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A Sensual Rasp

In the sometimes so gloomy mornings I think of you Outside shrouds of water drape themselves Around formless people who hurry with their umbrellas, incomplete rooms that offer only transitory shelter. I think of you You, to my unseeing eyes, so warm, so mocha in your Kona Bean exoticity with the raspy quality that warms both of our asthmatic voices to sensually (Did no one ever notice how erotically asthmatic voices can sound?) I think of you I dream you around my lonely existence, fold you over my desk in a pose that smiles right into my emerald eyes In such breathtaking ways that only my inhaler can save me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Duet Avatar
March 1, 2020 at 8:01 PM
Beautifully written, Darren. Full of emotion...and longing and, yeah, that raspy voice can be so sexy!
Godwin Avatar
March 4, 2017 at 11:46 AM
Creativity plus! Oh, the images your pen brings to life. Love ya ... CayCay
White Avatar
March 4, 2017 at 12:49 PM
Love you too CayCay :)
Vaso Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 8:39 PM
I believe poetic genius is being tossed around! That makes 2 of us!!!!!!!!! :) This is so so good Darren!
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 11:17 PM
Hah Artur, thank you so much :)
Ella Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 8:00 PM
You have written this so that we can actually hear the sensual in asthma. Wow! so HOT!
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 11:18 PM
Hot is the right word, and yeah!
Ricci Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 1:33 PM
Darren you have composed and created yet another entry that must be read out loud with emphasis. There is so much beauty that lies within your words and theme. The emotive element is ever present. A true honor to read. And yes, the repetition line of "I think of you" was utilized and executed marvelously.
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 1:43 PM
Lisa, thank you for all the nice comments you make on my poems. I am honoured and very happy that you like to read my poems. I am very fond of repetitive lines, and I always need to restrain myself a little bit when using them :)
Toluwalope Gideon Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 11:53 AM
Whao! This is remarkable. Darren, you are a creative genius. A big 7.
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 11:56 AM
Thank you Adeniji! :)
Green Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 9:25 AM
This was fantastic Darren. I especially loved the line about how asthmatic voice sound erotic. I never thought of it that way before but, you are right. :) Really nicely done my friend.
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 9:29 AM
I am absolutely right my friend, and ooohhhh does my boyfriend sound sexy ;)
Onclaud Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 7:44 AM
you rock this, darren.. i have asthma every now and then, so that gives me a sensual drawl... beautiful work!..huggs
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 8:01 AM
It really does :D My voice has it, but oh boy does my boyfriend sound sexy hahaha. When he feels bad, I love listening to him, how awful! (To my defence, he has the same with me)
Vincent Marra Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 7:37 AM
Well crafted.. Love the imagery
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 7:59 AM
Thank you so much Tomas!
Allison Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 7:23 AM
beautiful and romantic ..got to say you make the asthmatic voice so soooo sexy in your lines!:-) hugs jan xx
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 7:25 AM
Hahaha, isn't it lovely? ;)
Smith Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 6:36 AM
Very romantic my friend
White Avatar
March 2, 2017 at 6:42 AM
Isn't it ;)
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