A Vista of Fire

her mind a box of melted crayons her hands a vista of fire magic wands raked over the coals

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Line Gauthier

Date: 7/8/2025 1:56:00 PM

love the image of "her mind a box of melted crayons" ~ I'm wishing readers were given more clues for the rest of the poem so we could truly appreciate the metaphor.

Bill Baker

Date: 7/7/2025 11:34:00 AM

A very thought-provoking poem, gw. It's like a movie that has an open ending ... lots to think about. BB

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/7/2025 4:23:00 AM

Whoa!! I am wondering what this person has been thorough in her life. I like the creativity of the lines. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/7/2025 3:58:00 AM

like John i'll hazard a guess though not sure, you are as sharp as a razor my friend. she works as fast as quick silver, her mind can take no more, its gone like gushy melted crayons, yet magic wands her way, her hands rake over this vista of fire, another issue for her, and rake over the coals. HUGS AND BLESSINGS, ANYWHERE NEAR....... Jennifer.

John Lawless

Date: 7/6/2025 7:25:00 PM

well, Gershon, this one has all the little boxes inside my head shouting W T F it's late on the tail of a long weekend...I shall FAVE this as I will be returning to it often.