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A Thin Girth of Harsh Stones

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Our mind is overburdened, in desperate soothing need. Words may break one's bones, similar to twigs and stones. May seem defied, dissatisfied, and forced to recede. Precious stones, such as the Sapphire, have a deed. Distress and yearning are also in the field of groans. Our mind is overburdened, in desperate soothing need. While stones are severe, words are as terrible indeed. Fray words are alike swords, need threads and moans. May seem defied, dissatisfied, and forced to recede. The real mistake, however, is borne by those who deride. Words have left many marks on the minds and intones. Our mind is overburdened, in desperate soothing need. Numerous rows of marble sculpt depict our breed. Words might terrify; however, stones break bones. May seem defied, dissatisfied, and forced to recede. Only corroded stones now pay quiet praise and heed. I review the words, not the injuries and shattered bones. Our mind is overburdened, in desperate soothing need. May seem defied, dissatisfied, and forced to recede. 1st place contest win Written: August 8, 2021 A BRIAN STRAND you choose Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 8/10/2021 11:26:00 AM

An astounding write that too in a tough form. A winner for me. All the best for contest

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 8/9/2021 4:03:00 AM

I thought this contest prompt was very hard. You handled the theme well Lasaad. Good luck in the contest...Delice

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/9/2021 6:51:00 AM

Thank you so much Delice, your wonderful and delightful comment is so much appreciate. Blessings and kindest wishes

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/9/2021 2:04:00 AM

Not easy to write a villanelle but you came up tops. So smooth that full of imagery. Best for a win.

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/9/2021 6:50:00 AM

Thank you so much Victor, your kind words are so motivating and uplifting to me. Blessings and kindest regards

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/8/2021 4:06:00 PM

I like the form you chose, Lasaad. Wonderfully articulated poem. All the best.

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/8/2021 4:27:00 PM

Thank you so much, Vijay; your comment is so motivating and appreciated.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/8/2021 3:41:00 PM

Nicely done, Lasaad! So true: Words may break one's bones, similar to twigs and stones. As is: Our mind is overburdened, in desperate soothing need./ Our minds are more at peace when we are at peace with our words!

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/8/2021 3:51:00 PM

So true, Kim, Our minds are more at peace when we are at peace with our words! thanks for your delightful and insightful comment.

Dennis Spilchuk

Date: 8/8/2021 2:27:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your villanelle. Wish you the best in the contest. Take care.

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/8/2021 2:39:00 PM

Thank you for your gracious visit and nice comment Dennis.

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/8/2021 2:20:00 PM

Now this one is unequivocal Lasaad, overburdened minds yes indeed, and words do leave indelible unseen marks worse than most superficial scars, the pacing and placing of your lines are faultless to a tee, you make a difficult form read seamless, all the best in contest, cheers David

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/8/2021 2:30:00 PM

I really appreciate your excellent comment, David; I'm very gracious that you like my poem. I truly enjoyed your compliments; I know how meticulous you are regarding wording and structure, and I value your positive energy so much.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 8/8/2021 1:42:00 PM

What an inspiring villanelle, Lasaad. Exceptionally good writing! You have written a powerful poem on words. I enjoyed it immensely and wish you well in Anthony's contest.

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/8/2021 2:19:00 PM

I absolutely appreciated your wonderful comment; I know how much you adore the villanelle form and how meticulous you are in your execution, which is why I feel so comfortable reading your comments. Thank you, Milton, for sending me some positive vibes.