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A Sense of Emptiness

Yes the crystal shattered It was empty so it never mattered Saved for a wedding day Carefully put away “Just you wait” she would say But like her heart the pieces were scattered She was a pretty girl Smitten by a handsome devil named Earl Oh how he made her purr His chest hair soft as fur Sadly not just with her To a swine you should never give a pearl He made her insides sing Yet it was only heartache he would bring He pretended his love was a gift from above She thought she was his dove But sadly there would be no wedding ring Her breasts he did caress after carefully removing her dress She had hoped to be blessed Only body caressed Oh why was she impressed? She desired Love but found emptiness Written January 5th, 2017 for Broken Wings’ Rhyme Content.

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Fj Thomas

Date: 3/26/2018 1:07:00 PM

Back again... it's a sad tale but stands through time.

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 3/3/2018 5:50:00 AM

Hi Richard , i sent you soup mail

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 3/3/2018 5:44:00 AM

A poem with powerful meaning. Love is something higher than physical and body touch.......Love is a scared thing.... I like all the lines especially your ending note.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/3/2018 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Muhammad.:0)

Fj Thomas

Date: 1/25/2018 9:08:00 AM

An old and repeated tale; but never so beautifully. Strokes the heart and mind. Maybe ole Earl was the recipient of my Reaper poem's objective lol. Lovely as always Rick.

Poet Tacito

Date: 1/15/2018 1:28:00 PM

This has some damn fine formatting, but MY GAWD what a piercing last line!

Judith S

Date: 1/14/2018 8:22:00 PM

First to comment ... and last to wish you Congrats!!! :) I loved this one! Happy to see it on the Win list!!! ~Judy

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/15/2018 9:24:00 AM

Thanks Judy, I appreciate you coming back.

Emile Pinet

Date: 1/12/2018 9:17:00 AM

Very powerful emotions are allowed to burn their way through your thoughts and smolder within our heart. Despair and longing join ranks and pull the reader along a dark tunnel of hopelessness. Emile.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/12/2018 9:45:00 AM

Thanks for your thoughtful comment Emile.

Constance La France

Date: 1/12/2018 8:18:00 AM

Richard, congratulations on your win in my contest. Your write is wonderful, I like how it tells a story in rhyme and I like the layout too. Well done !

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/12/2018 8:39:00 AM

Thanks.

Lu Loo

Date: 1/12/2018 5:47:00 AM

beautiful poem dear Richard congrats :)-luloo

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/12/2018 8:30:00 AM

Thanks Laura.

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/11/2018 11:19:00 PM

Wonderful poem, Richard. Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/12/2018 8:30:00 AM

Thanks Line.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/11/2018 10:58:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your win, Richard .. Hugs Eve ~`*

Carole Duet

Date: 1/11/2018 12:07:00 AM

This is so great, Richard, and the "shape" of it is a scream! So clever you are. Your poetry seems to have such a comical bent to it. My grandfather used to write the same way. Loved it and definitely another fav for me. Carole :D

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/11/2018 8:39:00 AM

You are kind Carol.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/10/2018 9:37:00 PM

Brenda is right, man clear the hair now a days. Nice write , Richard, enjoyed reading. Hugs Eve

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/11/2018 8:27:00 AM

Thanks Eve.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/9/2018 9:01:00 AM

I chose the same theme, Richard, though totally different subject matter:) great poem:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/11/2018 8:14:00 AM

I like what you did with yours.

Chris Hagy

Date: 1/7/2018 2:54:00 PM

I am simply impressed with the "art" or shape of this write!... and hearts certainly do shatter like glass sometimes. Good thing that unlike the crystal, hearts can be mended :) Have a good one

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/8/2018 11:19:00 AM

Ha ha, thanks Chris.

Anna Hopper

Date: 1/6/2018 5:47:00 PM

Boobs! Awesome!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 5:51:00 PM

These are a few of my favorite things! Sorry I couldn't resist.;0)

Anna Hopper

Date: 1/6/2018 5:46:00 PM

“Cuz Earl had to die!” Lmao excuse a Ga. girl. Great poem! Your writes are always a treat!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 5:52:00 PM

Thanks Anna, Earle would certainly be deserving.

Becca Teagan

Date: 1/6/2018 4:46:00 PM

hah I love the way the words form a certain shape :) Never give your pearl to swine, that is for sure. Nice one, Rick.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 4:52:00 PM

I'm being a bit naughty! Thanks for the visit Becca.

John Gondolf

Date: 1/6/2018 4:45:00 PM

Nicely written, Richard. Tow different people with very different objectives. Best of luck in the contest. John

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 4:52:00 PM

Thanks John. ;0)

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/6/2018 12:22:00 PM

Your write is sadly beautiful, Richard. Your insight along with your lovely rhythm and rhymes tells a tale of romantic woe that is beautifully expressed in a shapely poem. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 3:39:00 PM

Thanks Susan, I'm please you dropped by.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 1/6/2018 11:35:00 AM

This is fabulously penned. This poem sized my attention. Excellent!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 3:39:00 PM

Thanks Afolabi.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 1/5/2018 8:10:00 PM

This is simply fantastic! Love the shape of the poem, the rhyme scheme and the content! Best for a win, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2018 11:06:00 AM

Thanks Rhoda. ;0)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/5/2018 4:47:00 PM

I love the unique design..a fun story, until I got to the emptiness..then it took turn to expose the phony man.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2018 6:45:00 PM

Thanks for the visit Vijay.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 1/5/2018 3:21:00 PM

Cool flowing rhymes and shape poem, Richard. Smartly told story by your insightful pen. Happy New Year, bruh. Really loved the last stanza. Splendid poetry. Love and peace always.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2018 6:46:00 PM

I hope your year has started well Freddie. Love and peace back to you dear friend.

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/5/2018 12:49:00 PM

Very interesting shape, given the last verse. Well done, Richard. GL

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/5/2018 1:38:00 PM

Ha ha, you are the first to notice. :0)