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Written for " a vine in winter" sponsored by Craig Cornish

A Vine in Winter

The sky never complains about the storms,
but homes clusters of things we’ve lost~
    to form a canopy of comfort,
amidst electric threads, suffocating in silence.
When cold is the air ~ tender and crisp,
cradling the gold within jinxed jasmines,
aching for a rosier rise of the sun, 
as clouds sigh reveries, tinged with tears,
wreathed in memories,
of how love was once an orchid in summer,
now this heart trembles, frozen in numbness,
    like a vine breathing in winter,
seeking tendrils of truth from soils of promises~
a quiet verse in a permafrost sonnet, 
sealed with thistles ~ settling into nothingness,
but will the snow moon, 
ever taste the hope within solitude,
that rests upon my tongue?
Or am I to remain a paradox of petals,
floating through flurry lakes of space and time?
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Peck Avatar
March 6, 2025 at 8:27 AM
"...a quiet verse in a permafrost sonnet..." I love your poetry. Congratulations on first!
Jones Avatar
March 4, 2025 at 3:36 PM
Congratulations dear Inky! Love this especially the ending lines! What a deserving top win!
mysore Avatar
March 4, 2025 at 2:48 AM
beautiful. congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers!!!
Miller Avatar
March 4, 2025 at 1:31 AM
"seeking tendrils of truth from soils of promises" Wonderful, every line a joy, congratulations
Cornish Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 12:03 PM
Girl! You made this one dance with a firework of subtle personifications - loved what you did with poetic foreplay, without (no need) embellishing modifiers - no wasted spices - just the right mix - the metaphors sort of wink at each other like an "inside" joke, only they know ... but we wish to!
Empress Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 8:20 PM
Dear Craigsz, thank you so much for this beautiful and uplifting comment and for my placement in your contest, it was a very inspiring prompt as always. Your comment is as poetic as you. Thank you again. Grateful always to know amazing poets like you and to be able to learn from you on soup. Sending you light today and always
Beaufort Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 2:18 PM
IE, great description of times of paucity and times of fulfillment. You capture the issue we have regarding having and not having. How can we keep hope alive? I know I'm lucky to feel good about each day....it does not matter what happens since I know I can do the right thing. I have no control over the outcome and that is something I think I have accepted. OMG, reading your work is like a visti to a therapy session (lol). We all have a choice how we classify our experiences and react! Smiles!
Poet Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 11:35 AM
Dearest Ink, your great poem delves into topics of loss, ache, and the search for faith despite feelings of sadness and solitude. You reflect on the passing of time and souvenirs of love; you use rich images to portray a sense of sorrow. Your use of nature imagery (e.g. "orchid," "jasmines," "snow moon") creates a sense of beauty and grief. Phrases such as "tendrils of truth" and "flurry lakes of space and time" imply a strong link to both the natural and emotional worlds. The use of phrases like "trembles," "aching," and "suffocating" heightens the sense of vulnerability and need. Best wishes for the contest, and many positive energies thrown your way.
Liguori Avatar
February 19, 2025 at 1:16 PM
Reading an Ink Empress poem is to engage in a parade of excitement and wonder. Each line flows with originality and refreshment. I’m so happy you contribute your talents to soup. This poem was particularly enchanting.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 3:23 AM
Thank you for your unwavering support dear robert, appreciate always your kindness
DiMino Avatar
February 19, 2025 at 5:18 AM
"of how love was once an orchid in summer, now this heart trembles, frozen in numbness," -- I know. Love can be very disappointing. Till I let its roots sink deeper, giving love for love's sake alone...expecting nothing in return. Then I am often pleasantly surprised. My heart has been devastated in life more times than I can count. I have learned to wear those battles as medals of honor. "Or am I to remain a paradox of petals, floating through flurry lakes of space and time?" -- Powerful imagery!
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 3:30 AM
Awn thank you for sharing a part of your heart here in comments and also for leaving such a thoughtful and kind comment. Im truly very grateful for your kind support always dear joe.
M  Avatar
February 18, 2025 at 10:45 AM
Beautiful words sweet Ink….as per! Debx
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 3:49 AM
Awwn sweet debx! So good to hear from you!!!
