfect. God abandons no one but we must search for Him. ~~
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Date: 12/19/2020 9:16:00 PM
She was in despair, but she went to the right place. This is such a beautiful poem. Merry Christmas to you and yours, Evelyn
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Date: 12/19/2020 4:02:00 PM
You gave her voice--emotive write, Alexis. I liked the upbeat ending. All the best.
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Date: 12/19/2020 3:55:00 PM
Brilliant. Very well done. great lines. Hope you won Pete.
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Date: 12/19/2020 2:41:00 PM
Perhaps just giving her problems to God helped relieve this poor woman's pain. A beautiful poem that touches every beating heart. Best wishes in the contest! Have a merry Christmas, Alexis. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 12/19/2020 1:42:00 PM
A meaningful and beautiful poem Alexis. Great one :)
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