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A Walk Through Rain's Crack Minichu

Rain with her wet slippers assail The senses affixed on my walls— Through its cloudy sight, a sun dial. Where pattering waxes to a haunting tune, Blew out the candle from under time— Cracks now wide in bright or dull blue. Storm's find Brass chimes Odd shine Rain with her wet slippers assail, Blew out the candle from under time, Odd shine.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 11/25/2023 6:10:00 AM

Your execution of this form is masterful, demonstrating an impeccable command of rhyme and rhythm that effortlessly guides the reader through vivid imagery.

Silent One

Date: 11/25/2023 1:53:00 AM

You do this form so well.. they rhymes and flow are good and also has imagery..

Mat Ignacio

Date: 11/23/2023 8:10:00 PM

a wonderfully delicate weave - second to last line, powerful, stands on its own

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 11/23/2023 11:37:00 AM

I feel the tears, the time given, the lost years, all still worth liv'in.... so incredably sureal. FAV! A.S.

Ink Empress

Date: 11/21/2023 12:54:00 AM

Ah dear kind paige, i can see you’ve mastered this form really, and what a coincidence, im reading this while its raining so heavily here. I really love the flow of this and how you’ve also written “ Where pattering waxes to a haunting tune, Blew out the candle from under time—“ your imagery and metaphors are impeccable! Sending you light today and always

Yann Rolland

Date: 11/21/2023 12:08:00 AM

there are lovely sonorities, here, the rain, the chimes, this is so well written, enjoyed your poem Paige

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/20/2023 11:09:00 PM

Such an interesting poem, Paige.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/20/2023 4:01:00 PM

delightful imagery -- I could hear the rain, hear the chimes, etc. Thanks for sharing your poetic spirit! Have a great evening, Sara

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/20/2023 11:31:00 AM

So beautifully graphic, Paige. I can hear the raindrops, the chimes and watch the skies "crack" into allusive patches of blue! Love the "rain with wet slippers!" Thank you for this moment of sheer delight from a northwest child who grew up loving the rain! Blessings! Happy Thanksgiving!