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A Slip Which Changed My Fate

I slipped on a teardrop and landed in a pair of arms, warm and with muscles banded. I knew not this was to be the last drop which like magic wand would make time stop. Crying and giggling, I stood like a moron while his eyes queried if I was done. In a maze, I remembered some old pun And knew with him life will now be fun! Date: 20/06/16 For contest: Cindi Rockwell, I slipped on a teardrop and landed…

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Joe Dimino

Date: 6/27/2016 10:30:00 PM

To and know you will be caught is beautiful! Lovely work!

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 6/28/2016 12:15:00 PM

:D..Thanks a lot!

David Smith

Date: 6/27/2016 8:07:00 AM

Great words to capture the moment. David from NZ

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 6/27/2016 8:35:00 AM

Thanks...you see it like this. I'm glad. Never mind it was not placed for the contest but I liked it when I wrote it. :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/26/2016 8:26:00 AM

Sunita, this is SO GOOD. You seem to be an accomplished writer. ;) Linda

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 6/27/2016 8:05:00 AM

Thanks...you are making me blush reading this...I write novel and trying poetry since only a month! But do love poetry. Thanks again Linda for the encouraging words and support extended...I really appreciated it. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/23/2016 11:28:00 AM

- So lovely written for this contest, Sunita :) - Good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 6/23/2016 11:31:00 AM

Thanks my dear for your ever encouraging words. Kind of you.:)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 6/22/2016 2:28:00 AM

Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 6/23/2016 11:30:00 AM

Thanks Ravi, these are nice words. :)

Messoh Vincent

Date: 6/21/2016 10:05:00 PM

What a simplified way you express the complex subject of love..... You paint it so beautiful till I begin to envy you my dear. hugs.... hugs...... and more hugs :) :) :) A great piece for the contest; I wish you the best dear.

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/16/2017 12:35:00 PM

Thanks a lot Vincent, I really appreciate your warm and sincere words. I'm just a beginner and learn from you all.:D