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a white rabbit

a white rabbit runs across virgin snow. . . . a gunshot rings out
For Debbie Guzzi's Fall or Winter haiku Poetry Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 5/16/2015 12:11:00 PM
oh no poor rabbit. hope the gunshot was aiming up high
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Date: 9/3/2014 8:38:00 AM
Andrea You bad bad girl. Killing the poor bunny in the snow. LOL Thank you for the awesome comment on my Hearts Warning poem.
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Date: 1/2/2012 8:07:00 AM
Good Morning.You will be LATE for the school:)
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Date: 12/22/2011 10:58:00 PM
I can visualise this excellent poem would make a great movie scene
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Date: 12/18/2011 3:20:00 PM
Poor Bunny! :( Very good!
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Date: 11/19/2011 5:34:00 PM
I am so confused about haikus...I like yours though.. congrats.Im around...busy and having writers block...BG
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Date: 11/19/2011 3:49:00 PM
congrats on a great win in the contest andrea, very vivid picture you paint here, and clever to introduce sound into it :-)
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Date: 11/17/2011 1:28:00 PM
Andrea congrats on your win..David
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Date: 11/17/2011 11:14:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea on your win in this Haiku contest of Debbie Guzzi. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/17/2011 5:28:00 AM
Loved this haiku, Andrea. Glad to see it way up there! The last line is an ouchy and puts the reader RIGHT there. I almost heard the bang... hugs, chum, and congrats on this win!
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Date: 11/15/2011 2:35:00 PM
Hi Andrea!! Stand up and take a long long bow to celebrate this sweet snapshot of a white rabbit. Congrats...I loved this the very first time I read it...pssst...I am also a sucker for lil white rabbits. Gwendolen
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Date: 11/15/2011 8:47:00 AM
YOU are MY teacher..thanks for all your help over the years! I like when you write these more traditional haiku! CONGRAD's Light & Love
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Date: 11/13/2011 10:01:00 PM
what???... lol..the rabbit better be the one shooting the gun... lol.... nice one...p.d.
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Date: 11/13/2011 7:20:00 PM
Is this a contemporary haiku...a gunshot refers to a human element...hmm....I don't particularly care about that for my reading enjoyment...I love the image of fresh snow,,,a camouflaged rabbit is no match for this expert hunter. Love your haiku..love rabbit stew too. lol. You are a poetry machine, girl!! Gwendolen
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Date: 11/13/2011 6:56:00 PM
This is a vivid picture, poor little rabbit. I like the virgin snow, for me it puts the scene in early morning... I had to do away with my ' miniature mountains' I replaced them with a 'slippery pathway' hope nobody falls and breaks their neck. :) Cornish cream... Cornwall and Devon in south England produce a double cream to die for. If you ever find yourself in that neck of the woods don't miss the scones, jam and creammmm. luv Margaret
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Date: 11/11/2011 11:11:00 AM
A gonner is that white rabbit. Enjoyed the Haiku . love phyl
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Date: 11/9/2011 8:13:00 PM
I hope the two whites made the hunter miss, I can always dream can't I Andrea. Isn't Robert's comment below hilarious?
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Date: 11/9/2011 2:28:00 PM
Well, does he die or is he disguised...Leaves me wondering..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a wonder...Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
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Date: 11/9/2011 12:56:00 PM
Oh, I hate to see the rabbits running for their lives when hunters are around, but people in Florida do hunt them for food. Outstanding, powerful haiku! Deb will love it too. Love, carolyn
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Date: 11/9/2011 12:39:00 PM
Rabbit stew tonight. And the circle of life continues. The way rabbits go at it, there will be another one come along soon. Probably with tears in it's eye's for you shot it's mother. Shame on you! I'm gettin confused, am I supposed to feel sad for the bunny, or glad that somebody gets rabbit stew for supper. Hmmmm? Just having a little fun with this one. Who knew three little lines would incite such a fuss. :) Oh, and good luck in the contest.
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Date: 11/9/2011 12:25:00 PM
Ouch! Poor rabbit. Love this one, Andrea - what a powerful haiku
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Date: 11/9/2011 10:46:00 AM
Though, the sad thoughts I get from this write, I really love it ! Poor widdle wabbit @ Have a wonderful week dear poet.....much love, james
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Date: 11/9/2011 7:31:00 AM
Someone below is calling you Debbie...
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Date: 11/9/2011 7:31:00 AM
Love your Haiku for the contest Andrea. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/9/2011 7:28:00 AM
Very nice haiku...U changed a word I think.Best wishes.
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