A Stone In the Cold 4

The thicket moves, my aim must not waver;
with strengthened arms I bend my bow of yew:
My eyes pierce the brush, intent to savor
the sights of a good hunt, an arrow true.

The bracken parts, rattling, empty sighs;
My draw fingers quake from the constant chill.
My quarries' breath floats to the clouded sky,
my own breath muffled as I track my kill.

Overhead, an arrow in deadly arc
speeds toward the bear I'm seeking, still as stone;
A shadow moves, the arrow strikes its mark.
The hand that loosed the shaft was not my own.

I am a man shadowed; death comes knocking:
The hunter hunted; the past comes stalking.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2014 at 5:45 PM
Isn't it nice to see this one finally judged? Congrats on your win. BTW, I have asked Craig to let me know if all lines in his sonnet form need to have same syllable number or not. Haven't heard back from him yet. It should be easy to fix my lines if it is not ok to do.
Lamoureux Avatar
March 16, 2014 at 9:38 AM
Clever piece, masterfully crafted.
Kendrick Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 10:14 AM
Way to go ...Congrats..Sara
Stephens Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 8:31 AM
Hi, Congrats on your worthy win. I read this in eager anticipation of what was going to happen next. I could see the 'breath floats to the clouded sky' combined with 'muffled breath'. Descriptive and a very clever twist at the end. Leaving an interesting scenario to taunt the imagination. Well done Regards Theresa xx
Callus Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 4:57 AM
Very good poem with a clever twist at the end. congrats on win // paul
Mehta Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 2:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine with beautiful sonnet, Isaiah
A  Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 1:11 AM
Hi, Isaiah, , Congratulations, on your Hunt for a Sonnet Gem. Awesomely done. ~SKAT~
Hamilton Avatar
February 17, 2014 at 11:04 AM
superb Isaiah wonderful addition to the crown congrats on being featured hugs
Walker  Avatar
February 16, 2014 at 6:47 PM
Isiah, a tall tale to be told... Well written... Verlena
Bolton Avatar
February 16, 2014 at 2:20 PM
Eh . . . Turn about is fair play I'd say.
Hamilton Avatar
February 14, 2014 at 9:12 AM
very different Isaiah with a great twist love it Kudos hugs
Phillips Avatar
February 2, 2014 at 9:43 AM
Nice poem with a surprising twist towards the end.
Dietrich Avatar
January 30, 2014 at 4:24 PM
Gosh, this is nifty sonnet writing!! I noticed you were one of those working on part four of the crown, right? I wish I had the time to spend over at Deb's blog, but it all looks so complex and I have so little time. I am getting scared to have to do this contest because I hate the topic of hunting and though I like your sonnet writing, I just don't like the general topic of the complete crown! Oh boy, I almost wish I didn't say I would try it. haha
Bauer Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 4:44 PM
intriguing poem, well done! i very much enjoyed this...
Gorelick Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 2:41 PM
Wow, I was surprised at the ending. This is great...BG
Williams Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 1:24 PM
Isaiah I like this version a lot, it fits the theme very well...
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