Buhagiar Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 11:11 PM
So sorry I missed your poems but I have computer problems. Sometimes it defies me. Must buy a new one. Your imagery is poetic and vivid. It captures the season of winter perfectly. Jasmines are beautiful flowering climbers. And I have two orchid which I love. Great beauty.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 3:59 AM
Awn i have an orchid too right now at home, theres a reason i used orchid here as it used to be my favorite flower, and jasmines are pretty and they smell strong too. Many love the smell. Thank you for your unwavering support always
Alhemaidy Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 5:32 PM
Very lovely poem!
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 3:59 AM
Thank you so much dear AA
Kendrick Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 2:09 PM
Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your lines with us. Sara K
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:04 AM
Awn thank you sweet sara
Gifford Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 12:19 PM
Hi Ink, brilliantly written found your words very touching. Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:08 AM
Awwn thank you so very kind of you! Im grateful for your support
Liguori Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 12:15 PM
‘now this heart trembles, frozen in numbness, like a vine breathing in winter’… what great lines!!! I loved reading your poem. Nicely done.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:19 AM
Thank you again dear robert! So kind of you to say
Dietrich Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 10:43 AM
yes, you wrote kind of the way I was trying to MEAN it. Wish I could have done it the way you did, Sweetie!!! Awesome as ever.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:20 AM
Awwn i loved yours sweet andrea! I just posted today and reading some poems here. Hope you are doing well.
Hind Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 10:24 AM
Lovely work, dear soul - may you find your haven <3
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:34 AM
Awwn may you find your haven too poetic soul. Thank you so much sweet paige
Rolland Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 9:59 AM
this is so well written, poet, a poem full of grace and emotions, thanks for the jewel
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:37 AM
Thank you so much dear poetic soul, im always grateful for your kindness and support
Rodgers Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 5:55 AM
Dear Empress, such a breathtaking dance of melancholy and hope, along with celestial grace. I loved how every line is like winter’s touch, yet I felt it pulses with the ache of longing. I’m in awe of your ability to sculpt emotion into something so ethereal yet deeply felt. Stunning FAV! Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Danie With admiration,
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:44 AM
Thank you so very much always and also for the fave always grateful for your kind and generous support.
Greenhough Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 1:29 AM
Interesting metaphors and a story of possible cataclysm causes an enjoyable read. Hopefully, all ends well.
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:47 AM
Always grateful for your kind support dear hilda. Thank you so much
Sharma  Avatar
February 17, 2025 at 12:18 AM
Ohh my!! This absolutely stirred my soul, dear Ink! How aching are the emotions which you've infused here, yet so beautifully layered with depth and so much more ~ I love the way you've used so many poetic techniques, blending metaphors so gorgeously together that they claim a unique factual existence for themselves. "The sky never complains about the storms, but homes clusters of things we’ve lost" Ahh, this line touched my heart deeply... loss is inevitable in life and the loving memories which we once so dearly held close, become a thorn for our souls! "but will the snow moon, ever taste the hope within solitude, that rests upon my tongue?" Absolutely stunning! Your wordsmithery is crisp yet beyond eloquent, delivering the melancholy sentiments so powerfully... Space and time can really engulf it all.. but one is above everything which tames us in pain... Truly loved reading this, best wishes for the contest ~ keep shining and writing always, my fairy goddess..
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:48 AM
Oh gosh you make every poem i weave sound so nice dear hiya, angelic star! Thank you so much for your sincere and empathetic response! Um truly humbled and honored, and always grateful for the time you take and give to leave such soulful comments,
Onpaper Avatar
February 16, 2025 at 11:31 PM
The sky never complains about the storms, but homes clusters of things we’ve lost to form a canopy of comfort,.. mmmm that imagary !!! how love was once an orchid in summer, now this heart trembles, frozen in numbness, like a vine breathing in winter,.. oh yesssss cheers to frozen hearts papi!!!! We alll dead inside ae!!! sealed with thistles settling into nothingness,.. sounds perfect to me aeee!! ever taste the hope within solitude, that rests upon my tongue? No la um hoplesss .. cannot.. am I to remain a paradox of petals, floating through flurry lakes of space and time? I like the lake n space n time!!! Here is to the walking dead hearts … !!!! Ayeeee!!!! XD
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:48 AM
Awwn thank you so mych pappi!ll walking dead sounds good not ae. Hahah
Rhymes Avatar
February 16, 2025 at 10:34 PM
Space and time . Love it
Empress Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:49 AM
Thank u dahlin
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