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Abandon Poetry Contest

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Abandon All Your Hope

“Holding on is believing that there's only a past; letting go is knowing that there's another future.”  Author unknown.

Make no bones about it. I shall never want you,
Don't waste your love on someone worthless like me.

All is lost like a fat candle lit in bright sunlight, 
Wasted as a dewdrop falling in the sea;
It's as pointless as a cold snowflake
Settling on freezing Mount Everest.

I'm deaf and dumb to your spirit, 
Perhaps I'm stone blind or have a rock instead of a heart.
Don't blame yourself; my soul is ravished by tempests past
That rage was like a tornado inside me.

I try to dredge the ancient hates.
That left me stubborn and blind, 
Swept by the hurricanes of old loves, 
An anger whirling like a rushing wind,

I weave a shade dark and benighted
To smother all that's bad.
Alas, the end result is that I cannot love.
I'm just indifferent.  Do I make myself clear?

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Kendrick Avatar
May 27, 2025 at 4:15 AM
Back with congratulations to you on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
Andresen Avatar
May 24, 2025 at 10:38 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the contest "Abandon", Victor :) - hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
May 24, 2025 at 10:20 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a powerful yet sad write. Great Picture... Gave a blessed weekend...........
Jones Avatar
May 23, 2025 at 3:17 PM
Wow this is amazing! Congratulations on your win in the contest Victor!
Gifford Avatar
May 22, 2025 at 2:22 AM
Hello Victor, this a very powerful and touching piece, beautifully written. Have a great day my friend.
Legros Kelley Avatar
May 22, 2025 at 12:01 AM
I knew a man like this, bitter at everything, he had been so sweet when he was a teenager, but anger and bitterness smoldered in his heart till he found that those he pushed away, stayed away, including his daughters. It was very sad to see. Very well written.
Greenhough Avatar
May 21, 2025 at 3:34 PM
Burned and finished with women. What a challenge. Many women are looking for you. Which will win you over? The town beauty, the best kitchen cook, the outdoor type? It sounds exciting to be single.
Hind Avatar
May 21, 2025 at 2:55 PM
This is different- sad though. Remember the saying "It's better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all" I am not judging you, I don't know where you come from in this poem. It's well written- like this " a snowflake on Mount Everest"
Empress Avatar
May 21, 2025 at 12:02 AM
A very different take on the prompt that is truly impactful and powerful dear victor. Very well written, sometimes also when we are in the wrong place at the wrong time we feel like we are the ones at fault, and also sometimes some need a lot of self awareness to realize their past trauma could be an obstacle for future endeavors. Your poem made me feel as always! You write very well! Best wishes! Sending you light always
Godwin Avatar
May 20, 2025 at 10:49 AM
I am swept away by metaphor winds that grant poetic flight. Not use to your pen delivering a negative outpour, but dramatically outpour it did, and you're quite good at it. There's an 'I' somewhere just longing to be included in the 2nd to last line. Read your bio. So impressive, in many ways. One is how well you write at 84, your wits and talents are still w/ you. May I be so blessed. What did you get your Bachelor of Arts in?
Buhagiar Avatar
May 20, 2025 at 11:57 AM
B.A. General in English, Maltese and Economics.
Dietrich Avatar
May 20, 2025 at 5:55 AM
Wow. That would be a really messed up person. Free verse really fits with this raw description of how he became this way.
Williams Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 10:27 PM
Dear Victor,your poem has such a raw, stormy honesty to it. There’s a weight in the words that really lingers—like someone trying to shield another from their own wreckage. The metaphors are powerful: tornados, hurricanes, dewdrops in the sea… it all feels like someone wrestling with past damage while trying not to drag anyone else down. It’s tragic, but beautifully written. You’ve really captured the ache of emotional disconnect with grace...Hugs
Singh Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 8:34 PM
Message of hopelessness and emotional isolation,well pained.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 7:06 PM
Always a great write! Not disappointed her! Hugs and blessings!
Rolland Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 4:57 PM
hope she will notice, and accept, beautiful and touching poem, enjoyed
May Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 12:45 PM
It's hard to abandon all hope, Powerful write
Buehler Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 9:44 AM
Victor, your well composed poem is interesting and deep, and a pleasure to read. I love the images. :)
Rodgers Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 9:13 AM
Dear Victor, O' how haunting and beautifully raw. The honesty in your words through the ache of old storms, the struggle with letting go. I feel the weight of your imagery just like candles in sunlight, dewdrops in the sea, snowflakes on Everest. Even in darkness, there’s meaning in facing our storms head-on. Spring Blessings, My Dear Victor, Daniel
Poet Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 8:53 AM
Victor, your poetry is astonishingly profound with wonderful levels of imagery, and you make your message absolutely obvious. Your heart is a one-way highway, that is how faithful and true you are.
Kendrick Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 8:17 AM
I enjoyed this contest entry. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Excellent rhyming. Sara K
Andresen Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 2:41 AM
- "I weave a shade dark and benighted To smother all that's bad" ... a truly dark poem ... with a heart of stone, Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
Edmonds  Avatar
May 19, 2025 at 2:23 AM
Victor you make it perfectly clear, but if someone says they love you, let them love you, even if your love is not returned… Beryl
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