A Triolet Tryst: a Collab With Eileen Manassian

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The sun slides down the crimson sky.
I watch the shadows on her face.
The sea is calm, the seagulls cry.
The sun slides down the crimson sky.
My hand is resting on her thigh
Below the silk and braided lace.
The sun slides down the crimson sky.
I watch the shadows on her face.
 
The evening star comes out to see
My love who tempts with warm caress.
The moon is chiding, "Let them be".  
The evening star comes out to see
The hands that bind eternity;
They stray beneath my flowing dress.
The evening star comes out to see
My love who tempts with warm caress.
 
There is no rush, the night is long.
We know that time is on our side.
An understanding to prolong.
There is no rush, the night is long.
Controlling feelings that are strong;
We know that they won’t be denied.
There is no rush, the night is long.
We know that time is on our side.

The tide of passion ebbs and flows
Like ocean swell, and then recedes.  
His ardour for fulfilment grows.
The tide of passion ebbs and flows.
For full release my body pleads.
He sends me high; he makes me glow. 
The tide of passion ebbs and flows
Like ocean swell, and then recedes. 	

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A co-write: Paul Callus & Eileen Manassian
@ June 2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 3/21/2020 7:07:00 AM
What an awesome piece!!! We need to publish!!!!
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Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2020 6:00:00 PM
I just read it, and I echoed your same words in my mind!! Hugs // paul
Date: 10/6/2015 10:17:00 PM
I came back to click the 7. I always have the best of intentions and always forget to click before I get! ... CayCay
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Date: 10/7/2015 2:43:00 PM
I managed to read this excellent collaboration 'Dancing with Lust' on Mark's page since it was not on yours. Posted a comment there:) // paul
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Date: 10/7/2015 2:31:00 PM
Thank you for the high rating, CayCay! I will now go visit your 'Dancing with Lust'. // paul
Date: 10/6/2015 10:15:00 PM
I see it was written from the female perspective, well - I hope because I can't picture you in a dress. I think your collaboration resulted in a truly beautiful and romantic poem. It is easy to imagine a guitar gently strumming as a soft, sexy voice of longing sings. I gave you a seven and enjoyed reading it 3 times ... CayCay (I collaborated on a poem with Mark Woods called 'Dancing with Lust' if you'd like to give it a read.)
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Date: 10/7/2015 2:29:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by to read this co-write, CayCay! The first and third stanzas are written by the male, while the 2nd and last are written by the female. Glad it tickled your imagination. Regards ~ paul
Date: 6/11/2015 8:42:00 PM
Sir Paul the gentleman and the beautiful Eileen . . . yours words flowed together and enhanced the love song of nature and hearts. Well done dear friend, 7
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Paul Callus
Date: 6/13/2015 4:58:00 PM
Thank you David:) Few things beat a song of love! Eileen has once again proved to be an excellent collaborator. Have a nice weekend. // paul
Date: 6/7/2015 7:31:00 PM
Paul so beautifully penned by both of you, seamless and flowing, a 7, and thanks for visiting my footle poem
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Date: 6/8/2015 2:27:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by to read our Triolet offering, Constance:) Both your lovely comments and high rating are much appreciated. Have a lovely week. // paul
Date: 6/5/2015 8:02:00 PM
Simply Beautiful. A true work of art
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Date: 6/6/2015 5:06:00 AM
Thank you Milton; so pleased that you like it. All the best. // paul
Date: 6/5/2015 2:57:00 PM
The more I read this, the more wow was echoing in my mind as I read. Upon reaching the end, wow became WOW. Talk about lines melding into stanza's, these are lines into stanza's worth reading, and the images are so beautiful, delightful. Note to James, need to do better to rival such. Blessed weekend to you Eileen, and to you Paul, James :) :)
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Date: 6/5/2015 3:12:00 PM
Now it's my turn to say WOW!! James, your comments are a delight to read. Thank you! I appreciate the fact that you appreciate this collab. Note to James: your work is always a pleasure to read...and so are your co-writes:) Have a lovely weekend. // paul
Date: 6/4/2015 6:30:00 PM
Paul and Elieen, you two have outdone yourselves with this exceptional write. You made my heart swell with your enchanting expressiveness. Marvelous! Hugs
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Date: 6/5/2015 10:07:00 AM
Many thanks, Cecilia! Your comments are awesome and enchanting! May you have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul
Date: 6/4/2015 5:09:00 AM
