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Middle-aged woman puffs a cigarette right outside the grocery store entrance. Her dark eyes fall from mine while beads of sweat trench above furrowed brow. “Spare a few cents?” she asks under her breath. My muscles tense. Annoyed, I shake my head; no words are spoken. I toss a coin in her pail. Still smoking, She gestures with a nod. The hazy air hangs, weighted with her stench. As stone eyes glare, my son begins to cough nearly choking. Hard days have come to my family; life has knocked us down. Humiliated, I beg to survive, you see; even through strife, we had love but no home. So forgive my intrusion today as you hurry by. It’s a nasty habit. You don’t approve. My kids are gone; last week, the state removed them. Now, this smoke seems like my only friend. God took my spouse last year. I can’t pretend life’s good. Forgive me. I, too, disapprove. By Rhonda Johnson-Saunders, July 27, 2012 for You Don't Understand Contest (Cyndi MacMillan)

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Date: 8/5/2012 2:07:00 PM
OH, so well done. Excellent! congratulations. Lee
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Date: 8/2/2012 6:17:00 PM
You sure imagined walking a mile in her shoes!! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/2/2012 4:37:00 PM
Great win Rhonda. I'm proud to be in the same winner's circle as this gem. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/2/2012 11:28:00 AM
Art, pure and simple (aaaah, yes, the simple is deceiving, yes? The editing, the reworking, the time spent just thinking it through and envisioning it first. Simple? Naw. Worth the effort? Dang straight) Congrats, hon. Well deserved win. Thanks for the comments and stopping by the winners blog. Hey, soup or comment me asap re: co-judge a contest? Next one or one after or you are swamped by summer fun and rather wait it out? Something in mind? Rather just run one on your own, now that you can?:)
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Date: 8/2/2012 8:12:00 AM
This one really hits home! I really love how you did this - so emotionally packed! Congrats on your win :) fav poem
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Date: 8/2/2012 8:05:00 AM
congrats Rhonda on a fabulous first place win for this incredible expressive entry luv.. top notch..
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Date: 8/2/2012 5:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your 1st place win in Cyndi's 'You Do Understand" contest Rhonda. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/1/2012 11:47:00 PM
Rhonda,, congratulations with your wonderful win in Cyndi's contest... xox~PD
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Date: 7/28/2012 12:51:00 PM
This is quite the powerful write my friend! I am amazed at its punch there at the end, sad in it's moments! Spectacular piece Rhonda, special poem! Great Work!!
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Date: 7/28/2012 11:46:00 AM
An excellent entry for the contest, Rhonda. We only see the outside, not what's going on inside. Well done! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/28/2012 7:07:00 AM
Sad that these situations exsist..We have so much help in place but people are falling through the cracks..Great work about the topic..Sara
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Date: 7/28/2012 7:06:00 AM
Yes, it is a nasty habit Rhonda, very well written. - Wish you luck in contest. - Have a lovely weekend. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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