Paul and Eileen, triolet is one among my favorite forms of poetry but I am having a hard time doing it.. =') but I tried though I think three times........... Your collaboration is a beautiful tapestry of romance.. I love the repeating lines ... superb! ~olive eloisa =')
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Date: 6/4/2015 1:03:00 PM
Many thanks Olive_eloi! Thank you for reading and enjoying our collaboration. Your comment "a beautiful tapestry of romance" is absolutely lovely. Triolet is not too difficult, but it is not easy either; I think that the topic and the form have to be tailor-made for each other. Hope you are keeping well. Hugs // paul
Date: 6/4/2015 1:02:00 AM
outstanding piece you both penned paul filled with beauty your pens jelled beautifully together
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Date: 6/4/2015 2:00:00 AM
Thank you Liam; your support is very much appreciated. You would know a thing or two about co-writes...you have been involved in several delightful ones these past months! All the best. // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 10:07:00 PM
BEST COLLAB ever, you two!!! Wow, I haven't seen one this good in a long time!! way to Tri o lay!!!!!
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Date: 6/4/2015 1:58:00 AM
Your lovely comments are music to my ears, Andrea:) So pleased that you enjoyed it! Thank you from the both of us! // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 2:46:00 PM
- A truly amazing co write from you and dear Eileen - (7) - Glows of romance ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/3/2015 3:41:00 PM
Thank you Anne Lise! The high rating is appreciated; love your comments, especially the "glows of radiance"!! Hugs // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 12:38:00 PM
Hello, Paul. Dropping by to thank you for helping me with this form. I'd never done one before and you coached me through it. :) I love working with you. You bring me joy. Blessings and hugs...Tomorrow is the D-day. Pray for me!
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Date: 6/3/2015 1:09:00 PM
Hi Eileen! You are welcome to stop by any time. To be honest you do not need coaching; you're a quick learner:) I'm glad you don't mind working with a grey-haired oldie:) Keeping you in mind for tomorrow; will be with you in spirit. All the best...hugs // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 12:00:00 PM
You two make beautiful music together with this romantic and sensual Triolet...
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Date: 6/3/2015 1:04:00 PM
Your comments are much appreciated, Joseph. Thank you! The secret is to keep the volume just right:) All the best. // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 11:28:00 AM
mellow, mellow... i'm all aglow!.. a wonderful piece from the both of you.. wow!... huggs
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Date: 6/3/2015 1:02:00 PM
I love your reaction, Nette! Thank you for the encouragement and support. hugs // paul
Date: 6/3/2015 5:30:00 AM
wonderful piece - you write so well together
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Date: 6/3/2015 10:57:00 AM
Glad that you enjoyed, Jack. Thank you for stopping by. All the best. // paul
Date: 6/2/2015 11:38:00 AM
Paul, a wonderful passionate write, you both did extremely well, the poem is seamless, it is hard to tell which poet is writing, amazing 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, shameonyou and for leaving such a supportive comment
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Date: 6/2/2015 2:44:00 PM
It is a pleasure to read your poems, Constance. It is also a pleasure to have you visiting and leaving lovely comments such as these....thank you! hugs // paul
Date: 6/2/2015 8:54:00 AM
Excellent. Outstanding and passionate write. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 6/2/2015 2:42:00 PM
Thank you Ravi; your lovely complimentary adjectives are very welcome! // paul
Date: 6/2/2015 8:43:00 AM
Wow on my first day back for a while,,i've read some wonderful collab's and this is way up there with the best of them...love the passion and inspiration this poem portrays
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Date: 6/2/2015 2:35:00 PM
So glad you found passion and inspiration in our offering, Harry! Thank you for stopping by. All the best. // paul
Date: 6/2/2015 7:25:00 AM
I have little knowledge of the form but I love the result. The two of you rocked this one!
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Date: 6/2/2015 2:21:00 PM
Thank you Richard. Both Eileen and I enjoyed working on this poem, and we are very pleased with the final outcome. All the best. // paul
Date: 6/1/2015 4:50:00 PM
Paul I have never seen a collaboration written with triolets and I know it was Eileen's first time at this form - this passionate poem is simply outstanding - congrats you you both:-) Hugs Jan xx 7
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Date: 6/1/2015 5:28:00 PM
Thank you for reading and enjoying, Jan. The triolet form proved to be a worthy tool to use for this romantic topic. It was Eileen's first attempt at Triolet, but she never shies away from a challenge! She is also a most willing collaborator. Hugs // paul
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